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STAY FOCUS vs Frank~Castle
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6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-14-05 at 09:57 PM Must drop verse in 7200 minutes after check in. |
Frank~Castle has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-09-05 09:58 PM.
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STAY FOCUS has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-09-05 09:58 PM.
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You wanted ta battle,For you Today's hopeless!
Im like Visine with tha spit,You need me ta STAY FOCUS! Im attrocious tah roaches,sprayin whom ever is closes. While you just smoke an mirrors,Just a bunch ah Hocus Pocus! Your skills are bogus,they dont appear like Its me verses ah Ghost. An the only time you where above Number 1 is when you made your first post! I know it hurts close...cuz my lines kill like stress can!! Hey!,you might be married ta the game but Im always the best~MAN! Let me Load up the clip like ah movie an show you the best part! An this battle is short,cuz your lines are so long they got stretch marks! If you dont understand dont vote! :thumbup: Eazzzy...OKAaaaaayyyYYYY!! |
Yo check it. . .
Cat I’m like a “boiled egg” in the morning –“hard to beat” You like a “marathon runner” with bad shoes need to deal with” de- feet” (Defeat) Cat your lines “dull” they need “sharpness” So stop writing with a broken “pencil” is “pointless” My lines are like an “elephant's thought” they carry a lot of “weight” Cat you’ve lost this battle it not your fault its fate/ So cat don’t run you mouth like u great/ I know u aint nothing but a fool/ Cause like x-ray technician I see right through you |
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good battle Focus..........Hollah! |
raise this comon ppl come witht he votes. . . . and good luck castle its been a while since i checked in thats why i didn't say it sooner
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Voted For: Frank~Castle
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This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
*********Uppin this battle 4 homey here!,He I.m. me***
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raising this so high . . looking for votes. . . comon ppl . . . THANKS
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This was feedback posted for STAY FOCUS
nice verse brah....damn you nice fa real..........good battle
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Voted For: Frank~Castle
Look this battle was DAYMN weak. fuck it i ain't even gonna sugar coat it or nothin.... both of you need to elevate a whole lot. Vocab in this battle was less than basic and there were no clever punches. I don't think i could see any metas, but correct me if im wrong by all means... I think Frank got this one because firstly his structure was ahole lot better and this made his flow easier to read than the other guy. Even though he only had one personal, it was the only personal in the entire battle..... Let me break down the verses cos i know how people like any excuse to get a vote removed.... Frank: You wanted ta battle,For you Today's hopeless! Im like Visine with tha spit,You need me ta STAY FOCUS! ^^weak as hell but only personal in the battle 2/10 Im attrocious tah roaches,sprayin whom ever is closes. While you just smoke an mirrors,Just a bunch ah Hocus Pocus! ^^Self glorification with a weak punchline.dull. 2/10 Your skills are bogus,they dont appear like Its me verses ah Ghost. An the only time you where above Number 1 is when you made your first post! ^^^if you made your first post that would be number 1 and not above it. think before you write. 1/10 I know it hurts close...cuz my lines kill like stress can!! Hey!,you might be married ta the game but Im always the best~MAN! ^^^self glorification.0/10 Let me Load up the clip like ah movie an show you the best part! An this battle is short,cuz your lines are so long they got stretch marks! ^^^weak closer.2/10 7/50 - below average verse.... STAY FOCUS Cat I’m like a “boiled egg” in the morning –“hard to beat” You like a “marathon runner” with bad shoes need to deal with” de- feet” (Defeat) ^^^1st line's self glorification. and i swear i've heard a similar line about defeat before but delivered with more of a punch.suspect line so 1/10 Cat your lines “dull” they need “sharpness” So stop writing with a broken “pencil” is “pointless” ^^^poorer than poor diss and sharpness and pointless don't even rhyme.1/10 My lines are like an “elephant's thought” they carry a lot of “weight” Cat you’ve lost this battle it not your fault its fate/ ^^^first line's self glorification....why do it in a battle? Weak punchline 1/10 So cat don’t run you mouth like u great/ I know u aint nothing but a fool/ Cause like x-ray technician I see right through you ^^^why is your verse 4 1/2 bars long. you shoulda kept it at an even number of lines but w/e these last three lines where still poor...1/10 well it's not hard to work out who i thought had the better verse.but as i said before both of you lot better up your game. peace |
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This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
tight battle over all. castle had multis n good punches. stay focused had punches n metas and wordplay. i wouldnt know who to vote 4 but jst droppin some feed.
