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Thassarap 07-15-05 03:59 PM

Thassarap vs Madik
 
Battle Rules:

10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-17-05 at 03:59 PM

Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in.

System 07-16-05 09:44 PM

Thassarap has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-16-05 09:44 PM.

System 07-17-05 01:19 PM

Madik has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-17-05 01:19 PM.

Madik 07-17-05 01:22 PM

I'll have you lookin from under your cap like a bottle of sprite
digest my words cause it's the only way you swallow delight
i'm hear to teach you, so for today i'll use the board and chalk you up nice
only reason you'd make a tight cut, is if i brought a the knife
i'll twist these mic wires to a dna helix and show what you made of
you takin' rhymes, so how you gon' beat me with shit you didn't make up
cause i spit simplistic art, took away the beat when i ripped his heart
whent a capella and inflcited sparks so he'd light up when he's stripped apart
cause i'll only way you'd rip the sheets is if you shred the paper
since thasarap! it's over, you rubbin blood staines on rhymes...like a red easer

Thassarap 07-17-05 01:33 PM

I don't care what you say, punk, you're nothin but talk
Yea you're soft, that's why you're named after ya cock*
And if you think you can fuck with me, don't even try it
Cause your hair ain't red, but my punches can dye it
But if you got that itch, and you need-to-see-a-fight
I gon knock back "bitch", it ain't gon "bia-bia"-right**
You can't win or "t.i." me, so just "be easy", man***
When you rap, you "freeze" up like "Young Jeezy", man****
And if rap skills were money, you'd have only made a quarter
You even practive falling off, that's why you're a skateboarder *****

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Explanations:
*ma-dick = my-dick
**bia-right = be all right
***t.i. = tie (t.i. made a song called "be easy")
****young jeezy sings in "icy" about being iced out (frozen)
*****in his profile, madik lists skateboarding as a hobby

Madik 07-17-05 01:56 PM

Can we get some votes...

C-Hood 07-17-05 02:15 PM

Voted For: Thassarap

I'll have you lookin from under your cap like a bottle of sprite
digest my words cause it's the only way you swallow delight
OK
i'm hear to teach you, so for today i'll use the board and chalk you up nice
only reason you'd make a tight cut, is if i brought a the knife
OK
i'll twist these mic wires to a dna helix and show what you made of
you takin' rhymes, so how you gon' beat me with shit you didn't make up
HAHA...OK
cause i spit simplistic art, took away the beat when i ripped his heart
whent a capella and inflcited sparks so he'd light up when he's stripped apart
HAHA
cause i'll only way you'd rip the sheets is if you shred the paper
since thasarap! it's over, you rubbin blood staines on rhymes...like a red easer
OK


BREAKDOWN-YOUR VERSE WASN'T BAD AT ALL...IT JUST LACKED HARD HITTIN PUNCHES AND PERSONALS...YOU MAYBE COULD HAVE TRIED TO PLAY ON HIS NAME A LIL BIT TO..BUT THAT IS ALL YOU NEED TO INCORPORATE INTO YOUR RHYME IS PUNCHES AND PERSONALS




I don't care what you say, punk, you're nothin but talk
Yea you're soft, that's why you're named after ya cock*
HAHA..OK
And if you think you can fuck with me, don't even try it
Cause your hair ain't red, but my punches can dye it
UM..OK
But if you got that itch, and you need-to-see-a-fight
I gon knock back "bitch", it ain't gon "bia-bia"-right**
OK
You can't win or "t.i." me, so just "be easy", man***
When you rap, you "freeze" up like "Young Jeezy", man
NICE****
And if rap skills were money, you'd have only made a quarter
You even practive falling off, that's why you're a skateboarder
HAHA...


BREAKDOWN-NICE VERSE...I DON'T THINK THAT YOU NEEDED TO EXPLAIN ANY OF YOUR LINES CUZ I GOT EM WITOUR THE EXPLANATIONS..AND WHAT WON IT FOR YOU WERE YOUR PUNCHES AND PLAY ON HIS NAME...GOOD VERSE


GOOD BATTLE...1

MiSk 07-17-05 03:04 PM

Voted For: Thassarap

Madik
Your verse was pretty good. Your opener was good and creative. Your opener was good but could of been worded a little bit better. Ya other bars were good and hard. They were also creative and unique. The only thing that was lackin was personals in it. What I mean is that your bars could of been used for anyone.

