OneStepBeyond vs K-Trini
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Time limit is because I'm having a bbq right now :love:

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 06-19-05 at 06:39 PM

Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in.

Why tha fuck you give so much time?i wanted to do this quick.

because i'm having a bbq..........................

Fuckin liar....you just wanna scope my profile to pre write shit.

actually im eating :love: :love: :love: don't get your hopes up

OneStepBeyond has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-19-05 05:03 PM.

You're cocky acting has got me laughing... and I dick ride?
Are you 'sure/shore'? See this so-called truth begins to 'riptide',
Ya speaking senselessly... Mention me and prepare for the worst,
Think you runnin away with the win, you need to carry it first,
I'm so tired, your flows fire? Well I'll be dismissing your bars,
Ya got an ego, your heads exceded the roof, like flipping in cars,
I'm sure you got dope ryhmes but you're way to dumb to share it,
When I 'drop' I 'damage ya brain' like babies with clumsy parents,
This herbish hoecake's verse is so fake, K's gotten so dead soft,
Closest you'll come to 'defeatin' me is choppin my legs off..

blah

K-Trini has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-19-05 06:28 PM.

Goin oN one kNee for a dEad body iS only wAy ya fiNd yA "soul mAte"/
YOu stay sO deep inSide ya friEnds,you sMell wat yA own "paL-ate"/
Sides maKin any moRe,worse thiNg you cAn do To ur verSe is subMit/
MoNey wouldn't "fLy" in yoUr pockets iF ya boXers were maDe a magNets/
Turn ya sO self conScious,it'd be impOssible to evEn try to reBound/
BuRyin urself iN a gaRden still wouLdn't ripen yOu undeRground/
VerSes might Be decent.................................
if it waSn't bit,prEwrit,and laCked wit/
HolDin your alBum left a stAin on mY palm,duE to My grAsp on sHit/
All you Do to rAp is coRRupt,with ur inAbility to sPit abrUpt/
& It not mY fault tHe only thIng you sLeep with pEe's staNding up/


Explain for those who dun know
1st bar
Palate=upper surface of the mouth
Pal+ate=Palate;Pal=buddy,friend,..etc.
2nd bar
Magnet attracts coins
3rd. bar+5th bar
Should know
6th bar
Only men pee standing up;women pee sittin down

honestly.......I was expectin more from you OSB.But nice drop homie.

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

EZ..........

wont vte because trini think we D/R, lmfao............

I neva said or think you guys d/r.......but i dun want ya votin in this one Daubs.

uppin.............................................

Voted For: K-Trini

Goin oN one kNee for a dEad body iS only wAy ya fiNd yA "soul mAte"/
YOu stay sO deep inSide ya friEnds,you sMell wat yA own "paL-ate"/
^^^
not feelin the concept an i'm failing too see the personal?

Sides maKin any moRe,worse thiNg you cAn do To ur verSe is subMit/
MoNey wouldn't "fLy" in yoUr pockets iF ya boXers were maDe a magNets/
^^^
first line was givin him propps, second was verybasic


Turn ya sO self conScious,it'd be impOssible to evEn try to reBound/
BuRyin urself iN a gaRden still wouLdn't ripen yOu undeRground/
^^^
decent concept, horribly worded

VerSes might Be decent.................................
if it waSn't bit,prEwrit,and laCked wit/
HolDin your alBum left a stAin on mY palm,duE to My grAsp on sHit/
^^6
not sure osb has an album, but it was prolly you're best bar for real..

All you Do to rAp is coRRupt,with ur inAbility to sPit abrUpt/
& It not mY fault tHe only thIng you sLeep with pEe's staNding up/
^
decent...........

Not a good verse, openin few bars was really weak man....lacked alot of personals, wordplay was a lil' basic too....some decent pun's here 'n there, but they were effectless 'cause of the lack of personals.......


OSB..

