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Reach. vs criminal
Battle Rules:
10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Feeding Due : Midnight, Eastern Time. Tonight. Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 06-29-05 at 12:27 PM Must drop verse in 720 minutes after check in. |
criminal has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-29-05 11:57 AM.
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Reach. has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-29-05 11:59 AM.
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The Best Regarded, Aggressive, Times up!, so Set ya Guard Up
Ya ‘words above mine’?, NEVER, unless I Replied to a Thread YOU STARTED! When I spit and say “there ain’t a whole lot to it”, It’s cuz it was an EASE-to-Bust… But when YOU spit and I say “see there ain’t a whole lot to it” it’s cuz it was WEAK-as-FUCK!!! In stead of “markin his set backs” he carves “Progress-in-his-Memory” So I “Squash the beef” and “heat it when it’s In my grill” like Hamburger’s “Process-and-Delivery” Yall “cop out” like “police shift endings” when they Leavin-for-their-Own-Homes Claimin ya ain’t “seen nuthin worth replyin to”…that’s cuz you still Readin-all-ya-Own-Flows Doesn’t matter HOW NICE you are cuz I CRUSH-Vet’s-Perfect-Spits… Because it’s “easy to clown you” like “One-Step-Circus-Kits”!! EASY!!!!! |
I peep'd ur past, and son....your ass
Your lines are longer than paragraphs Wit the dash'-An'SlaSH! shit, save the space Your just an example that Trojans break... A straight mistake a mis hap a broken criminal, The only conviction u hold is bein invisible I break your spine an coccix, switch cords an spit, Just to give a legitamite reason for u to spit shit This Convict's Cut, Shower time...Your Fucked This Boy's got less delivery than a Pizza Hut |
Voted For: criminal
Aii Breakdown Flow- Flow has to go to Reach Bcuz his syllables were shorten so his lines were very even LOL Punchez- Criminal .....Bcuz Reach hade a verse full of wack disses and self glorification so I Cant give this to him it would jus be unfair Personals- Nobody dropped any personals in this battle so I Gues sthis area remains empty without any votes Multies- Well barely Criminal droped some small lil multies in the begining and then it jus fell off but he dropped the only good multies in this battle So his takes this battle Vocab- Criminal dropped some aii words nuttin I Aint heard but reach dropped really basic and he didnt try to extend his vocab if you ask me so crimnal takes this area Originality- Criminal...........To me Good punchez that make me laugh and good Wordplay that makes me aww takesd the originality area in any battle and thats what Criminal did in this battle he dropped a really sloppy structure but he also did what he was spoe to do and that was drop a really dope verse and thats what he did sloppy structure or not so he takes this battle overall so my v/ criminal |
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upp'in this battle upp'in this battle |
I had 4 personal's.
Uppin. READ. dont do that vote for me favor shit. |
Voted For: Reach.
yo u both got mad skills..really this was close.... but reach jus takes it in my opinion..... better structure .flow and punches....... every ones been telling me this but criminal you do need to fix that structure...... reach your best line was that paragraph one..which was real funny when you take into account his structure..... yeah it was close but i think reach just got it.... good battle though.keep it up |
upp'in this battle for more explained votes plez..
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upp'in this battle for more explained votes plez..
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Voted For: criminal
v/criminal I peep'd ur past, and son....your ass Your lines are longer than paragraphs ...weak.... Wit the dash'-An'SlaSH! shit, save the space Your just an example that Trojans break... ...lmao...played, but still funni A straight mistake a mis hap a broken criminal, The only conviction u hold is bein invisible ..weak... I break your spine an coccix, switch cords an spit, Just to give a legitamite reason for u to spit shit ..decent..kew multi. This Convict's Cut, Shower time...Your Fucked This Boy's got less delivery than a Pizza Hut ..weak hitting.. ..eh, ya verse was mediocre...nothing really grasped me... The Best Regarded, Aggressive, Times up!, so Set ya Guard Up Ya ‘words above mine’?, NEVER, unless I Replied to a Thread YOU STARTED! ..played concept.. When I spit and say “there ain’t a whole lot to it”, It’s cuz it was an EASE-to-Bust… But when YOU spit and I say “see there ain’t a whole lot to it” it’s cuz it was WEAK-as-FUCK!!! ..i had to read it twice...i get it...that was a kew concept.. In stead of “markin his set backs” he carves “Progress-in-his-Memory” So I “Squash the beef” and “heat it when it’s In my grill” like Hamburger’s “Process-and-Delivery” ..lol...im feeling this.. Yall “cop out” like “police shift endings” when they Leavin-for-their-Own-Homes Claimin ya ain’t “seen nuthin worth replyin to”…that’s cuz you still Readin-all-ya-Own-Flows ..lmfao...that was hot.. hmm...you got good concepts...but you take the long road to get to the point....i felt this verse, though..that ender was tight ...yeah, criminal took this with an all out better verse...punches and everything Doesn’t matter HOW NICE you are cuz I CRUSH-Vet’s-Perfect-Spits… Because it’s “easy to clown you” like “One-Step-Circus-Kits”!! |
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Thanks For The Vote Everyone Can We Get Some More Votes Plez
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upp'in this battle for more explained votes plez..
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Voted For: Reach.
