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ya its me whateva
steppin up my game my mind is elevated
gonna stay that way im forever contemplating new ways to run all these bitches out im not scared to let it be known i knock a nigga out da only female prepared to take ova da south imma ride out like jesse james clear da way im bout to make flames to me every nigga one in da same so if u want some get some just like da crazy train if u think u can get on my level get at me imma leave ya blind and disheveled gonna b like da devil let ya ass burn in hell eatin bitches alive cant u tell imma make ya head ring like a church bell' |
dang i thought people on dis site was supposed to give feedback
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not bad if it's your first drop. Your flow wasn't too bad. Jus work a lil bit on your structure, and upp your vocab. But overal, not bad, ma. keep droppin' and elevatin'. pc one.
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thanks for the feedback whats RTF
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^^^^it means return the favour.
anyway the structure was kinda difficult to follow and the vocab was simple, however it wasn't a bad piece considering your a newbie. Your structure, flow, vocab etc. will improve with time so don't feel discouraged cos no one's saying it was hot. After all if people did that for every piece, how would you know what your weak points are? And how would you be able to elevate? Anyway keep at it and you will gradually elevate. Peace Can you leave some feedback on the open mic pieces in my link? |
aight i gotcha thanks
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can you give me some ideas on upping my stucture
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steppin up my game my mind is elevated
gonna stay that way im forever contemplating new ways to run all these bitches out im not scared to let it be known i knock a nigga out ^aiight this is how you wrote it, right? try it like this: steppin up my game my mind is elevated gonna stay that way, im forever contemplating new ways to run all these bitches out im not scared to let it be known,i knock a nigga out Like when you rhyme you're like (letters stand for the end word of each line. If they the same letter, it means it rhymes): xxxxx-xxxxxA xxxxB xxxxA Try for: xxxxx-xxxxxA xxxxx-xxxxxA ^like try for that. HArd to explain, but you get the jist of it? |
aight i think i get what u sayin imma keep tryin fa sho thanks for ya help tho good lookin out
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^no prob, ma. anytime... pc one.
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yer thats how you wanna do it, gud piece, jus work on how its set out. peace |
yo to help ure structure....remember syllables helped me alot...remember to RTF
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Use the tutorials, grasshopper.
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what tutorials?
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Bottom of the main page with all the forums listed.
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