criminal vs {D.N.A.}
 

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6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 50

Check in by: 07-11-05 at 05:45 PM

Must drop verse in 8640 minutes after check in.

{D.N.A.} has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-05-05 05:45 PM.

criminal has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-05-05 10:21 PM.

ayo

You Walkin away wit a Title, Im gone Break ya Legz So you a Have Two left Feet cuz it aint Right how you a Criminal for Rapin Kidz/
Itz Hard to Bite Diz, Armed wit Swordz ta Fight Wit, tight wit da Keyboard and Typin you'll just be Equiped wit enough Calcium to be Concidered an Author Writis/(dont stay in jail to long beatin ya dick)
Ya hygene Suckz, My {D.N.A.} iz at Top of da line like my Openin Bar/
Like Tiger Woodz ya Battlez are Below Par, But so Far get you a Hope Star and Nutrigrain cuz Last time you wuz Sick ya Throat wuz Stuck on My Whole Bar/
Im like little kidz wit my Handz cuz my punchez be Throwin Stuff imma call ya Bluff/
Dont think Open minded cuz imma Soe it up, i bet ya Sound sick? right when you Record yaself Throwin Up/

aight u up

u Fuckin Weakling, U step in da Ring?, I'll swing yo Ass-to-da-Ropes....
kick then watch you gargle Bloody Balls after I punt-cha Nutts to tha Back-of-ya-Throat...
Waited a while for u'r come-back, battling me you shouldnt have done-that....
cuz u got fucked so many times, D.N.A wouldnt even help find out... WHOS SON'S-THAT....
nigga, im not fake and ill have u barely breathin...
cuz when they announce the winner, its gonna hurt" more then baby teethin.... EZ!!


weak drop cuz im tierd as hell and almost forgot about this so i keyed this quickly.....

uppin

yall dont sleep on diz...............................

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yall dont sleep on diz...............................

^^^basicly

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WIL RETURN DA FAVOR HONESTLY...............

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WIL RETURN DA FAVOR HONESTLY...............

Voted For: criminal

u were played work on creativitywork on ur structure u shouldnt be in elevated if u tried but ur punches were better work on metas and vocab
dna i dont know whats up wiht ur flow but u need to work on it work on ur vocab and punches u glorified urelf thats not batteling go write an open mic

Voted For: {D.N.A.}

criminal

u Fuckin Weakling, U step in da Ring?, I'll swing yo Ass-to-da-Ropes....
kick then watch you gargle Bloody Balls after I punt-cha Nutts to tha Back-of-ya-Throat...
not feeling this opener, you didn't really bring your opponent down

Waited a while for u'r come-back, battling me you shouldnt have done-that....
cuz u got fucked so many times, D.N.A wouldnt even help find out... WHOS SON'S-THAT...
^this is nice bar, hardhitting punch n cool wordplay as well

nigga, im not fake and ill have u barely breathin...
cuz when they announce the winner, its gonna hurt" more then baby teethin.... EZ!!
^coo wordplay in last line formed into punch, decent closer


{D.N.A.}

You Walkin away wit a Title, Im gone Break ya Legz So you a Have Two left Feet cuz it aint Right how you a Criminal for Rapin Kidz/
Itz Hard to Bite Diz, Armed wit Swordz ta Fight Wit, tight wit da Keyboard and Typin you'll just be Equiped wit enough Calcium to be Concidered an Author Writis/(dont stay in jail to long beatin ya dick)
^decent opener, I feel you wanted to say too many things in just one bar, might have split it up you know, punches were cool though

Ya hygene Suckz, My {D.N.A.} iz at Top of da line like my Openin Bar/
Like Tiger Woodz ya Battlez are Below Par, But so Far get you a Hope Star and Nutrigrain cuz Last time you wuz Sick ya Throat wuz Stuck on My Whole Bar/
^last line is real stretched but the punch is there though, coo wordplay, first line is bleh

Im like little kidz wit my Handz cuz my punchez be Throwin Stuff imma call ya Bluff/
Dont think Open minded cuz imma Soe it up, i bet ya Sound sick? right when you Record yaself Throwin Up/
^haha, funny closer, definitely feeling this bar

Vote goes to {D.N.A.} because I feel despite the awful structure and flow he had better punches and wordplay

Voted For: {D.N.A.}

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This was feedback posted for criminal
 

this battle dont belong here...

This was feedback posted for {D.N.A.}
 

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Voted For: criminal

this battle was weak yo...both had messed up structure but besides all that criminal takes this for harder hittin punches...his verse,besides a 4/10 structure,had a better flow on there..and his personals were much more decent...the best lines on there were

Waited a while for u'r come-back, battling me you shouldnt have done-that....
cuz u got fucked so many times, D.N.A wouldnt even help find out... WHOS SON'S-THAT....


