Ghost vs .Barz of Steel.
 

Battle Rules:

8-14 UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No DCK RIDIN VOTES
NO BITING EITHER
Straight Battle!Know What I Mean!Lil bit Of Everything (Ex:PUNCHES,METAZ,PERSONALZ,...)

Minimum posts to vote: [b]50

Check in by: 06-14-05 at 01:27 AM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

Ghost has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-11-05 01:28 AM.

Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election
Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-
Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!
Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti
Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz

yo BARZ homie my badi was gettin caught up n shyt!my COMP RUNNIN slow!but i was typin my verse n when i fckin CLICKED POST VERSE! it said -Thread-Closed-!n i CANT FCKIN BELIEVE I GOT A LOSS FOR SOME STUPID BULLSHYT!but i wanna beat ya Fair n Square!so spit the same verse you posted in the last battle!GOOD LUCK!,LOL

Hey its all good fam lets just do it again iight??

.Barz Of Steel. has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-11-05 09:57 AM.

Good Verse Homie Well Ima Roll For A Lil Bit!N We Need Them Vote So UPPN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Word you to famz nice verse! Uppin this shit for some votes!

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election
6/10...Nice 2nd Line
Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-
6.5/10...Good Shit Both Lines Were Straight
Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!
5.5/10...Nothin 2 Serious Rite Here
Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti
5/10...You Not Really Dissin Him Here Fam
Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz
7/10...Nice Close But Da 2nd Line Was Strected

Good Verse...At Some Parts You Wasnt Dissin Dude Tho, Dats Da Only Bad Thing About This


I done tore this kid, lyrics swarmed this bitch
And please, you about as street, as a forest is
7/10...Nice Opener Good Meta
So dawg, don't be stupid, ya tough talk'll get beat stupid
Plus ya 'Tough Guy Front' is "Ghost" cuz I "See Thru It"
7/10...Anotha Good Line, Played On His Name
I'll put the nine to ya melon and lungs, this fella's a thug?
How? When he wouldn't "Lick A Shot" with the "Shell On His Tongue"
7.5/10...Lol Good Humor
So guy stop, this guy's hot? This kid'll get five shots
That'll leave his "casket in the clouds" Thats what I call a "Sky Box"
8/10...Tight Open Line & Closin Line
All your punches are half baked, He says he's real, but this cat's fake
So I'll leave this kid's "Body Sitting In a Bag" Like a "Sack Race"
6.5/10....Basic But Nice
This ho will get killed, how is this kid flowing with skill?
When my mama always told me as a child that a "Ghost isnt real!"
9/10...Nice Close & Play On Dudes Name

You Had 4 Da Most Part....Wordplay, Punches, Metas, A Few Personals Like Da Closin Line

Punches: Tie
Personals: Bars
Creativity: Bars
Wordplay: Bars
Structure: Tie (Both Were Eh)
Multiplez: Ghost (None Really)
Nameplay: Bars (Hit Harder)

OVERALL: Bars Of Steel...Cuz Of Da Harder Punches & Nameplay

RTF...Any Battle Namean

LOl IIGHT THEN uppin!.....................................

Voted For: Ghost

Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election
gud wordplay

Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-
playing off d name was gud

Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!
dint like that bar

Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti
not a gud diss kind of played 2 b honest

Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz
that wuz okay

your verse could of been bettr u had few dope lines but sum stuff was basic nd playd out yah mean


I done tore this kid, lyrics swarmed this bitch
And please, you about as street, as a forest is
no

So dawg, don't be stupid, ya tough talk'll get beat stupid
Plus ya 'Tough Guy Front' is "Ghost" cuz I "See Thru It"
wakk

I'll put the nine to ya melon and lungs, this fella's a thug?
How? When he wouldn't "Lick A Shot" with the "Shell On His Tongue"
it dint rhyme

So guy stop, this guy's hot? This kid'll get five shots
That'll leave his "casket in the clouds" Thats what I call a "Sky Box"
that was okay

All your punches are half baked, He says he's real, but this cat's fake
So I'll leave this kid's "Body Sitting In a Bag" Like a "Sack Race"
it dint rhym again

This ho will get killed, how is this kid flowing with skill?
When my mama always told me as a child that a "Ghost isnt real!"
okay?

weakk verse mane u had no personalz in d verse nd your punchlinez were very basic

my votes goes to ghost becase his verse had d more better personalz nd punchlines

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

Voted For: Ghost

Pollz............................................. ......

