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Why Music (first verse of my song) Great Multis!!!
Well just wrote it... its pasrt of a club song.. but yeah.. i basiclly tried to put underground lyrics with a mainstream beat.. I admitt it I spit quick when I spit it I spit it terrific, If ya didn't, tell me why at this moment you even listen.. And this goes to all of you ignorant little children, I can make words to an image that only you could vision.. I ain't kiddin, but i aint dissin, its just all of truth.. But ya irritatin like the cavity thats beneath your tooth.. Dont be mad at me, i just had to be, the reason u loose.. Peeps use to laugh at me, but now they backin me too.. But sadely, even family, dont believe i'll make it.. Too long that i've waited, for this moment to happen and just waste it.. Just cuz im asian dont mean i got no chance in entertainment.. Cant explain it, why my life they want me to fake it. So screw it, i wont do it if cant be real with my music.. Cuz why have lyrical skillz if i aint even allowed to use it.. PPl be wondering why an emcee life he chooses.. Cuz I could feel it in my blood, music is where the root is.. 1st verse to my next song.. jst wrote it like right now..damn this actually took more than an hour to write.. i was jst tryin to make good multi's n make it pretty nice at the same time.. wut ya think? Voted in this o.M. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198565 |
nice shit great mulites real complex shit here dawg flow was good structre was ight all around nice piece
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werd... thanx fam.. i really appreciate it...
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the reason i liked this was because although u had a lot of multis there was still one basic concept of the whole verse....
...most people use multis jus to flow and the song makes no sense but u did it right....... |
werd thanx for seeing that.. cuz i tried to make it good n different songs with hella multi's btu no sence..
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word, i didn't like some of your wording in some areas, like the first bar.....said spit too much, lol......but i liked this, had some good lines, i think it could use a little tune up though, good start though.......and just a suggestion....in your last bar, you say "where the root is"....make that bar relate to like, growing or something, nah mean?....cause im feelin that meta, word dabate
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werd.. i'll add to that later into the song.. thanx hommie
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uppin...............
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uppin..............
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Good Shit Man Flow Was Nice multi's Was Good, Vocabulary Was Dope, Over All This Piece Came Out Good Work Man Structure Was Neat Keep Em Coming
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It was tuff i actually like the wordplay in the 1st line but u should stick more to one topic
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werd thanx fam.....
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This was good...liked the multi's (obviously lol) yo man i liked that you stuck to one topic...9/10...RTF in my OM "My dedication"
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werd thanx fam.. uppin.....
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Dabatos you can no longer up unless a link is dropped to an open mic you left proper feed on.If you're confused veiw the new rules.
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lol ok sorry sir :(.. i thought u luv'd me :(
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Like a boxer move about and groove with clout hoping
To knock fools out with a right cross no fight lost like Smoking Joe, stuff intimidation like administration provide slots For promotions get the hots for potions of success lots Got a group of soldiers that cause troops to bend over To pull guns is full of fun got bold gatts carried on shoulders Shoot holes in hats colder than a Billy the kid twist we silly wid this |
wth kind of feed is that man?? lol well if it even is feed thanx?? i think?
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this was pretty good....good use of multis...but it wasn't anything special...just an average drop (for you) and nothing specifically stood out, but over all..it was decent....
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lol thanx.. but wuts considered a good drop (for me)? |
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