Pen N' paper vs Soddit
 

Battle Rules:

6 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No hate
No d/r

3 - 0 automatic win.


Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 06-14-05 at 11:58 AM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.


Win by 3-0 KO

Soddit has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-14-05 11:36 AM.

Pen N' Paper has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-14-05 11:38 AM.

you continued to beef, but now i'm gonna prove youre wacker now.
but i admit you got readers hands up...tryna keep the vomit down!
what kinda name is that? quit acting and give up tryna be a mc.
coz once i cut this lame, paper wont have a fucking edge on me!*
i'll erase this fool, batter and bruise this faggot ass rook.
so you can "write" your own story, but you'll still be a bitch in my book!**

all the personals are on the fact that weve been beefing.
* no edge on me.. = in his user title it says paper cuts. so if he has no edge he cant cut me lol. edge - being effectiveness.
** his name is pen n paper.. = you should get it.
if you dont get anything pm me, or dont vote.

What the hell is a “soddit” man and u couldn’t be ill even if u were an infection
Even if I showed him the way for perfect… he’ll still be askin for the directions
Is this a joke? Without hands around his neck I could still make him choke
Cuz guy is a nervous wreck and when it comes to his text he still gon be broke
Punches against him are like a homicidal person but ill make u think of suicide
The five lines above are like the 5 rounds in Tysons fight and im Kevin McBride

you got ripped, so lets squash the beef now. let our verses do the talking. upping.

uppin this man lets get sum votes aight stop sleepin peeeps

...........................................upping.

uppin this lets get votes

man let gets sum votes man plz leave ur votes aight uppin

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

Pen n´Paper: you got betta punchez n´ you had sum very good worldplay...you did good in the battle and had a nice flow you didnt have any multis but still ya verse wuz betta

Soddit : I wasnt feelin yor shit n´your punchlinez didnt come out hard like paper´s you were good but not enough to win the battle

everybody wake up and vote stop sleepin on this

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

GOOD:

Flow - Mr.Shriggle
Structure - Pen n Paper
Punchlines - Tie
vocab - Nope
Wordplay - nope
Nameplay - nope

BAD:

forced Rhymes - Mr. Shriggle
Forced Multis - nope
Non Sence - Mr. Shriggle

CREATIVITY

Theme Battle - nope
Creative Punches - Tie
creative multi's - nope

PERSONALS:
Wack personals, but Pen n Paper got at least personals..

OPENING/CLOSING:

Opening: No one
Closing: Pen n Papaer

COMMENT:
The most hard hittin punches were Pen n Paper's ones, but they seemed a lil wacker cuz he lost a lot of flow,
Mr.Shriggle forced too many rhymes so he didn't got a chance

Pen n Paper: 6/10
Mr. Shriggle: 4.5/10

V/ Pen n Paper

ok thnx for tha vote uppin this for sum more

uppin lets get this closed down aight pplz cmon vote on this

ok pplz cmon stop sleepin and vote on this battle

uppin this cmon votes plz lets get this closed

uppin this man cmon pplz vote stop sleepin

uppin this lets get sum more votes aight close this

i kno its late but im uppin still for more votes cmon pplz

dammit close this battle down uppin this again cmon peeps close this down votes cmon votes

uppin this lets get votes cmon

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

What the hell is a “soddit” man and u couldn’t be ill even if u were an infection
Even if I showed him the way for perfect… he’ll still be askin for the directions
^^1st line too basic,2nd mediocre
Is this a joke? Without hands around his neck I could still make him choke
Cuz guy is a nervous wreck and when it comes to his text he still gon be broke
^^1st line too basic,2nd. decent
Punches against him are like a homicidal person but ill make u think of suicide
The five lines above are like the 5 rounds in Tysons fight and im Kevin McBride
^^ight

Well you had some decent lines there.But shit was too basic.No werdplay in this shit either.So bassically,ur problem simplicity.

you continued to beef, but now i'm gonna prove youre wacker now.
but i admit you got readers hands up...tryna keep the vomit down!
^^^So why they put hands up for vomit?
what kinda name is that? quit acting and give up tryna be a mc.
coz once i cut this lame, paper wont have a fucking edge on me!*
^^whack....too basic
i'll erase this fool, batter and bruise this faggot ass rook.
so you can "write" your own story, but you'll still be a bitch in my book!**
^^to basic

Really this whole battle was basic.I specifically saw a bunch a fillers in yor verse.It also appeared to be a bit on the stretched side.Pen&Paper edged u on the punches.


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