You're cocky acting has got me laughing... and I dick ride?
Are you 'sure/shore'? See this so-called truth begins to 'riptide',
^^^
DECENT CONCEPT, SECOND LNE SHOULD OF BEEN WORDED MORE CREATIVELY

Ya speaking senselessly... Mention me and prepare for the worst,
Think you runnin away with the win, you need to carry it first,
^^^
nice

I'm so tired, your flows fire? Well I'll be dismissing your bars,
Ya got an ego, your heads exceded the roof, like flipping in cars,
^^^
nah, not feelin it..

I'm sure you got dope ryhmes but you're way to dumb to share it,
When I 'drop' I 'damage ya brain' like babies with clumsy parents,
^^^
LOL, Made me laugh, decent hit..

This herbish hoecake's verse is so fake, K's gotten so dead soft,
Closest you'll come to 'defeatin' me is choppin my legs off..
^^^
closer is played......

OSB, Good verse....decent wordplay trhoughout, had a few personals, nothin' too shameful tho'...punches were a lot more complex than K-Trini's.....you get my vote.


Good battle both, keep doin' ya' thing...nah mean

Vote/ OSB


Vote switched

Any suspicitions of him needing time too pre-write should be discarded because you had the same amount of time as he did too check an drop.....so you could of peeped the profile an gatherd up personals too...stop complaining, man....take the loss an move on lol.

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

K-Trini not good enough

Goin oN one kNee for a dEad body iS only wAy ya fiNd yA "soul mAte"/
YOu stay sO deep inSide ya friEnds,you sMell wat yA own "paL-ate"/ (8/10 i like that line)

Sides maKin any moRe,worse thiNg you cAn do To ur verSe is subMit/ (alright line 5/10)

MoNey wouldn't "fLy" in yoUr pockets iF ya boXers were maDe a magNets/ (nice enough 7/10)

Turn ya sO self conScious,it'd be impOssible to evEn try to reBound/ (4/10 average)
BuRyin urself iN a gaRden still wouLdn't ripen yOu undeRground/ (good I think 7/10)

VerSes might Be decent.................................
if it waSn't bit,prEwrit,and laCked wit/
HolDin your alBum left a stAin on mY palm,duE to My grAsp on sHit/ (to long but nice idea 5/10)

All you Do to rAp is coRRupt,with ur inAbility to sPit abrUpt/ (4/10 u just trowen words together there to ryhme)

& It not mY fault tHe only thIng you sLeep with pEe's staNding up/ (??? dont understand tht line il give it a 2/10 not a great finishing line man! also it was kinda hard to read ur writing with "tHis cRaP" stick to normal caps.

OneStepBeyond

You're cocky acting has got me laughing... and I dick ride? 7/10
Are you 'sure/shore'? See this so-called truth begins to 'riptide', 8/10 original i think
Ya speaking senselessly... Mention me and prepare for the worst, 4/10
Think you runnin away with the win, you need to carry it first, 4/10
I'm so tired, your flows fire? Well I'll be dismissing your bars, 6/10
Ya got an ego, your heads exceded the roof, like flipping in cars, 7.5/10
I'm sure you got dope ryhmes but you're way to dumb to share it, 4/10
When I 'drop' I 'damage ya brain' like babies with clumsy parents, 9/10 my fav lin of the battle
This herbish hoecake's verse is so fake, K's gotten so dead soft, 7/10
Closest you'll come to 'defeatin' me is choppin my legs off.. 6/10 not a great finisher either, not a great battle here i dont think

blah

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

nice shyt OSB im checkin pollz!!!...................

uppin.............................................

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

flow: onestep
punches: onestep by a hair...
creativeness: k-trini

vote: onestep just edge this out with more consistent punches i thought that was easyer to follow due to a better flow......

preety close battle hella good read from both keep it up tight one here....

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196136

returnt he favor or i will have my vote REMOVED.........

and if my vote needs to be better explain pm me to........

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

ok both had potential but woah!!! ktrini u need alot of work 4real not tryin to be rude though u didnt have at all a structure man u need to work at that and u need alot of work on ya flow and skill on punches u did have wordplay though

OSB ok u had a good structure and flow nice punches and not alot of wordplay but u backed it alot wit ur punches and both also do need to work on vocab aight but my v// goes to OSB

uppin.............................................

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

both were weak but K-Trini was horrible

My vote: OneStepBeyond