Pen N' Paper vs K-Trini
 

Battle Rules:
No feeding


6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 06-26-05 at 05:38 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

K-Trini has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-23-05 05:38 PM.

Why ya give so much time?
Post ur verse now man.....I'ma post mine now.I

I'm just impatient when it somes to battles.

Pen N' Paper has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-23-05 05:41 PM.

Pen&Paper So obssesed on stayin behind ,you'd ~write-it-late~
And you don't like the pen's function.....you just ~like-it's-shape~
It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~
You would neva get close to stars like a review on a bad movie
Pen can follow ethics made by kin,but ya verse still won't move me
Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~

1st bar
Think about the shape of a pen and wat else is like dat :evilgrin:
2nd bar
u should know
3rd. bar
kinethic-movement
kin-relatives
ethic-a set a rules
4th. bar
you should know

sry for takin so long....had to do sumtin

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This was feedback posted for K-Trini
 

1st bar
Think about the shape of a pen and wat else is like dat
2nd bar
u should know
3rd. bar
kinethic-movement
kin-relatives
ethic-a set a rules
4th. bar
you should know

^ i think you're tryin to say kinetic.... lol... and a pens shape?? what are u sayin like a penis? cuz a pen dont look like a penis to me...

Voted For: K-Trini

K-Trini - iight spit, the flow was pretty good, and you had some iight punches in there.

Best Line - It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~

Worst Line - Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~

Pen N' Paper - Your spit was decent, flowed well, some punches were pointless, but others good.

Best Line - K-Trini u lacked skill, Livin Legendz didn’t want u cuz of ur stupidity
I always knew ya were an idiot, but rite now ur showin me ur simplicity

Worst Line - Man u “corny” I eat u up like “corn flakes” wit milk like you for breakfast
Even “lunch” or “dinner” man ill be “serving” ur wack ass so u can take this

OVERALL - This battle was a close one, but I am givin' my vote to K-Trini. I liked his punches better, and it flowed well, with good multi's. Pen some of your punches were straight whack, you should have used solid ones threw out the whole verse.

Vote - K-Trini

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Voted For: Pen N' Paper

Iight Really You Should Stop Making Center Battle Verses It Looks Dumb...

Openor-Pen And Paper, Came A Little Better With A Punch And Vocabulary
Personals-Tie, Because They Both Had Ok Personals
Punches-Ahh Both Were Ok, COuld Of Been Harder
Wordplay-Pen And Paper, His Wordplay Was Better Then K-Trini's
Vocabulary-Pen And Paper, Had A Little More Vocabulary
Closer-They Both Were A Little Blurry So No One Gets It

Overall, Pen And Paper Took This Battle Because Of His Vocabulary

Vote-Pen And Paper........

nah i just thought that center makes it look more decent but yea thnx for tha voite ill stop makin them like that then

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Voted For: Pen N' Paper

aiight pen and paper:
K-Trini u lacked skill, Livin Legendz didn’t want u cuz of ur stupidity
I always knew ya were an idiot, but rite now ur showin me ur simplicity
eh, not hard hittin' really.... 4/10
U rappin is like “Mic-heal Jordan” makin errors being a baseball player
The way u win battles is by swaying and realize in fact that ur a failure
eh... simple again....... 4/10
Man u “corny” I eat u up like “corn flakes” wit milk like you for breakfast
Even “lunch” or “dinner” man ill be “serving” ur wack ass so u can take this
nice word play attempt. 6/10
K-Trini man ur a mini bitch wit a gurl name ur punches are not gon be hittin
Ur other verses ive seen “stink like shit” whats the difference ur verse is shittin
haha it's coo 5/10
So K just face it u gay and theres no way for u to win this battle no prospect
Even in GFX, Topical, Audio and this in Text ill murk u cuz u just a speck…
eh, not that great.... 3/10

aiight, I'm seem better shit by you. but this was decent I guess. 22/50 (44%)

K-trini:

