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Dizzee Rascal vs Celerity
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Just 5 bars (10 lines since theres been previous confusion) No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 06-02-05 at 03:37 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
CeleriTy has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-30-05 09:33 PM.
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Dizzee Rascal has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-31-05 04:42 AM.
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wreck with text? nah, you just a wreck with text :thumbup:I'll have you 'scrambling for your life' like imprisoned breakfast chefs start re-thinking your timing, I laugh at your thoughts of besting me when I ran over your brain I must’ve jogged your memory i'll shred till I slice through... pound till your rotten pound till your chest is caved in as deep as Bin Laden tearing through... I hate your guts, I got them on my stitching so I'll give you a dirty look like unqualified cosmeticians watch me pin him, then pin my ribbon... just bow and take the L the loss gots you kicking yourself like you tore your ACL |
Ok Celerity hence the cell lines...
Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label ya seem strange cus, like physcho porn stars i maime pus Quick to aim cus? Disect this herb with a B/bee still wouldn't be famous.. Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists Hope ya dont choke, embarrassed so much go ahead try and gloat Ima showboat, throwing Cell 'of verse' how i break this choir boys throat Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE"* *Cellulose is the containment of a cell |
Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
Dizzee Rascal= Real Decent Wordplay. Culd Ov Used Sum Better Personal [ur juz lucky he didnt hit wit any personals either] ..Good Vocab & Flow Thru Out, Nice Consistant Drop, Wuz Feelin Da Punz 4 Da Most Part, Few Lines Were Stretched A Lil, But Datz Iight, It Didnt Really Take Da Sting Out Ov Ya Puns & Disses, Good Job Man, & Props 4 Da ''Suicidle Buddist'' Bar, Nice Creativity Celerity= Culd Ov Worded A Few Lines Better Lyke Da ''Vesting Me'' Line, U Had Alot Ov Good Creative Ideas, But Da Use Ov Wordplay In Ya' Ideas Iznt Da Best I Seen Frum U Dawg. Few Decent Disses, Both Verses Lacked Real Personals Tho'...So Dat Wuzza Lil Dissapointing. Consistancy Wuz A Lil Off Frum Yall Two Also, But Dizzee Had Da Better Wordplay & Harder Hitting Punz, Even Tho If Celerity Wuld Ov Used A Few Decent Personals & Worded Sum Ov Da Punz Better, He Probably Wuld Ov Took Da Win Vote=Dizzee Rascal+Better Wordplay & More Consistancy In Da Punchlinez [both were stretched in places but dats kool i guess, no hate!...much propps, good job both] Plz Return Da Favor In Da Link Below Or Vote Will B Removed http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=193452 |
Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
ight u wanted feed man so here is some feed for ya: Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label ^^ nice concept it couldav been worded a bit better tho ya seem strange cus, like physcho porn stars i maime pus Quick to aim cus? Disect this herb with a B/bee still wouldn't be famous.. ^^ i dont really get that, maybe you should explain Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists ^^ lol this was good.. try to match up syllable count though Hope ya dont choke, embarrassed so much go ahead try and gloat Ima showboat, throwing Cell 'of verse' how i break this choir boys throat ^^ ok i spose not really a hard hitting punch Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE"* ^^ nice closure this was dope... good wording aswell... ight well here is the breakdown:: i feel that you have alot of potential u got alot of skills that are wating to be released or sum shit... try to work of your syllable count for a start so the structure is good and it flows, other than that i cant really direct you on punches coz you already heading in the right direcrtion... be original when it comes to thinking of punches so you dont get hated on till they are played, remember to word your punches good so they come out even doper... ight hope this helps... i aint gonna vote coz its too close to call fam g'luck pzzzz |
Thanks for all the feed i forgot to add in my explanations put a B in the middle of cele(b)rity
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This was feedback posted for Dizzee Rascal
checkin on fam.........................................
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This should be upped
Swooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooosh |
Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
dizzee: Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label ^^^^GOOD OPENER.... ya seem strange cus, like physcho porn stars i maime pus Quick to aim cus? Disect this herb with a B/bee still wouldn't be famous.. ^^^FLOW/MULTIS WAS TIGHT HERE...PUNCHLINE WASN'T ALL ALL DAT TUFF THO Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists ^^^LOL...VERY ORIGINAL I WAS FEELIN DIS Hope ya dont choke, embarrassed so much go ahead try and gloat Ima showboat, throwing Cell 'of verse' how i break this choir boys throat ^^^NAH Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE ^^^DECENT CLOSER... celerity: wreck with text? nah, you just a wreck with text I'll have you 'scrambling for your life' like imprisoned breakfast chefs ^^^GOOD EOPENR...NICE FLOW AND DA PUNCH HIT GOOD start re-thinking your timing, I laugh at your thoughts of besting me when I ran over your brain I must’ve jogged your memory ^^UHHH I NEVA SEEN DIS...GOOD i'll shred till I slice through... pound till your rotten pound till your chest is caved in as deep as Bin Laden ^^DECENT tearing through... I hate your guts, I got them on my stitching so I'll give you a dirty look like unqualified cosmeticians ^^^LOL...DOPE watch me pin him, then pin my ribbon... just bow and take the L the loss gots you kicking yourself like you tore your ACL ^^^DECENT CLOSER... IT ALL COMES DOWN 2 PERSONALS CUZZ DA PUNCHES WERE EVEN AND DIZZEE CAME WITH SOME PERSONALS...CLERERITY YA VERSE WAS HOT BUT IT LOOKED PRE WRITTEN CUZZ U DIDN'T HAVE ANY PERSONALS V/DIZZEE Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
*my name is dizzy diz i handle my biz* lol
Is that a ko then? |
Or is it first to 5 im not sure on this site, is that how the record is updated?