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Wait u can remove this i meant it as feedback sorry

Wow at TuNiT's Dickride ass vote...

Uppin this fuckin shit................

This was feedback posted for .Barz Of Steel.
 

pollllssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss sssssssssssssss

Lets get some votes you hoecakes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

damn wut can i say...this was a slaughter on barz part...

I done tore this kid, lyrics swarmed this bitch
And please, you about as street, as a forest is

damn...nice 10/10

So dawg, don't be stupid, ya tough talk'll get beat stupid
Plus ya 'Tough Guy Front' is "Ghost" cuz I "See Thru It"

a little played...but u made it work...7/10

I'll put the nine to ya melon and lungs, this fella's a thug?
How? When he wouldn't "Lick A Shot" with the "Shell On His
Tongue"

lol @ this...clever...9/10

So guy stop, this guy's hot? This kid'll get five shots
That'll leave his "casket in the clouds" Thats what I call a "Sky Box"

damn...thats just good wordplay!...8/10

All your punches are half baked, He says he's real, but this cat's fake
So I'll leave this kid's "Body Sitting In a Bag" Like a "Sack Race"

tite once again...8/10

This ho will get killed, how is this kid flowing with skill?
When my mama always told me as a child that a "Ghost isnt real!"

wow...a punch about ghosts that isnt played?...who woulda thought...9/10


.Barz.- good everything...wordplay...multis...punches...structu re...it was all flawless...u came hella hard wit all the metas...id be interested to see wut this would sound like on audio...overall nice drop form u...51/60


Ghost-
Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election

oh...hell no...3/10

Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-

meh...aight...5/10

Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!

played...4/10

Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti

thats not a punch...1/10

Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz

u cant be serious...2/10

Ghost- u need serious work...mostly on structure...vocab...and wordplay...and this is a battle...no self glorification :nono: ...practice and you'll get it...i see potential...

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Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

ight this was a one sided battle if you ask me...

barz of steel:

I done tore this kid, lyrics swarmed this bitch
And please, you about as street, as a forest is
^ straight to da point lol made ma laugh
So dawg, don't be stupid, ya tough talk'll get beat stupid
Plus ya 'Tough Guy Front' is "Ghost" cuz I "See Thru It"
^^ nice nameplay here...
I'll put the nine to ya melon and lungs, this fella's a thug?
How? When he wouldn't "Lick A Shot" with the "Shell On His Tongue"
^^ dope wordplay nice punch fam
So guy stop, this guy's hot? This kid'll get five shots
That'll leave his "casket in the clouds" Thats what I call a "Sky Box"
^^ lol nice again man this is dope
All your punches are half baked, He says he's real, but this cat's fake
So I'll leave this kid's "Body Sitting In a Bag" Like a "Sack Race"
^^ ok not as good as the others
This ho will get killed, how is this kid flowing with skill?
When my mama always told me as a child that a "Ghost isnt real!"
^^ haha thats true lol my mum said that too :( lol

overall fam i felt you had a solid drop... dope metas wordplay and some dope punches fam, flow was real good and structure was good also... nothing really wrong wit it. i just felt that your punches got worse as they went on... they were still good but u lost consistancy try to stay up on your battles your gonig good keep it up...

ghost:

Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election
^^ ermm not a good opener really weak punch
Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-
^^ ermm not feeling this one again fam
Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!
^^ i used athelti and pathetic in my daubs bvattle u copy cat :cool:
Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti
^^ ok wordplay but weak punch
Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz
^^ this was the best bar in your whole verse

ight man ive seen u drop better... not a good verse really punches were weak and your strucutre was weak in the battle to... you had one good bar and that was it fam... sorry but u need to stay consistant and have punches all the way through

v/ barz of steel

for having a better verse it was more enjoyable and made me laugh :cool:

yo rtf and one of my battles... if u do nmot rtf then u will have this vote removed.... pz

LoL I Agree Homie The Verse i Spit Was Weak Cuz i Didnt Use WORDPLAY,that Many Punches,N Metaz!Prolly The Reason Cuz This Was the Verse I Was Gon Spit in Our First Battle!And i Only Have 5 min to Type It N I Was Under Alot Of Pressure Homie!Cz mY Comp Was Runnin Really Slow!When i Checked in my COMP Froze n took along Time to et Back ON!N Tyoed My Verse Without Even Reading It Twice!But Its All Good!BARZ OF STEEL we gon have to have another battle soon homie!n ima have more time to type my verse n ima come DOPE azz fck!Watch!
UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNNN !

uppin............................................. .