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upping for votes . . . thank . . . drop an honest one and i'll return the favor
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raise this . . . . plz vote . . . . drop a link and we will return the favor . . . THANKS
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This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
I like the word choice man big ups cuz the other guy was on the verge of biting.
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Voted For: STAY FOCUS
This Was A Preety Hard Decision SO Ima vote the old school way flow- Goes to STay FOcus ....Yeah his structure mightve been fucked up a lill bit but still his flow was on so Thats what this area was about so This goes to him Punchez- STAY FOCUS .... this was awfully hard to decide on bcuz you both really supplied some really good punchez and yall both did ya thang so Im jus beeing fair when i say that STAY FOCUS comes out on the top of this thang Personals- Nothing really went down in this area neither of you really supplied any good personals no small personals or nuttin so this area wont go to anybody Multi'z- No Real Mutlies but if it went to anybody id say Frank~Castle .......But yet multies from you both still need some work Vocab- Frank Castle ..........No need for explanation on vocab jus read the verse lol Yeah That basically explain everything Originality-STAY FOCUS.............he had the more unseened verse To me in this battle yet some of the concepts were still overused and so on but im not gonna say much bcuz i dont wanna sound like im hatin so ima jus say that this area def goes to STAY FOCUS /..... Overall My vote goes to STAY FOCUS he had the better verse to me and he came really good at the begining and in the end so he held his ground ....... RTF In My battle linkz in my sig |
This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
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Upping for VOtes . . . THANks . . keep em coming. . . thanks again
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upping to get sme vote comon plpl . .THANKS
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This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
damn thats hot fam.....i'll vote when i get my post....
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This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
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Voted For: Frank~Castle
Stay Focus: Cat I’m like a “boiled egg” in the morning –“hard to beat” You like a “marathon runner” with bad shoes need to deal with” de- feet” (Defeat) ^^defeat lines are played decent set up 4/10 Cat your lines “dull” they need “sharpness” So stop writing with a broken “pencil” is “pointless” ^^ok meta didnt rhyme 3/10 My lines are like an “elephant's thought” they carry a lot of “weight” Cat you’ve lost this battle it not your fault its fate/ So cat don’t run you mouth like u great ^^didnt hit hard 1st line was only decent one 3/10 I know u aint nothing but a fool/ Cause like x-ray technician I see right through you ^^no 2/10 Overall: 12/40 (30%) Frank~Castle: You wanted ta battle,For you Today's hopeless! Im like Visine with tha spit,You need me ta STAY FOCUS! ^^good nameplay ok meta 5/10 Im attrocious tah roaches,sprayin whom ever is closes. While you just smoke an mirrors,Just a bunch ah Hocus Pocus! ^^ehh 3/10 Your skills are bogus,they dont appear like Its me verses ah Ghost. An the only time you where above Number 1 is when you made your first post! ^^kinda played but ok 4/10 I know it hurts close...cuz my lines kill like stress can!! Hey!,you might be married ta the game but Im always the best~MAN! ^^dope bar best of the battle 9/10 Let me Load up the clip like ah movie an show you the best part! An this battle is short,cuz your lines are so long they got stretch marks! ^^another good bar nice closer 7/10 Overall: 28/50 (56%) Vote: Frank~Castle Return the favor with an honest vote on a battle in my sig or this vote will get removed. |
Voted For: Frank~Castle
aye dont get me wrong your opponent's shit was nice but the stretch mark and best man thing got me Homie you won |
This was feedback posted for Frank~Castle
Checkin Pollz...........frank Won This And Had Alot Better Structure!!!
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