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its first to five.. and all of those votes will be DQ'ed... most likely. cause this is massive DR.. because u got KILLLED.. sorry cuz but its the truth
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Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE"* vs tearing through... I hate your guts, I got them on my stitching so I'll give you a dirty look like unqualified cosmeticians dat is what dis shit came down to ta me. dizze rascal came wit some witty personalz and punchez dat hit hard. a lot of celerity shit i had seen before like dat jogging the memory, scrambling, and cave linez. it came down to who had more creativity in dere punchez, and dizzee had dat so thatz why dat nigga getz my vote. vote - dizzee rascal please hit up da battle in my sig nigga |
Man thats 4 votes for me may i add non are dr since im new to the site u silly turnip
And ur attempt at swaying, its obvious i killed u? damn man ur not that nice serious Lets up this then and please dont claim for them to be removed because that would be the ultimate bitch move, sorry if it may endup with me giving u first los, if i win that is, but man thats life man up |
Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
wreck with text? nah, you just a wreck with text I'll have you 'scrambling for your life' like imprisoned breakfast chefs ^^^ight ...Nothin special start re-thinking your timing, I laugh at your thoughts of besting me when I ran over your brain I must’ve jogged your memory ^^^that was ight...played heard it before... i'll shred till I slice through... pound till your rotten pound till your chest is caved in as deep as Bin Laden ^^^^No....bin laden lines played.... tearing through... I hate your guts, I got them on my stitching so I'll give you a dirty look like unqualified cosmeticians ^^^Good.... watch me pin him, then pin my ribbon... just bow and take the L the loss gots you kicking yourself like you tore your ACL ^^^Ight not bad closer.... Cel u had an ight verse no personals punchs not to creative....good structure....but u werent consistent trought out.... Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label ^^^Good opener.... ya seem strange cus, like physcho porn stars i maime pus Quick to aim cus? Disect this herb with a B/bee still wouldn't be famous.. ^^^ight not bad... Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists ^^^Good,this one was nice Hope ya dont choke, embarrassed so much go ahead try and gloat Ima showboat, throwing Cell 'of verse' how i break this choir boys throat ^^^^Ight solid line.. Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE"* ^^^Good closer.... Dizzee u came wit a stronger verse better punchs some personals...little stretched but u made up for it....u get my vote for stronger punchs..... .....RETURN THE FAOVR..(or never receive an honest vote from me agian)V/Dizzee Rascal |
Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
ok this was a tight battle both had punches that were packin though cele had the better punches but none were personals so dizze got it and then the flow was both for yall and the lines were both equally in overall the battle was equally but my v/ goes to dizee cuz it seemed that his punches were personal while celerity didnt even mention his name but both were good my vote goes to dizzee Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Lets up this people...............................
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Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label ^^weak opener ya seem strange cus, like physcho porn stars i maime pus Quick to aim cus? Disect this herb with a B/bee still wouldn't be famous.. ^^still weak Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists ^^^decent Hope ya dont choke, embarrassed so much go ahead try and gloat Ima showboat, throwing Cell 'of verse' how i break this choir boys throat ^^OK Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE ^^best line,beautiful wordplay Conclusion-Ur starting of the verse was weak.But it just got better and better as it went on.That last line was one of the best I've seen.Nice verse. wreck with text? nah, you just a wreck with text I'll have you 'scrambling for your life' like imprisoned breakfast chefs ^^decent start re-thinking your timing, I laugh at your thoughts of besting me when I ran over your brain I must’ve jogged your memory ^^nah,played i'll shred till I slice through... pound till your rotten pound till your chest is caved in as deep as Bin Laden ^^again...played tearing through... I hate your guts, I got them on my stitching so I'll give you a dirty look like unqualified cosmeticians ^^decent watch me pin him, then pin my ribbon... just bow and take the L the loss gots you kicking yourself like you tore your ACL ^^simple Vote-Some ur punchlines were adequate...but not anything st8.Ur flow was bassically the same as dizzie.Ur punchlines lack complexity which rascal had. Vote-dizzie rascal http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193872 |
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