(2) Flow and Structure-- REACh (1) Opener-- criminal (1) Punches and word play --- criminal (criminal took it slightly i like puns and i thought the "cop-out" line was good) (1)-- closer--- Reach-- This Convict's Cut, Shower time...Your Fucked This Boy's got less delivery than a Pizza Hut lol criminal work on the flow and u'll get it next time------ good drop from both---- |
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Voted For: criminal
Flow-Reach personals-criminal punches-criminal multis-criminal structure-reach creativity-criminal enjoyment-criminal i think tha criminal got this cause he came harder and had better punches and i enjoyed his verse more return the favor or this vote will be removed http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=199762 |
Voted For: criminal
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upp'in this battle for some votes to finish this madness
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Voted For: Reach.
REACH. I peep'd ur past, and son....your ass Your lines are longer than paragraphs ^Short, got right to the point nice punch 4/10^ Wit the dash'-An'SlaSH! shit, save the space Your just an example that Trojans break... ^good personal, nice multis 7/10^ A straight mistake a mis hap a broken criminal, The only conviction u hold is bein invisible ^weak punch/personal, wasnt fealin it 0/10^ I break your spine an coccix, switch cords an spit, Just to give a legitamite reason for u to spit shit ^this is good wordplay, good punch 7/10^ This Convict's Cut, Shower time...Your Fucked This Boy's got less delivery than a Pizza Hut ^Good closer, way to end it....nice job 8/10^ Overall:This verse was small, yet got right to the point the flow was good, ur inserted good multis and great punches and personals way to attack your opponent. Criminal The Best Regarded, Aggressive, Times up!, so Set ya Guard Up Ya ‘words above mine’?, NEVER, unless I Replied to a Thread YOU STARTED! ^Forced the rhyme, weak opener 3/10^ When I spit and say “there ain’t a whole lot to it”, It’s cuz it was an EASE-to-Bust… But when YOU spit and I say “see there ain’t a whole lot to it” it’s cuz it was WEAK-as-FUCK!!! ^kinda bad flow, punch was weak as fuck...0/10^ In stead of “markin his set backs” he carves “Progress-in-his-Memory” So I “Squash the beef” and “heat it when it’s In my grill” like Hamburger’s “Process-and-Delivery” ^No punch inserted, felt u coulda done better 0/10^ Yall “cop out” like “police shift endings” when they Leavin-for-their-Own-Homes Claimin ya ain’t “seen nuthin worth replyin to”…that’s cuz you still Readin-all-ya-Own-Flows ^Pretty decent punch, liked the way it flowed..5/10^ Doesn’t matter HOW NICE you are cuz I CRUSH-Vet’s-Perfect-Spits… Because it’s “easy to clown you” like “One-Step-Circus-Kits”!! ^Nice closer, good wordplay at that...prob. best line...6/10^ OVERALL:I felt your lines were poorly structured, u offered a bad flow....ur punches were decent but nothing quite that hard hitting, as for ur personals i think u also lacked those...ur multis where absent. v/reach. rtf on my sig links within 3 days or this vote will be dq'd |
Voted For: criminal
Reach. --------- I peep'd ur past, and son....your ass Your lines are longer than paragraphs (nice punchline) Wit the dash'-An'SlaSH! shit, save the space Your just an example that Trojans break... (weak..) A straight mistake a mis hap a broken criminal, The only conviction u hold is bein invisible (dude, i'd love to be invisible) I break your spine an coccix, switch cords an spit, Just to give a legitamite reason for u to spit shit (no flow) This Convict's Cut, Shower time...Your Fucked This Boy's got less delivery than a Pizza Hut (was ok but didnt hit hard..) ---------- criminal --------- The Best Regarded, Aggressive, Times up!, so Set ya Guard Up Ya ‘words above mine’?, NEVER, unless I Replied to a Thread YOU STARTED! (good) When I spit and say “there ain’t a whole lot to it”, It’s cuz it was an EASE-to-Bust… But when YOU spit and I say “see there ain’t a whole lot to it” it’s cuz it was WEAK-as-FUCK!!! (lol, nice line im feeling that) In stead of “markin his set backs” he carves “Progress-in-his-Memory” So I “Squash the beef” and “heat it when it’s In my grill” like Hamburger’s “Process-and-Delivery” (long as fuck but after re-reading it i got what you mean) Yall “cop out” like “police shift endings” when they Leavin-for-their-Own-Homes Claimin ya ain’t “seen nuthin worth replyin to”…that’s cuz you still Readin-all-ya-Own-Flows (nice personal..) Doesn’t matter HOW NICE you are cuz I CRUSH-Vet’s-Perfect-Spits… Because it’s “easy to clown you” like “One-Step-Circus-Kits”!! (this was a nice mix, personal n punchline, good work) criminal you need to work on cuttin down your lines, so your verse flows better, but you had it 4 me...and Reach, you need to work on vocab, and punchlines... werd.. v/criminal RTF ppl...they in my sig |
Voted For: Reach.
I don't really know how yall break it down here yet.....so I'ma do it like I know........ flow = reach punches = reach personals = niether complex = criminal multies = niether open = criminal close = reach VOTE ===REACH. NOTE TO CRIMINAL.......you need to take out the 'becauses' and all the rest of the un-needed words that stretch ya lines out.......it makes it cleaner and easier to read........1............. |
This was feedback posted for Reach.
Criminals' been banned for biting...so............
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Voted For: Reach.
you got the win :thumbup: |
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