Pen&Paper So obssesed on stayin behind ,you'd ~write-it-late~
And you don't like the pen's function.....you just ~like-it's-shape~
no............. 2/10
It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~
no punch, not hard hittin...... 3/10
You would neva get close to stars like a review on a bad movie
Pen can follow ethics made by kin,but ya verse still won't move me
eh........... 4/10
Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~
noooooooo....... 2/10

Damn, your other shit better than this. Try to be more witty and use wordplay. This was to simple. 11/50 (22%)

aiight V/ Pen and paper

RTF:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196402

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Voted For: Pen N' Paper

k-trini:
Pen&Paper So obssesed on stayin behind ,you'd ~write-it-late~
And you don't like the pen's function.....you just ~like-it's-shape~
^^^^I DONT KNOW IF U THOUGHT DIS WAS FUNNY...BUT DIS SHIT AINT MAKE NO SENSE AT ALL
It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~
^^^DUN???? WHAT DOES DAT MEAN??....BUT DIS WAS BAR WAS VERY HOMO U WANT HIM 2 STICK YA DICK IN HIS THROAT DATZ WHY U SAID DAT
You would neva get close to stars like a review on a bad movie
Pen can follow ethics made by kin,but ya verse still won't move me
^^^^^UR NOT BATTLIN KIN ETHICS WHY R U MENTIONIN HIM
Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~
^^^^^LOADED...U PUMPED BACK AND FRONT???


pen n paper:
K-Trini u lacked skill, Livin Legendz didn’t want u cuz of ur stupidity
I always knew ya were an idiot, but rite now ur showin me ur simplicity
^^^DECENT...DIDN'T REALLY LIKE DA WAY IDS RYHMED
U rappin is like “Mic-heal Jordan” makin errors being a baseball player
The way u win battles is by swaying and realize in fact that ur a failure
^^^LMAOOO DIS BAR WAS TERRIBLE IT DIDN'T EVEN RYHME
Man u “corny” I eat u up like “corn flakes” wit milk like you for breakfast
Even “lunch” or “dinner” man ill be “serving” ur wack ass so u can take this
^^WACK..LOL
K-Trini man ur a mini bitch wit a gurl name ur punches are not gon be hittin
Ur other verses ive seen “stink like shit” whats the difference ur verse is shittin
^^^WHAT?????
So K just face it u gay and theres no way for u to win this battle no prospect
Even in GFX, Topical, Audio and this in Text ill murk u cuz u just a speck…
^^^^NO....


DIS BATTLE WAS TOTALLY WACK....BUT PEN WINS DIS CUZZ HIS BARS MADE MORE SENSE THAN TRINI'S I DIDN'T SEE 1 PUNCHLINE IN DIS WHOLE BATTLE FROM BOTH OF U

RETURN DA FAVOR

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Voted For: K-Trini

K-Trini u lacked skill, Livin Legendz didn’t want u cuz of ur stupidity
I always knew ya were an idiot, but rite now ur showin me ur simplicity
5-10
U rappin is like “Mic-heal Jordan” makin errors being a baseball player
The way u win battles is by swaying and realize in fact that ur a failure
5-10
Man u “corny” I eat u up like “corn flakes” wit milk like you for breakfast
Even “lunch” or “dinner” man ill be “serving” ur wack ass so u can take this
3-10
K-Trini man ur a mini bitch wit a gurl name ur punches are not gon be hittin
Ur other verses ive seen “stink like shit” whats the difference ur verse is shittin
3-10
So K just face it u gay and theres no way for u to win this battle no prospect
Even in GFX, Topical, Audio and this in Text ill murk u cuz u just a speck…
1-10

real soft verse, u tried personals dey werent hittin tho, u tried punches but dey werent affective, should try usin betta concepts


Pen&Paper So obssesed on stayin behind ,you'd ~write-it-late~
And you don't like the pen's function.....you just ~like-it's-shape~
5-10
It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~
wow gay? 4-10
You would neva get close to stars like a review on a bad movie
Pen can follow ethics made by kin,but ya verse still won't move me
attempted personal...5-10
Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~
1-10

didnt get dat last line, but u tried a personal, tried punches, structure wasnt good but ya shit hit a lil harda than pen's

vote: k-trini

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