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payn vs DZK_BURYMORE
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6 - 16 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 06-24-05 at 10:49 PM Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in. |
DZK_BURYMORE has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-24-05 10:06 PM.
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beat your head in death to my enimies
ur on ur last leg im a frekin centipied, im from west virginia ill put sumtin sharp in ya stabbin men in they abdomin so hard my javolin splinters, hits so hard it hits six parts of ya inners causin enternal bleedin seein my light on this text is the only way your still breathin, ill teach you a thing or 2 when i kidnap and drag you and your family handily to the back of my labroom leave your mother-fucked gutted and shackled hung from a block of tackle, from the tub in my bathroom leave your brother and sister coverd in stabwounds maggots crawlin in and out of your dads blood splatterd jacket and a rappers kadabber looks like rabbid badgers got at it, see sadness just isnt a emtion im capable of havin so in takin you breakin you and laughin, and when i say breakin u i dont mean mentally actually i mean most of your bones bein broken and crackalin, |
Payn has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-24-05 10:48 PM.
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ight check it here's my verse ...
Ok, Payn will verbally knock out ya dentals..\ in text i'm suspensful when i jot wit pencils\\ have diz newbie hit more soft spots..Shit, u'd think he was in a mental hospital!..\ no rank is wut ya text gets, Out Breathe Kid? my punches land where ya chest is..\ topin' me.. nah, b stay infront of hoods, buryin' more DZK's & i'm not talkin' bout breathing methods!..\ ..But Really i'll counter ya attack as my blows flow Around yah hits, Fist'll pound yah spits.. But bitch, i'll have you lookin up to 20, Like checking for conterfeits!.. The win i doubt you can handle..Cus yah chest calvical im bout to dis-mantle.. Cus Only tyme L ova my head is when doing sign langague of your outcome in this battle!.. Hood you awful-wita-pen..i'll shove my fist in yah mouth an put yah talking-an-end.. Cus Payn will rip thru yah arteries from yah chest and through yah temple..cause it apparent you thought-you-had-a-win!.. |
uppin this shit for some votes......yall kno this mother fucker came weak man!
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This was feedback posted for DZK_BURYMORE
Fronting like DZK is so gay..
Some aliases are funny as hell, but that's just gay.. |
maybe u should ask for what it stands for instead of bein a lil bitch and judgin ppl b4 u know them that will get u in some shit some day dawg, and dont judge me by name but the lyrics and shit u see
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i kno yall ppl can vote...........................................
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uppin for some votes................once i get enough posted thing under my belt i will return the favor
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Voted For: Payn
Here's my vote and some simple constructive critism i lost you near the end Payn but your flow was desent ur lines definitely more creative then DZK_BURYMORE . . .word of advice to DZK when u battle don't just simple ryme make sure you going somewhere . . . and Payn love the metaphors . . . Good shit guys . . . the one and only flowverse |
Voted For: Payn
fake dzk, lol... OK, poayn gets my vote due to actuially using punches and havin a decent flow. dzks verse was packed with fillers, self glorification and overall was just a weak verse. No hate but payn takes this in every category... RTF on a battle inthe sig, OR THIS WILL GET DQ'ED. |
will sum1 besides payn's friends vote on this battle?
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Voted For: DZK_BURYMORE
^wow... not only a name biter... but a verse biter too... from that very name lol.... get this homosexual DQ'd! |
and dont judge me by name but the lyrics and shit u see
^lmfao!@!!! |
This was feedback posted for Payn
EZ...............
already voted on LL alias.... |
Voted For: Payn
ok..... DZK's structure n flow was fucked up, hard to read yo shit man.... need to use multi's and improve vocab n punchlines.. Payn's structure wasn't that good but he had much betta flow, wordplayed a bit, and better personals.. so that wins the battle... Payn - 7/10 DZK - 4/10 V/Payn Be sure to RTF... fo more honest votes... battles on my sig. |
hold on, i didnt mean to put VOTE for dzk, but sound click is down, ima put in a link to the song that dude bit from...
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and i did a lot for you niggas, this is thanks i get..
Your my son........you should thank my dick.. cassidy dissin murda mook. |
lmao, posted in the wrong thread!!!!.......
but yeah he a herb who bit....prolly just as a prank tho... |
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This was feedback posted for DZK_BURYMORE
wack battle...and you ain't DZK...................
