Tekneek vs Pen N' Paper
 

Battle Rules:
1 day to check or asap
1 hour to drop afta check

6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 06-23-05 at 11:09 AM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

Closed. Forfeit

Pen N' Paper has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-22-05 11:30 AM.

Tekneek has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-22-05 11:45 AM.

not my best as i rushed it but should stil be enough.....i hope?

First taste of real gladiator, serve him like irate wasted waiters, end up with 10 digits on your face like basic calculators…
Tek call's out all imitators, you ‘outta line’ like ‘illiterate narrators’ and couldn’t catch a beat packin rhyme defibrillators.
Hope ya religious, it over before its finished,.u can’t win this, cuz Tek throw shots puttin death on this bitches wish list..
You just miss kid, and Tek leave ya showered wit disses, it could be your birthday and you still couldn’t come gifted…
Bring wack spits and get ripped with apocalyptic tactics, show him the end is near like naive Vietnam draft pics…
Rhymes is plastic, kid ain’t severe, he anti-climatic, bitch couldn’t ‘match up’ sparkin phosphorous fabrics…
This tha true test, tek chew vets and leave crews vexed, beat ya dome with texts and leave em wit loose necks
This fools next, show who’s best when head smacks through chest, left this kid noddin like he was sayin ooh-yes…

again sorry bout the line count.......good battle though............
lets get these votes in

ok uppin this for votes cmon people dont sleep now....lol

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

Tight battle

checkin tha pollz....................

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shit... again my bad I clicked on post vote....... shit
sorry bout that!

uppin this cmon pplz lets get this closed uppin 4 votes

Voted For: Tekneek


First taste of real gladiator, serve him like irate wasted waiters, end up with 10 digits on your face like basic calculators…
Tek call's out all imitators, you ‘outta line’ like ‘illiterate narrators’ and couldn’t catch a beat packin rhyme defibrillators.
^^Well...Okay I guess
Hope ya religious, it over before its finished,.u can’t win this, cuz Tek throw shots puttin death on this bitches wish list..
You just miss kid, and Tek leave ya showered wit disses, it could be your birthday and you still couldn’t come gifted…
^^Birthday/christmas and gifted shit is played
Bring wack spits and get ripped with apocalyptic tactics, show him the end is near like naive Vietnam draft pics…
Rhymes is plastic, kid ain’t severe, he anti-climatic, bitch couldn’t ‘match up’ sparkin phosphorous fabrics…
^^^Ok.....didn't hit
This tha true test, tek chew vets and leave crews vexed, beat ya dome with texts and leave em wit loose necks
This fools next, show who’s best when head smacks through chest, left this kid noddin like he was sayin ooh-yes…
^^well....didn't hit

Main problem with your verse was that it lacked hard hittin punches.Ur flow was beautiful but punches lacked.Nice structure too.WAt ya need is some werdplay or metas.Keep werkin....punches will come.I did see u had some decent similies.

This guys technique for rappin is just copy and paste
Tekneek dont win he just PM for votes, man he a waste
^^If he PM for votes...he'd get banned,weak punch
Man the only way ull win is if he used his birthday wishes for wishin
Man ill cut ur hopes and dreams wit certain precision like a circumcision
^^^Flowed nice....but didn't hit hard
U hide ur real skill like a bald man in denial who wears a fuckin toupee
Ill leave ur tekneek dead wit one spray, he’ll be losin in any other way
^^OK
U Got a 3-0 record and ima bout to give him his first loss to his rec.
U aint capable of goin against me newbie so next time just get it correct
^^OK.....mediocre

Ur shit was basic and weak.You came hard against me in
open mic.....but wat happened here?Hopefully this was keyed.MAin problem wit ur verse was that you ain't have werdplay or metas.Not even a similie.You were bassically stain stuff...gotta be indirect.

Vote-Tekneek(vote in link below homie)
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194851

i kno its late but uppin for more votes plz thnx u

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Voted For: Tekneek

This guys technique for rappin is just copy and paste
Tekneek dont win he just PM for votes, man he a waste
aight
Man the only way ull win is if he used his birthday wishes for wishin
Man ill cut ur hopes and dreams wit certain precision like a circumcision
weak punch
U hide ur real skill like a bald man in denial who wears a fuckin toupee
Ill leave ur tekneek dead wit one spray, he’ll be losin in any other way
not really a punch
U Got a 3-0 record and ima bout to give him his first loss to his rec.
U aint capable of goin against me newbie so next time just get it correct
not really a punch here, either

First taste of real gladiator, serve him like irate wasted waiters, end up with 10 digits on your face like basic calculators…
Tek call's out all imitators, you ‘outta line’ like ‘illiterate narrators’ and couldn’t catch a beat packin rhyme defibrillators.
weak opener
Hope ya religious, it over before its finished,.u can’t win this, cuz Tek throw shots puttin death on this bitches wish list..
You just miss kid, and Tek leave ya showered wit disses, it could be your birthday and you still couldn’t come gifted…
aight
Bring wack spits and get ripped with apocalyptic tactics, show him the end is near like naive Vietnam draft pics…
Rhymes is plastic, kid ain’t severe, he anti-climatic, bitch couldn’t ‘match up’ sparkin phosphorous fabrics…
ok
This tha true test, tek chew vets and leave crews vexed, beat ya dome with texts and leave em wit loose necks
This fools next, show who’s best when head smacks through chest, left this kid noddin like he was sayin ooh-yes…
decent

Pen N’ Paper.. ur punches need help here though.. like 2 bars weren’t
Really punches.. and the rest were just not hittin hard enuff.. so work
On that.. add some personals up in there.. to make the battle a little bit
More interesting to read n’ shit.. but overall for you.. elevate on your
Punches though..

Tekneek.. first of all.. fix your fucking structure.. I haven’t seen a
Stretched structure since.. last year around this damn time.. your
Punches need improving.. cause a couple of them weren’t connecting
So, work on that also.. & add some personals in your rhymes too

ok then thnx for the vote uppin this for votes cmon pplz

uppin this for votes cmon stop sleeepin

This was feedback posted for Pen N' Paper
 

checkin pollz.. .. ..

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Upping This Ya''ll

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uppin like always cuz noone votes.....................