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

wow, talk about ghost self-gloring/just stupid lines..........for example

'Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"'

^seriously, wtf are you thinking about when writing? :huh:

anyways, ghost, you didn't really have any good shit man....it was way too basic, and half the disses had something referring to you, and thats not a good diss man....it wasn't creative at all, and your flow was off a little....like that machetti line was just stupid, how did it exactly diss barz?....anyways, your verse was too plain, not effective, nothing stood out, uncreative......just elevate man, read some tuts or something

barz. not bad man, had some solid disses, some were just plain weak, like the sky box one....but overall, your verse was way better, because you came harder and kept it consistent with dissing....kept it focused on dissin ghost.....that sac race line was pretty solid, opener coulda been worded better, but still a solid one.....for sure you took this one, rtf on the khaoz battle in my sig.

v/barz of steel.

Favor has been returned Drakel. Uppin this shir

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.


BOS
Damn Son Had Some Good Shit Dawg, You Had Alot Of Wordplay In Here Which Was Dope You Also Had Some Good Meta's I Was Feeling You Made It Clear On This Battle With Punchlines, Your Closer Was Dope Dawg, Opener Was Dope Dope Though, You Also Had A Nice Deal Of Vocabulary Which Was Good Structure Was Cool Better Then Ghost, Overall You Came Hard With Punches And Wordplay Which Killed This Battle Man

Ghost
Cool Shits Man You Had Some Nice Wordplay Kind Of Creative Here, Aiight Shits, Vocabulary Was Okay, Kind Of Basic But That's Cool Man...Structure Was Horrible, Coz You Had No Rhyme Scheme Here Which Is Real Bad, Syllable Count Was Whack, Stretched Lines Here And There, But The Over All Flow Was Okay Man, Over All You Need To Work On Punches, But They Were Cool Up In Here Just No Hard Enough

Overall BOS Came Harder With His Punches, More Creative With His Wordplay Which Got Him This Battle, Also Structure Was Decent, Vocabulary Came Good, Basically He Got This For Those Reasons

Uppin This shit for some votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Uppin This Fucking Shit...

Uppin this fucking Shit...

This was feedback posted for .Barz Of Steel.
 

decent battle here, ill up it for u...............

Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

Barz Of Steel

I done tore this kid, lyrics swarmed this bitch
And please, you about as street, as a forest is

No..I wasnt feeling this. The concepts were too basic and you should have came harder here.

So dawg, don't be stupid, ya tough talk'll get beat stupid
Plus ya 'Tough Guy Front' is "Ghost" cuz I "See Thru It"

Again, no. This didnt flow well because you said "stupid" twice in the same bar and it screwed things up. You should have changed the content here.

I'll put the nine to ya melon and lungs, this fella's a thug?
How? When he wouldn't "Lick A Shot" with the "Shell On His Tongue"

Lol..this was actually pretty nice. I havent heard it before..original.

So guy stop, this guy's hot? This kid'll get five shots
That'll leave his "casket in the clouds" Thats what I call a "Sky Box"

This was alright I guess. Nothing that great..just average.

All your punches are half baked, He says he's real, but this cat's fake
So I'll leave this kid's "Body Sitting In a Bag" Like a "Sack Race"

AVerage.

This ho will get killed, how is this kid flowing with skill?
When my mama always told me as a child that a "Ghost isnt real!"

Ehh, this was OK. Alright finisher.

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Ghost

Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election

Umm, no. This was weak. It didnt really hit at all. Wack opener.

Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-

I wasnt feeling this either. This wasntn hard at all. Way too basic and didnt hit.

Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!

This was too basic. Not hard at all.

Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti

No..you attempted vocaublar here but it didnt work out. Your concepts were too simple in this bar and you werent complex enough.

Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz

Wasnt feeling this either. The wording was off and again, this was too basic.

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Neither really came all that great but Barz took this easily overall because Ghost was just too basic and didnt come complex at all.

Vote- Barz Of Steel