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Voted For: DZK_BURYMORE
Checking the faggotry polls here.. wtf@thisdudesverse |
uppin this shit for some votes....and oh yeah no i didnt name bite anyone u think theres only one DZK in this whole world?...get a life
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uppin this shit for some votes....and oh yeah no i didnt name bite anyone u think theres only one DZK in this whole world?...get a life
^first of all, dont say that when you have dzk and his old alias burymore in ya name.... lol....yep, i think there is only one dzk in the world..and a bajillion kids who copy him cuz they have no skill... like i said, HAVE THIS BATTLE CLOSED, DUDE CHEATED, BIT THE NAME OF THE ARTIST AND HIS LYRICS, I POSTED THE LINK TO WHERE HE BIT... GET AT IT AND HAVE THIS FUCK BANNED!!! DUDE, ur a homo... Quote:
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This was feedback posted for DZK_BURYMORE
lol is this a joke.................................
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Voted For: Payn
Payn will verbally knock out ya dentals..\ in text i'm suspensful when i jot wit pencils\\ ^^self glorifing have diz newbie hit more soft spots..Shit, u'd think he was in a mental hospital!..\ no rank is wut ya text gets, Out Breathe Kid? my punches land where ya chest is..\ ^^this bar didn't rhyme topin' me.. nah, b stay infront of hoods, buryin' more DZK's & i'm not talkin' bout breathing methods!..\ ^^self glorifing i'll counter ya attack as my blows flow Around yah hits, Fist'll pound yah spits.. But bitch, i'll have you lookin up to 20, Like checking for conterfeits!.. ^^nope...weak and whack The win i doubt you can handle..Cus yah chest calvical im bout to dis-mantle.. Cus Only tyme L ova my head is when doing sign langague of your outcome in this battle!.. ^^^whack Hood you awful-wita-pen..i'll shove my fist in yah mouth an put yah talking-an-end.. Cus Payn will rip thru yah arteries from yah chest and through yah temple..cause it apparent you thought-you-had-a-win!.. ^^weak Ur shit suked.....too much self glorifying and no werdplay,meta,or personals.Save that glorifying shit for Open mic.And structure ur verse better.Shit was ugly. beat your head in death to my enimies ur on ur last leg im a frekin centipied, ^^wasn't a punch im from west virginia ill put sumtin sharp in ya stabbin men in they abdomin so hard my javolin splinters, ^^^self glorifying hits so hard it hits six parts of ya inners causin enternal bleedin seein my light on this text is the only way your still breathin, ^^OK ill teach you a thing or 2 when i kidnap and drag you and your family handily to the back of my labroom ^^diss god damn it leave your mother-fucked gutted and shackled hung from a block of tackle, from the tub in my bathroom leave your brother and sister coverd in stabwounds ^^stop...make a punchline maggots crawlin in and out of your dads blood splatterd jacket and a rappers kadabber looks like rabbid badgers got at it, ^^whack see sadness just isnt a emtion im capable of havin so in takin you breakin you and laughin, and when i say breakin u i dont mean mentally actually i mean most of your bones bein broken and crackalin\ ^^omg Same shit.U glorified a lot and had too much gangster tak.U didn't have any punches like the other guy.So I gotta base it on flow.Ur structure was far better than payn.And so was ur flow.So ya got my vote. Vote-DZK(vote in link below please) http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196901 Vote switched |
ooh shit mybad.....I'll report my vote to have it switched
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uppin this.............................................. ...
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This was feedback posted for DZK_BURYMORE
peeppppp.......................................... ................................................
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DZK barrymore.....vote in link that I posted at bottom of my vote or I'll have my vote removed.
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This was feedback posted for DZK_BURYMORE
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Voted For: Payn
payn got this one better verse on the real both got eh verse but i notice payne was better it structure was bad as fuck for both stretched lines gett betta on ya structure and punches if you want to be a textcee for real vote payb |
This was feedback posted for Payn
Checking SOmething Weerdness......................
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Voted For: Payn
dzk burymore, u didnt have very many punches, most of ya verse wuz just talkin bout how u gonna come n kill hiz family n shit. tha only good punch i think u had wuz tha very first one about beat your head in death to my enimies ur on ur last leg im a frekin centipied, and u had sum stretched lines. Payn, u had sum nica muthaphukkin punches n shit. tha only thang id say 2 u iz that ur last bar seemed a lil stretched, butit aint no thang, u know, i gotta give tha vote 2 Payn so chea, tha spicca Payn wins, werd |
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