Thassarap
Your verse was pretty good as well. Ya opener was reall good and funny, good wordplay on his name. Your closer was decent, the 2nd line lacked in a hard punch. All your other bars were good and hard. This battle was pretty much dead even but I gave you the vote because you had more personals in your verse than Madik.


*No hate just honest opinion*
*Please return the favor on the link under my sig... or I'll have to remove my vote*

Thassarap 07-18-05 08:41 PM

uppin.............................................

IXX 9 Tenths XXI 07-18-05 09:04 PM

This was feedback posted for Thassarap
 
over all it was an ok battle. i think madik lost this. i cant vote yet but i think madiks opponent came with ahrder lines. n personals. madik came with more multis n stuff but needed a lil more personals n metas. its all good tho 1

Thassarap 07-20-05 01:40 PM

uppin............................................. .

Bizarre 07-20-05 02:50 PM

Voted For: Madik

you had better structure and flows with a weak closing but thats alright u just need to elevate just a tiny bit....but your opening was tight........

Thassarap tried to achieve doin wordplay but dint actually achieve that goal....but your puches were hard but structure needed elevation.....so does your multis and shit......







MY OVERALL BOTE IS TO MaDiK

Thassarap 07-21-05 02:37 PM

uppin.............................................

Thassarap 07-22-05 01:03 PM

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Thassarap 07-23-05 03:37 PM

uppin.............................................

QuadID 07-23-05 03:56 PM

This was feedback posted for Thassarap
 
yo i'm uppin for this guy even though i can't vote but to me it seems like the rhymes were forced in a way but it still was some good punches

Madik 07-25-05 06:08 PM

uppin for votes................

Thassarap 07-30-05 01:13 PM

uppin.............................................

Thassarap 07-31-05 09:48 AM

uppin............................................

Thassarap 08-03-05 04:08 PM

uppin.............................................

Thassarap 08-04-05 09:49 PM

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%%%% 08-04-05 09:59 PM

Voted For: Thassarap

VOTE IN LINK BELOW
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202895

I'll have you lookin from under your cap like a bottle of sprite
digest my words cause it's the only way you swallow delight
^^basic rhyme,weak punch
i'm hear to teach you, so for today i'll use the board and chalk you up nice
only reason you'd make a tight cut, is if i brought a the knife
^^^weak ass punch
i'll twist these mic wires to a dna helix and show what you made of
you takin' rhymes, so how you gon' beat me with shit you didn't make up
^^got proof he bites?...fake personal...
cause i spit simplistic art, took away the beat when i ripped his heart
whent a capella and inflcited sparks so he'd light up when he's stripped apart
^^^IS there a punch involved in this?
cause i'll only way you'd rip the sheets is if you shred the paper
since thasarap! it's over, you rubbin blood staines on rhymes...like a red easer
^^No punch

You had a basic rhyme sheme.Use multis next time.As for your punches....you had none.A lot of your lines didn't seem to be a punch.And you had a line about how he spit shit he neva make up.Do you have a link that he bites?NO...so fake personal.
Overall-2/10

I don't care what you say, punk, you're nothin but talk
Yea you're soft, that's why you're named after ya cock*
^^Dope nameplay....but it didn't rhyme...
And if you think you can fuck with me, don't even try it
Cause your hair ain't red, but my punches can dye it
^^not a punch....weak
But if you got that itch, and you need-to-see-a-fight
I gon knock back "bitch", it ain't gon "bia-bia"-right**
^^horrible wordplay...bia-bia=be all?No.
You can't win or "t.i." me, so just "be easy", man***
When you rap, you "freeze" up like "Young Jeezy", man****
^^^OK...not all that
And if rap skills were money, you'd have only made a quarter
You even practive falling off, that's why you're a skateboarder
^^OK...but set-up was filler and played.

Work on your set ups.Your set-up must be relevant to the punch somehow.Your best and maybe only good line was the 1st punch.The 2nd bar was not a punch.And The 3rd bar was a horrible attempt at wordplay.

Vote-Thassarap(vote in link above)

Rile1 08-04-05 10:03 PM

Voted For: Thassarap

Madik u really didnt impress me at all. Not really good flow or punches. While TheAss...Rap(lol) used some good stuff and influences from modern music to punch and a pretty good personal. So V/TheAssRap cuz of harder punches and better flow..please vote on my battle in my sig..thanks


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