MarvJay1009 vs .Barz Of Steel.
 

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No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No D/r votes, which means no votes will be accepted from NewKid

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Check in by: 05-28-05 at 02:51 PM

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.Barz Of Steel. has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-28-05 02:34 PM.

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MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-28-05 02:41 PM.

me fake? no fam marv is real,barz u a broad 4real.
u aint got barz of steel u come on rv lookin 4 bars to steal.
think u sicker than i,dick its a lie nobody say u spit hotter.
got blue print in ya sig & pro. so y u not on da blue print roster?*
he da type dat a wait til da cops cum,u be aimin ya glock son.
but ya slugz like "scared qb's" cuzz they stay in ya "shot gun".
in queens u could find marv,but tell me who's in dis guy's squad?.
ummm nobody its like a "empty jail" aint "no one behind BaRZ".
needed a mc 2 battle why marv,im 2 sick 4 u fam all my lines hard.
ima merk u no1 cant "save em from my flow" not even "life guards".
u got bars but da diffrence im sicka,cant believe dis kid is a spitta.
u suck only time u'll "drop a SiNGLE" is when u "tippin a stripper".


*he got da blue print in his sig and profile but he aint on da roster


everything else u should get

Lets get this poppin...

Marv is garbage so, he'll lose before he starts to flow
Cuz he could be a "Clumbsy Miner".................................
................................And still not "Drop Bars Of Gold"
The hardest? How, when like "Big Al's" ya "Bars Is Gay"
And I'm "Dope, Man".................................................. ........
........So I've been known to "Smoke A Marvelous Jay" *
I'm the best, so why should I give a fuck what this punk say
When even the "Alphabet" knows that "I" am "Above J(ay)" **
There's no stoppin' this dude, face it, I'm just hotter than you
Because you couldn't "Spit Sick" if you were "Vomiting Food"
Marv poppin' a tool? Naw, he come's with baby beef
Because this kid is "Softer Than The Shit That Babies Eat!"
I've got crazy heat, you acting tough like your gat would bust
But I'll leave your "Stomach On The Ground" like a "Bad Push-Up!"



Explanations:

* Dope, man=Dopeman, who is the supplier of weed in a hood...Smoke a Marvelous J(ay) refers to smoking weed

** The letter 'I' is right above the letter 'J'


Lets get some votes!!!

LOL at the blueprint roster line tho fam...




Other than that, hot verse

well i check da roster and u wasn't on it....................

Uppin for some votes on this shit!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Uppin this shit for some fuckin votes...

Uppin this shit for some votes

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To the roof bitches!

This was feedback posted for .Barz Of Steel.
 

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Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

Marv is garbage so, he'll lose before he starts to flow
Cuz he could be a "Clumbsy Miner".................................
................................And still not "Drop Bars Of Gold"
The hardest? How, when like "Big Al's" ya "Bars Is Gay"
And I'm "Dope, Man".................................................. ........
........So I've been known to "Smoke A Marvelous Jay" *
I'm the best, so why should I give a fuck what this punk say
When even the "Alphabet" knows that "I" am "Above J(ay)" **
There's no stoppin' this dude, face it, I'm just hotter than you
Because you couldn't "Spit Sick" if you were "Vomiting Food"
Marv poppin' a tool? Naw, he come's with baby beef
Because this kid is "Softer Than The Shit That Babies Eat!"
I've got crazy heat, you acting tough like your gat would bust
But I'll leave your "Stomach On The Ground" like a "Bad Push-Up!"

Yo Nice Verse, Punchez Wuz Good, Flow Wuz Rite On Point Dawg, Nuthin Wuz Basic, Nuthin Wuz Played, Each Line Had Somewhat Ov An Effect, Only Thang Wrong Wit'cho Verse Iz Da ''Dopeman'' Suppliez Crack & Cocaine Dawg! But Still, Good Hard Hittin Verse

me fake? no fam marv is real,barz u a broad 4real.
u aint got barz of steel u come on rv lookin 4 bars to steal.
think u sicker than i,dick its a lie nobody say u spit hotter.
got blue print in ya sig & pro. so y u not on da blue print roster?*
he da type dat a wait til da cops cum,u be aimin ya glock son.
but ya slugz like "scared qb's" cuzz they stay in ya "shot gun".
in queens u could find marv,but tell me who's in dis guy's squad?.
ummm nobody its like a "empty jail" aint "no one behind BaRZ".
needed a mc 2 battle why marv,im 2 sick 4 u fam all my lines hard.
ima merk u no1 cant "save em from my flow" not even "life guards".
u got bars but da diffrence im sicka,cant believe dis kid is a spitta.
u suck only time u'll "drop a SiNGLE" is when u "tippin a stripper".

