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Smoove vs GKillaz05
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10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Good Luck :shoot: Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 06-21-05 at 10:09 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. Closed - Expired / old battle win -strobe |
GKillaz05 has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-19-05 10:10 PM.
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Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit...
I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit... Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose... fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze... All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts... Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts... Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it... Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it... Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself... Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself... |
Smoove has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-20-05 11:45 AM.
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. . . . . . You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant & when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold But your verse has more dots n’ dashes.. ..than Morse codes In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot & your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit |
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Voted For: GKillaz05
You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant & when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent ^^lil played...but still decent Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold But your verse has more dots n’ dashes.. ..than Morse codes ^^decent again like bar before In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest ^^Rain forest in his pants...dun see a diss You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else ^^Still,comparisoon to a legend is a no-no Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot & your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit ^^^horrible Your best line in this whole thing was in the 1st. bar.When battlin...dun compare someone on the net to someone in the big leagues.Flow/structure was OK.Punches need improvement. Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit... I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit... ^^uncreative and weak....... Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose... fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze... ^^^Okay...but sumtin more complex would be better All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts... Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts... ^^ignoring ya post...how that relates to prewritten Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it... Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it... ^^1st line was good,but 2nd was lacking Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself... Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself... ^^^okay Ur punches lacked a lot....but still way better than Smoove.I didn't see any werdplay or metas by you.Very uncreative verse.But I hope you wasn't really tryin because this was weak.Still enough for the W. Vote-GK(vote in link below) http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194851 |
Voted For: GKillaz05
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well return tha favor in my battle......I voted for you.
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If GKillaz dun return da favor tommorow....I'm gettin my vote dq'd.
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Voted For: GKillaz05
GOOD: Flow - GKillaz Structure - Gkillaz Punchlines - tie vocab - tie Wordplay - Smoove Nameplay - Gkillaz BAD: forced Rhymes - nope Forced Multis - nope Non Sence - nope CREATIVITY Theme Battle - nah Creative Punches - Gkillaz creative multi's - no PERSONALS: Gkillaz got the only personal of the battle... so he gots my vote OPENING/CLOSING: Opening: tie Closing: GKillaz COMMENT: Smoove you lost the fllow with that wack structure man... keep up on that both try to keep up on multi's and personals.. almost a tied battle V/ Gkillaz Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: Smoove
smoove took this one...and heres tha breakdown: You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant & when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent this was an ight opener. i didnt like how you used his name once in each line. you only needed it once in tha whole bar, but its coo. but tha second line is what made this a good bar. that was creative, and a funny diss. not exactly a personal, but a good diss. Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold But your verse has more dots n’ dashes.. ..than Morse codes this was some more funny, clever shit. this was a really good bar In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest it seemed like u forced this bar to be in ur verse, but its coo. didnt really hurt you, it was still nice You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else on tha first line, i was like ight. "its coo, but nothing big..." , then tha second line, i was hella weak. that was some funny, unplayed shit. you threw me for a loop on that one, wasnt expectin it. Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot & your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit this was just ight wordplay. tha end of this bar is was made it ight. couldve been better[ overall, i think this verse was about a 7.5/10. about 2 bars couldve been reworded better, and had a lil more thought into em, but they were still coo. i was feelin this verse. yo disses were on point, and so was ur flow, and you punches. you came real hard on this one, and i think you took tha battle. gkillaz05 verse: Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit... I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit... this was an ight opener, but toilet lines are played Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose... fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze... this bar was wack. just because it rhymes dont mean is a punch or a good diss. put some more thought in to it. All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts... Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts... i could see u tried at a personal here, but you just fell short. it was wayy to simple. shouldve put more thought into it. Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it... Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it... fuck readin tha rest...all you gota do is look at tha end of your lines, and see that this shit is simple. your rhyming is too simple, and your barz arent making any sense, they just rhyme, but have no meaning to em Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself... Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself... first line was an attempt at a descent closer, but then you messed it up, and came wit tha stupid bar. which made no sense, and had no meaning to it. overall, i felt ur verse was wayy too simple to take this win. i felt you came off wayy too soft. you shouldve put more thought into a lot of bars. some of em were unneccessary bars. i think you should really elevate urself., but a descent try. [b]so, i think smoove took this one, because he showed more consistentcy, and he came off a lil stronger wit tha punches and wordplay. RTF on one of tha battles in sig, or this vote will be removed in 34 hrs. |
