STAY FOCUS vs MC:Philosopher
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-09-05 at 08:34 PM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

STAY FOCUS has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-09-05 08:06 PM.

Yo check it . .
Battling me is like a "orthodontist" visit, so boy "brace" urself
cat i spit hot fire get ready to be melt/
Even if this dog got a masters at "art" of "freestyling" @ Harvard University/
he wouldn't be know as a "Philosopher/ MC"/
"Clean" ur lines up if you wanna go far/
If you looking for good "soap" you've got to raise the "bar"/
I bet when they read ur verse its gonna be like thirsty jokers saying wheres the pucnch line/
cat give up u can't ryme/
cat i fucked u up and gave you a "limped" and don't try to pull out a "lame" excuse/
Its over i won this battle end of u

MC:Philosopher has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-09-05 08:31 PM.

Battle me u got nothing to lose so imma leave u flowless
You use your name as motivation to make sure that u stay focused
How do I know this……… ima philosopher I know lots in this joint
Like I know u looking forward to a loss now that’s the wrong focal point
Its like beauty cause this battle is in the eye of the beholder
It gets colder…… u cant win this battle if u was a solider
You like r.kelly telling all chapters of how u was trapped in the closet
Until u came out and donated to your boyfriends semen deposit
I flow like a fossit……cause im moving on a continuous basis
So find new places…… when this battle over you’ll need an oasis*
You came with the big dogs so know its time to play
You wont stay…… even your focus is running away
You couldn’t handle this battle if I told u to hold this
You looking at the king of rapverse so no wonder u wanna stay focused

*oasis place or time of relief: a place or period that gives relief from a troubling or chaotic situation

okay good battle man lets get the voting started

This was feedback posted for STAY FOCUS
 

LOL . .. its hard to vote . . . both had a great drop . . . focus i'm impressed for a newbie u did pretty well especially against philosopher who also drop a sick verse . . . um . . i promise to post a vote i just gotta think about it more

This was feedback posted for MC:Philosopher
 

yo mc philsopher u r crew mayn! ima tell u watz good, ur verse wuz ok. need to wotrk on ur punchlinez mayn, an ur wordplay culd b betta 2, but i think u got da win here i wuz feelin sum ov ur rhymez, juz stay ''focused'' on making a mockery of ur oppenent, stay on a personal level miexed wit sum humouress pounchlinez, decent verse though mayn


uppin 4 krew

Voted For: MC:Philosopher

aight.. yo!

Mc:Phillosopher - aight flow, structure, not a big vocab, nice nameplay, n multi's.. tight punches, good personals

Stay Focus - no flow, no structure, good punches, no personals, FORCED RHYMES

^^^I think I said enough on this:

Focus - Use personals and fix that structure.. just an advice, no hate

and MC, RTF... lol ... battle on my sig.. 1 MORE VOTE PLZ!!! lol

Overal:
MC - 9/10 (jus a lil fix in the structure)
Saty Focus - 5/10 (I already told u what to do.. good luck on the next battle)

V/MC

thanx khaoz ill work on it fam. and flo verse just take your time dont rush and make the wrong vote no matter who it is. you uppin for some votes

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Voted For: STAY FOCUS

stay focus stayed his focus on this battle withh good opening and an alrite closing so overall i think that he took this 1 by an inch....AHEM BY MILES

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

uppin man and stop coming to my battles with your votes that are hate votes man u a herb

uppin in here man thanx for getting his vote out of here

Voted For: STAY FOCUS

Flow- Philosopher- MC had consistent flow, Focus's line lengths were way off, both did a good job rhyming

Punches- Focus- Focus had lots of wordplay in his punches, and none of MCs hit very hard.

Multies- Philosopher- MC wins this hands down- tons of multies, Focus barely had any

Vocab- Philosopher- Neither had much vocab, but i say MC has the edge here, mainly because focus said "cat" at the beginning of three lines

Originality- Focus- Focus had lots of wordplay, MCs disses were very basic

Personals- Focus- I really like the Harvard punch, MC didnt have any good personals

Opening- Philosopher- MC hits with a punch right away, SF's "yo check it" isnt very good

Closing- Even- neither closes the battle well

Vote- Focus- good wordplay, punches

This was feedback posted for STAY FOCUS
 

u was good but not dat good

can we get some votes in here drop a link and ill repay the favor

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Voted For: MC:Philosopher

I vote for MC:Philosopher due to the fact he had better personals,punches and worplay.


Focus, yours wasnt too bad its just that your concepts were all played, you need to come with more original concepts and learn better punches.

NO HATE< RTF IN 3 DAYS OR THIS GETS DQ'ED!!

uppin for votes...................................

Voted For: MC:Philosopher

look man its like dis
struture=Mc
meta=none
personals=Mc
punches=Mc
creativity-MC
thats how it goes
good drop to both of yall

uppin drop a link and we will return the honest vote right focus

bumpping this battle up need to finish it so i can get an open slot

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Voted For: MC:Philosopher



Yo check it . .
alrite lost the check it its wack its not an audio
Battling me is like a "orthodontist" visit, so boy "brace" urself
cat i spit hot fire get ready to be melt/
was that an attempt at a metaphore if so work on it 5/10
Even if this dog got a masters at "art" of "freestyling" @ Harvard University/
he wouldn't be know as a "Philosopher/ MC"/
yea it was a personal but it was wack and played 4/10
"Clean" ur lines up if you wanna go far/
If you looking for good "soap" you've got to raise the "bar"/
corny meta lousy punch really played 3/10
I bet when they read ur verse its gonna be like thirsty jokers saying wheres the pucnch line/
cat give up u can't ryme/
cat i fucked u up and gave you a "limped" and don't try to pull out a "lame" excuse/
well i dot no if u thought that allrhymed or what but it was wack no punch at all 4/10
work on ur flow metaphores and personals ur structure was non existant it wasnt there u need mad elevatin
Battle me u got nothing to lose so imma leave u flowless
You use your name as motivation to make sure that u stay focused
not that great of an opener or personal but it was better than any of his lines 6/10
How do I know this……… ima philosopher I know lots in this joint
Like I know u looking forward to a loss now that’s the wrong focal point
that line was wack really played 6/10
Its like beauty cause this battle is in the eye of the beholder
It gets colder…… u cant win this battle if u was a solider
played line again 5/10
You like r.kelly telling all chapters of how u was trapped in the closet
Until u came out and donated to your boyfriends semen deposit
played and not that good really 7/10 but it was kinda funnylol
I flow like a fossit……cause im moving on a continuous basis
So find new places…… when this battle over you’ll need an oasis*
umm at least u had some vocab i guess 7/10
You came with the big dogs so know its time to play
You wont stay…… even your focus is running away
corny ass linne this reminded me of his verse 5/10
You couldn’t handle this battle if I told u to hold this
You looking at the king of rapverse so no wonder u wanna stay focused
wack ass closer stop glorifyin urself in a battle take it to om 4/10
ok u need to put in some more personals cause u were really lackin there
work on being creative u didnt have one line that was creative
ur metaphores werent there being witty will help u alot
but im giving this to u because u had better flow better vocab bettter punches and ur structure blew his away
alot of elevatin needs to happen here peace

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