^^ that was a nice personal mixed with a gd w/p...

his opner also was cool...had a gd point...and a gd punch there...but closer was kinna weak...

as for dna...dawg u got it twisted...i aint trynna hate but mayne u need to elevate...theres room for improvement tho..u didnt have nice wordplay..the way u purged ur verse made it seem like nothin rhymed...and most lines didnt entertain enuff..metaz were there but didnt just hit hard on criminal..fo real...u need to elevate..accept the advice..

ps: cool key there criminal...its all gd

hit one of my battles with honest and well xplained votes cos i did the same on here...thanx

Voted For: {D.N.A.}

eh this was an ok battle

criminal
u Fuckin Weakling, U step in da Ring?, I'll swing yo Ass-to-da-Ropes....
kick then watch you gargle Bloody Balls after I punt-cha Nutts to tha Back-of-ya-Throat...
0/5..this was sorry. no real punch.
Waited a while for u'r come-back, battling me you shouldnt have done-that....
cuz u got fucked so many times, D.N.A wouldnt even help find out... WHOS SON'S-THAT....
3/5 decent personal.
nigga, im not fake and ill have u barely breathin...
cuz when they announce the winner, its gonna hurt" more then baby teethin.... EZ!!
1/5 this was lame. nothing special at all. horrible closer.

4/15
Your opener and closer were very weak. Nothing special about your verse. You had one good bar and that was the one that you used as a personal. Your structure was good and your flow was good.




D.N.A
You Walkin away wit a Title, Im gone Break ya Legz So you a Have Two left Feet cuz it aint Right how you a Criminal for Rapin Kidz/
Itz Hard to Bite Diz, Armed wit Swordz ta Fight Wit, tight wit da Keyboard and Typin you'll just be Equiped wit enough Calcium to be Concidered an Author Writis/(dont stay in jail to long beatin ya dick)
2/5 decent wordplay. good multis
Ya hygene Suckz, My {D.N.A.} iz at Top of da line like my Openin Bar/
Like Tiger Woodz ya Battlez are Below Par, But so Far get you a Hope Star and Nutrigrain cuz Last time you wuz Sick ya Throat wuz Stuck on My Whole Bar/
1/5 didnt really like this one. you had that tiger woods line that is used a lot
Im like little kidz wit my Handz cuz my punchez be Throwin Stuff imma call ya Bluff/
Dont think Open minded cuz imma Soe it up, i bet ya Sound sick? right when you Record yaself Throwin Up/
3/5 probly your best line. decent closer

6/15
First thing I saw was that structure. Holy crap. Horrible. Your flow was messed up cause you streched just about every line. You had some decent wordplay with the calcium line. You had some kinda played punches. I wished you woulda had a personal. But you were consistent with punches.


D.N.A wins due to the fact that criminal had no real punches in there compared to D.N.A's verse where he was consistent.

upp'in for more votes..............................

upp'in this battle and plez explain ya vote cuz someone might get them deleted

bumpin............................................ ......

This was feedback posted for criminal
 

pollz............................................. .........

This was feedback posted for {D.N.A.}
 

would vote but criminal would accuse me of hate voting even though he clearly has a wack verse

so......

lemme just check the polls

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This was feedback posted for criminal
 

check'in poll'z....................................

Voted For: {D.N.A.}

D.N.A - Your verse was weak, you didnt flow very well, punchlines where decent.

Best Line - Like Tiger Woodz ya Battlez are Below Par, But so Far get you a Hope Star and Nutrigrain cuz Last time you wuz Sick ya Throat wuz Stuck on My Whole Bar/

Worst Line - You Walkin away wit a Title, Im gone Break ya Legz So you a Have Two left Feet cuz it aint Right how you a Criminal for Rapin Kidz/
Itz Hard to Bite Diz, Armed wit Swordz ta Fight Wit, tight wit da Keyboard and Typin you'll just be Equiped wit enough Calcium to be Concidered an Author Writis/(dont stay in jail to long beatin ya dick)

Criminal - You had an OK flow, punches where decent.

Best Line - NONE

Worst Line - nigga, im not fake and ill have u barely breathin...
cuz when they announce the winner, its gonna hurt" more then baby teethin.... EZ!!

OVERALL - This was a weak battle, both came with boring verus. D.N.A gets the vote tho becuase he flowed better and his punches where hitten harder. Criminal your need to up your vocab and be more creative.

Vote - D.N.A

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