Dope Verse, Lacked Da Personalz Dat Barz Of Steel Had, Yo Punchez Wuz Tite Tho, U Wuz Hittin Real Hard Wid Em Dawg, Good Creative Wordplay Frum Both, Juz Think Dat Barz Ov Steel Had Mo Consistancy In Da Flow & Disses So He Gets Mah Vote

Iight 1-0 uppin this shit for some more votes good looks KhAoZ

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

Ayo waz up man.....I beleivbe u took dis battle......Both had nice punches and was evened out in all departemnts by my view except on one thing.......Jay u just had one line that threw off da feel of ya flow so thats wat broke u.....sorry man no hate u did good both people did just Barz lines flew out abit better both keep elevatin

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Blah, not the strongest battle verse from you marv, expected alot better, wordplay was aight for the most part, you lacked personals tho,aight aight you played off his name, but thats about it, Barz you had some dope rhymes man, nice metaphours in ya verse, flow was right on point, u hit harder with some personals an the punches in the battle was pretty damn evenly matched

my vote goes too barz because he hit harder with some personals

hit up my battle with E.C and drop a vote

Vote switched

I dont have enough posts to vote on your battle with EC...But thanx for the vote...

Uppin to get this shit closed...

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

V/.barz of steel. ......this was a good battle....but barz gets my vote....cause he came wit good punchs an personals....his structure was also good....his punchs were used creatively an had good word play.....Marv...u came wit a good verse but it seemed like u came to lightly i seen better from u the closer was played ur structure was good but punchs werent there....No hate.....RETURN THE FAOVR(or i will get this vote removed)..http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=189169
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Opener=B
Closer=B
Structure=Tie
Punchs=B
multi's=Tie none really
personals=B
Wordplay=B
vocab=B
Overall=.Barz of steel.

Uppin Thru the Fucking Roof...

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

Barz of Steel
well this was a decent battle.. and barz of steel really caught me off guard on this one.. i thought he was just some newb.. and he pretty much came with a fire verse.. the flow was on point the whole way thru.. u had some hard hitting punches and some punches that were pretty played.. the bad push up line was pretty good and the bars of gold line was also pretty good ur set up lines were good cause they were always relevent to the up coming punchline...

MarJay
I know u can come much hotter then this.. i think u underestimated this nigga.. u really had no punches u just had statements/personals.. ur flow was iight.. ur structured was a little stretched.. and i never really enjoy reading ur battles because of the way you "Ebonic Type" but other then that.. ur verse was decent but just not good enough to come up with the win on this one..

No Hate V/Barz of Steel

Iight uppin thanx for the vote uppin this shit!!!!!!!!!!

LMAO at you getting this reopened...

Uppin for another vote...

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u still got like 3 unexplained votes...wow

This was feedback posted for .Barz Of Steel.
 

winner barz:
Marv is garbage so, he'll lose before he starts to flow
Cuz he could be a "Clumbsy Miner".................................
................................And still not "Drop Bars Of Gold"
//nice pun must admit i liked that 7/10
The hardest? How, when like "Big Al's" ya "Bars Is Gay"
//hmm ropey @ best, know what u sayin, could have sed it better 3/10
And I'm "Dope, Man".................................................. ........
........So I've been known to "Smoke A Marvelous Jay" *
//nice pun, superb one of my fave 8/10
I'm the best, so why should I give a fuck what this punk say
When even the "Alphabet" knows that "I" am "Above J(ay)" **
//OK, not the greatest not the worst rhyme 7/10
There's no stoppin' this dude, face it, I'm just hotter than you
Because you couldn't "Spit Sick" if you were "Vomiting Food"
//10/10 another good use of wordplay
Marv poppin' a tool? Naw, he come's with baby beef
Because this kid is "Softer Than The Shit That Babies Eat!"
//another hot 1 8/10
I've got crazy heat, you acting tough like your gat would bust
But I'll leave your "Stomach On The Ground" like a "Bad Push-Up!"
//relatively weak finisher compared to the rest 5/10


me fake? no fam marv is real,barz u a broad 4real.
u aint got barz of steel u come on rv lookin 4 bars to steal.
nice opener 6/10
think u sicker than i,dick its a lie nobody say u spit hotter.
got blue print in ya sig & pro. so y u not on da blue print roster?*
//personal bonuc 9/10
he da type dat a wait til da cops cum,u be aimin ya glock son.
but ya slugz like "scared qb's" cuzz they stay in ya "shot gun".
//nice, not bad 8/10
in queens u could find marv,but tell me who's in dis guy's squad?.
ummm nobody its like a "empty jail" aint "no one behind BaRZ".
//big drop, personal again 9/10
needed a mc 2 battle why marv,im 2 sick 4 u fam all my lines hard.
ima merk u no1 cant "save em from my flow" not even "life guards".
//not the most original line here though :( 3/10
u got bars but da diffrence im sicka,cant believe dis kid is a spitta.
u suck only time u'll "drop a SiNGLE" is when u "tippin a stripper".
//nice finish Jay 9/10

overall i preferred bar's drop, but thtas not to say that marvs was any less good, i dont think he deserves this loss margin cos i was borderline, but to be honest dog, barz had more hard hits, jay you did have a cold finish going for you

all honest votez,
arch out

This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

pollz.............................................

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SICK AZZ VERSE BARZ!n same 2 you MARV!DAYUM but im just checkin dem pollz!
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Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

good lord almighty straight up murder...

ok to marv... i read yours and liked it and i was feeling it .... but no offense but you had nothing on this cats shit.. this is good to see some creative shit like what ya just dropped barz in my opinion i think this was a straight up knock out plain and simple. he had you at every angle vocab metas punches.. personals.. but hey on the bright side.. now we get to see marv learn from this battle and get better at what he doing... but barz you murdered this cat.. nice nice job

Vote//Barz of Steel