Black Queen vs .:F.ate:.
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Topic:
You are a pen.
...maybe you're a pen from an artist, a writer, school student, or a teacher. Anything you want, but write in the perspective of THE PEN

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-02-05 at 10:11 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.


Old battle closed - tie

Black Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-29-05 10:14 PM.

.:F.ate:. has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-29-05 10:31 PM.

Covered and clothed, I have one purpose to fulfill.
But until this top comes off, my existence is nil.
Without the top off, I ultimately have no point.
I can't provide wisdom for you to grow from a boy.
Slowly, my tops taken off and my essence is revealed.
This point of mine for me to penetrate and simply fill...
This page with my ink, and let it create a trail behind.
And watch how the empty paper starts to bleed inside.
My ink will travel through, but my goal’s not yet reached,
Until I can capture the author’s exact tone and theme.
It’s the writer’s voice, but it’s too elusive to grasp.
Still I strive for perfection in this dystopian habitat.
I’ll constantly thrust my ink until the juice runs out,
Until it resides in the paper, the womb and its house.
I’ll work with a passion until death at last has pity.
Until I’ve been exhausted, and my ink expresses me.
These words, my offspring, will carry out the voice.
What I longed to accomplish will be carried by my boys

words of depth and conception spill from me on the contact
of me- a pen, some paper, creators and whatever thoughts ones mind has
the genius of millions, maybe even trillions who dare to dream;
who believe, feel, and imagine things both seen and unseen
are compelled to come to life through the roots of my being
the ink of my soul pours forth with undescribable passion
as long as people are able to imagine my purpose is everlasting
people's passionate poetry comes forth perpetually, almost at will
creative intelect resounds intimately to the point i cant stand still
i am the heart and soul of a lyricist, the craftsmans' tool, a simple pen
i am the reason niggas like tupac still speak though his life is at end
i am the soul reason that hip hop as a whole still survives
and as long as i can be used the spirit of emcees will never die

This was feedback posted for .:F.ate:.
 

Ain't voting..........cause the hoe might take it as hate or sumtin.

But I think Fate had this.Because he described his shit far better.Flow was even.

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vote fags, uppin..................................

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how tha fuck does everybody just not vote on a particular battle by coincidence? ya'll full of shit.........uppin

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Nobody likes topical bitch..............

kinda like how nobody likes you huh? do me a favor and grow a dick.....then rip out your spine so u can suck it. thank you.........uppin

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ayo Fate trini sent me sum money like 2billion sumin rv money

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This was feedback posted for .:F.ate:.
 

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Go to lyrisit's lounge.........i explains it all.....

And I'm leavin this site....I gotta go back to Trinidad.So I squashed all the beef.

Voted For: Black Queen

this vote goes to the queen.....vocab was much sicker and flow was on point. 9/10

Voted For: .:F.ate:.

Love it . . . both were good . . . but i have to give the edge to Fate: i like the parallel structure at the end "i am" . . . i think both of you really brought out the pen's point of view so in that sense it was a tie . . . and both of u did it differently . . . Black Queen brining out the purpose of the pen . . fate looking more at the impact. . . Still very good drop --- making it hard to vote----- but my vote goes to FATE

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Voted For: .:F.ate:.

When I read the topic...I thought it was dope.Till I read the verses...and was dissapointed.You guys could have really done better.

Flow-Black Queen had some rhymes that didn't rhyme.Fate had a basic rhyme sheme ....but it flowed nevertheless.BQ seemed to force rhyme.Like the first bar.Fate even had alliteration a bit too!

Content-Both failed teribby in this part.FAte had bigger vocab.My fav. line was the one about Tupac.To me...black queen had nothing that'd stay with me for a while.

Vote-FAte
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Voted For: Black Queen

Neither came strong but Black Queen looks good.....

^^^wat a faggot......................................

uppin......strobe please clean up these votes....please

This was feedback posted for Black Queen
 

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