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Kein Witz vs R-Rated
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30 Line Maximum 5 Votes Wins 3-0 Is A KO No Crew No Hate No D/R Topical: Who am I? Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 06-17-05 at 10:21 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Win by 3-0 KO |
R-Rated has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-14-05 04:35 PM.
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Kein Witz has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-14-05 05:51 PM.
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Who Am I? Another Shot Down Teen? Another Percentage? Another Gangbanger? Another White Rapper? No...I'm Diffrent...I'm Original In Every Concept.. Even A Blind Man Can See I'm Diffrent In Percept.. You Judge On Apparence...Your Biais In Judgement.. Yes You... The Person Who Makes Fun of Overweight Women.. The Person Who Makes Fun of Unprivledged Children.. The Devils Advocate.. Does It Up Your Pride..Knowing That You Hurt Someone? Just Remember It Will Be You Left Alone....With NoOne.. Its A World of Disgust and Hate... How Can You Breathe The Air of Sufficating Atmospheres? Every Demeaning Thing You Say..Polutes Our Hydrosphere.. You Crush The Hopes of Those Who Could Prosper So High.. But You Drown Them Out With These Untruthful Awful Lies.. and I Hate You For That.. So To You I Ask..For One Last Thing Before I Gladly Perish.. Through These Words of Wisdom..This Question To Cherish.. Who Am I? ~R~ |
The stars overhead, all reflecting the mahogany sheen of his disturbed bed. His hand met his lap and clapped sharply as he tried to remember the red. "The hell," he said, and clasped his fists to both sides of his scratched face. Memories escaping through his mind's gaps.... leading him on a wild chase. A flash: standing above the sobbing figure,a forlorn figure,damsel in distress. Disbelieving eyes as he released his stress, raining red on her white dress. The mess...just a pawn in a game of chess, assaulted by a bout of amnesia. His wife...the gleaming knife."Come on dear, please...I'd never cheat on ya..." The young girl in his room, naked, young and covered in his own sexual mark. Each memory a dark-stained dagger piercing his veins, and bleeding his heart. "Who am I......" he cried, his brain expanding and his thoughts suddenly back, remembering, daydreaming, or maybe just rolling over the grizzly, ghastly facts. On this nightstand next to him, coated in a layer of grime and congealed slime. His mind played charades, dumping his past and locking away all of his crimes. He wouldn't forget this time... he'd talk with the demons and dance with Satan. Eyes reflecting fire, the lines under his eyes losing the curve, and straightened. |
Uppin This Motherfucker For Some Vizotes..
Bitches..:shoot: ~R~ |
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Voted For: Kein Witz
R-Rated-Your flow sucked.Some of your lines didn't rhyme.Very uncreative.You were askin some questions an then sayin some stupuid shit.Vocab was decent though.It seems you suck at topicals but good at battles. Kein Witz-Readin your shit,beyond the beautiful vocabulary.......it didn't seem that you were discussing the topic at hand.Very good vocab in this.It seemed as if you were talkin about a man whose wife sheated on him or some kinda shit like dat.Next time talk about the topic cause if you were......I dun see it. WEAK TOPICAL BATTLE Vote-R-Rated http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193881 ^^vote or it's dq'd Vote switched |
ooh....shit my bad..........I meant to vote for R-Rated....I'll go to that other forums and report it to get it changed.
Sorry bout that R-Rated. |
o.o Uhm...The topic is Who Am I...It's about a guy who has amnesia and can't remember who he is, but his memory comes back in flashes....How can you say I didn't follow the topic?
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well....to me.......you didn't make it clear enough.
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You don't explain everything when you're writing. It's pretty damn clear. It even says he has amnesia in
The mess...just a pawn in a game of chess, assaulted by a bout of amnesia. It says that he was remembering in Who am I......" he cried, his brain expanding and his thoughts suddenly back, remembering, daydreaming, or maybe just rolling over the grizzly, ghastly facts. It seems pretty damn clear to me. |
^Damn Man..Complaining About A Vote?
I Mean He Pretty Much Dissed The Shit Outta Mine..and I Was Just Trying A New Style..and To Tell Ya'll The Truth I Like This New Style. Its Very Emotional. But Ya Trini..Please Report That In Battle Forum Problems and Have The Poll Changed. Uppin This For More Votes. ~R~ |
Yea Trini I Already Voted In That Battle A While BAck..I Was Like THe First or Second Vote.
~R~ |
Jesus does not spear whales for waffles. He smites them!
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Let's get some votes from people who know what they're talking about...
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Voted For: R-Rated
Nice, both cam with fiyre, i would break it down but thats not necissary in topicals. I was feeling both storylines and both showed nice emotion, the reason ima go wit R on this one is due to his more complex vocab throughout which made it deeper if ya get me. Kein, for real man very soon with you expanding your vocab your gonna be noticed a lot more, i was feelin it like mad, just feel r came harder. no hate RTF in sig asap please, so i don have to dq this vote! |
Oh no, I don't want you DQing that vote, do I...? =)
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Voted For: R-Rated
R Rated took this battle. He followed topic alot better and I felt his emotion more. Kein, you came nice too but your verse just didnt hit me as hard as Rated's did. R Rated also had better structure in this too and was more creative. --------------------------------- Who Am I? Another Shot Down Teen? Another Percentage? Another Gangbanger? Another White Rapper? No...I'm Diffrent...I'm Original In Every Concept.. Even A Blind Man Can See I'm Diffrent In Percept.. This was nice. The way you set up the opener caught my attention and the first three actual lines were dope. I was feeling this. ---------------- So basically R takes it for better structure and emotional category. Vote- R Rated |
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