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Voted For: GKillaz05
Haha let me sum it up then Im gonna break it down: GKilla got this one for me, structure on point, rhymes cracked me up...Smoove alrite punches didnt hit hard enuf.... lets break it down: smoove: You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant & when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent ^^^ Good opener, good punch, decent hit.....3/5 Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold But your verse has more dots n’ dashes.. ..than Morse codes ^^ I see what ure sayin but its not really a diss rite...1/5 In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest ^^ Aiite got me a laughin a bit..4/5 You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else ^^^ ahaha....GOOD...best u dun 4/5 Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot & your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit ^^ NO....didnt feel that...1/5 Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit... I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit... ^^^^^ sick opener HAHA...great start...4/5 Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose... fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze... ^^ Sorry not feelin this..1/5..think its a played concept All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts... Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts... ^^ Aiite punch but didnt hit too hard...3/5 Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it... Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it... ^^^ HAHA.....another cracker...good shit...4/5 Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself... Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself... ^^^^^ BEST LINE......5/5.....hot shit man....well done Gkilla Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: Smoove
ok this was a decent battle. it was fulla humour n shit which i thought was aite still. but there can only be one winner don't get it twisted there were some real shit punches and basic rhymes in both verses, but i thought that Smoove had this one. even though GK's closing line was the funniest in the whole battle, Smooves punches were hittin harder and a lot more frequently. structure was a bit off and GK had an easier structure and flow to follow, but you still won this. GK you really need to think of better punches than that cos some of them were really played for real. Smoove gets this one no hate ~peace~ Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: GKillaz05
You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant & when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent decent start Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold But your verse has more dots n’ dashes.. ..than Morse codes herd that befor hope it aint BIT played concept In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest WTF?? WEAK... N dumb.. *no hate* You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else aight.. Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot & your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit ha funny ending... u had a good punch a couple of aight bars noting really stood out besides ya last bar, vocab average multis none, diss aight.... u did aight 7/10 Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit... I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit... better start decent... Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose... fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze... aight just flowin... All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts... Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts... decent... Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it... Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it... aight Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself... Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself... decent ending could of been better u stood more consistent but punches could of been harder ya flow was better, multis sorda, but u still stood more consistent thats why i voted for u Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: GKillaz05
ok this was an aiight battle...props to both you on this... Gkilla - your verse was solid, punches hit hard, the verse flowed pretty well from begining to end, neither of you really had any personals, G your wordplay was pretty gud, your structure was solid, and you just need to upp on your vocabulary a bit more... overall gud verse - solid... M.C - your verse was iight, flow was gud at the start but then sortof desintigrated as it closed, again, neither really had any personals, your punches hit, wordplay wasnt as good as killaz but it was ok, you need to upp also on your vacabulary, structure was gud.. overall - playin safe. vote/ Gkillaz05 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: Smoove
Punches-MC....came harder then GK,plus it seems like he actually tried Multis-None Personals-MC...nothing to hot,but again seem like you put in more effort to this battle Vocab-Tie....both came off pretty basic with the vocab Creativity-MC...this category goes to you do to the effort of trying to come up with good punches and personals Structure-Tie...both of yall have readable verse Overall Vote-MC....i do look forward to seeing another battle from you two again. I see the potential. RTF LINK IN MY SIG!!!!! Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
UPPIN................................ votes me:6 votes him: 1 .. stop DQ'in em you got no chance faggot.
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Voted For: GKillaz05
easily got my vote.... You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant---Worst opening line i've ever seen in RV----7 out of 10 Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit... a reasonable opening line...----9 out of 10 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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UPPIN, explain em cuz smooze just lookin for a reason to DQ em
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UPPIN.. you stupid fuck E.C. I will battle you any fuckin' time, cuz you whack as fuck!!! I beat you like 7-1 and you just keep gettin all my votes DQ'd. You stupid fuck!!! just take the loss you loser. Wanna battle 30 more times?.. I'll still fuckin' KO your dumbass.
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Voted For: Smoove
Smoove: Good verse from you. Punches were mostly solid and well-worded, personals were good, flow was there...Had a few played lines, such as the closer...Well, it wasnt totally played, but you couldve worded it better, because Ive seen that concept flipped a few times. I loved the Jay-Z line. Overall, a real solid drop here. GKillaz05: Iight decent verse here. Had alot of played punches, such as the hot shit line. Thats about as played as they come man!! :nono: Closer was cool, coulda been better...Flow was pretty good, but he outdid you. Work harder on creativity and coming up with new things, not shit thats been flipped 1000 times before. V/ M.C. |
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