Intermental - How I feel (I will RTF)
 

(Hook)
take a moment jus to chill, lemme tell you how i feel,
its jus a chance for me to keep shit real,
coz sometimes it ain't about the deal,
to me, nothin speaks quite as loud as skills...

(Verse I)
i'll take you back through the eyes of a snotty-nosed kid,
before i drove around in my jaunty broke whip,
always playin ball in my sloppy old kicks,
jus a cocky lil kid that really didn't know shit,
as i'm walkin i'd be bobbin to the walkman in my pocket,
it started, then it blossomed, never conscious, it was awesome,
i fell in love, with rap in its essence,
now these people feel my rhymes on RV, and that is a blessin...

(Hook)
take a moment jus to chill, lemme tell you how i feel,
its jus a chance for me to keep shit real,
coz sometimes it ain't about the deal,
to me, nothin speaks quite as loud as skills...

(Verse II)
i gotta say nowadays, there's too much focus on emcees,
rappers all up in the news, beefin up in dvds?
man, forget that, i'll take raphael saadiq,
sit back, vibe out, puff a blunt, to warren g,
in my ride, i got timbaland and dre,
when i'm wylin' in the club, i want my just blaaaaze,
and when i'm feelin oldschool, i like my shit raw,
word up, to marley marl and mister prince paul,
when i'm feelin nitty gritty its the RZA,
Enter the Wu is still hiphop scripture...play it every day

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194814

yo this was a nice peice, i liked this. i should been in on it but busy, so yeah.. the flow was on target and stayed well throughtout, the imagery and creativity was great, vocab was good and had a nice structure, the chorus was coo. 8/10..
uppin for dis...

thanks homeboy.....yo man i wanted you in on this but u got exams so ill be workin on summin big to drop wit u

igght ill think of sumthin too...

kool kool......

Yo! you doin' yout thing as always dog!....nice peice, vocab was strong an your flow compliemneted your wordplay alot too...reall good drop man, keep doin your thing, RAW Is in this muh'fucker.....you know how we do :shoot:

7.5/10

yea ma nigga u knw how RAW do....holla uppin dis

Nice drop like here, could've been a bit more detailed because you really had dope concept going here. I think it would sound the bomb on audio cause you had an excellent flow due to similar sound expressions and multis. Had nice emotion, no imagery though but that's okay. I'm feelin the hook especially this line:

"nothin speaks quite as loud as skills"

^word up, truth righ here, it's all about the skills :thumbup:

yeah ma thanks for RTF.....uppin

............ gud stuff,,,, feelin this fo sho' good imegry, multis, structure, depth, emotions

....an even doe the hook was a lil short u served it up well~

gud stufff.......... dis shudnt get slept on

8/10

thanks ma uppin dis

uppin dis ishhh cmon yall

yo i was really feeling this piece kid........vocab and flow were real tight........
and u had a great concept.......the only thing it needed in my opinion was a 3rd verse...as i was a lil dissapointed it finished so quick......but saying that i was still feeling it.......
...........keep doing ya thing..and yeah, i might look ya crew up........
..................8/10........one more verse and i may of gave u a 10/10
later dog........

yo this shit really good...u had really dope storytellin i could imagine it all easily in my head..and u had multi's and rhythm that really made it flow..really good shit..8/10...yo im lookin for more members ta join the Darkside..Indepgh, Militant, Speatz, and me are already in it and u have the skill ta be in....holla back at me my AIM is "mc slayor"..add me

yo dogg i aint got AIM and also homie.....im with RAW....but thanks for the offer

shit was hot homie....kind of short for a song though, but it flowed well, rhymes was tight, chorus was decent....Id say about 7.5/10 for what you had


Please RTF http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194203

Yo J, thanks ill RTF...but i wanna put this in audio....i want the feel to be a slow ryhthym....can u try make me a beat

^^ you goin to repeat the chorus 2X or just once? and how slow you talkin? you want piano's and stuff or just a slow grimy beat?

piano's, the chorus will be repeated twice at the end and thts it holla at me