Stanza vs Pen N' Paper
 

Battle Rules:

6 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
3-0 Ko
4-1 ko



Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-16-05 at 10:00 PM

Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in.

Stanza has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-15-05 10:20 PM.

Pen N' Paper has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-16-05 12:46 AM.

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QUICK EXPLANATIONS
1st bar-- Cuz when u hear his rhymes they are bad to listen to...so they will give u an ear ache just listenin to it...

2nd bar-- a recognition is that it been already used... and just look for the definition for stanza if too lazy hear it is....
stan•za [stánzə]
n
division of poem: a number of lines of verse forming a separate unit within a poem. In many poems each stanza has the same number of lines and the same rhythm and rhyme scheme.
-stan•za•ic [stan záy ik], adj
Microsoft® Encarta® Reference Library 2003. © 1993-2002 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved.

3rd bar--like old comics when u turn the page they get ripped fast...and when people cry they need a tissue...and the laughter is that they laughin at him how badly he rhymes thinkin he laughin with him....

up these........lets get votes........cmon now votes

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You Shit Was Forced And Wack 4Real



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Voted For: Stanza

This Dude Is "Incorrectly Dissing" Me Like "Typo's When He Curse"
Ayo He "Predistined To Lose" Because He Used a *Recylcyed Verse*
Im Checkin In & Dropping & This Dude Aint Even Viewed The Thread
You "Eating Pencils" So Its No Use of Me To Try To "Fill You With Lead"
3 Wins & 8 Loses?....Damn I Shouldnt Say No More Yo Rec Speaks Itself
I Must Be a "Janitor" The Way I Left The "Pen N' Paper" On The "Shelf"
good openor nice clsoer oveall good verse keep it up

vs

You know how they say that you should... "learn from your mistakes"
But when u hear Stanza’s rhyming we’ll all have a bad case of an ear-ache
Cuz he fake, and when he types his verse they already been a recognition
His rhymes and lines repeat over and over just look for Stanza’s definition
So after u get ripped like old comics... ull be crying when u lose so heres ur tissue
And the hilarity u hearin is that they laughing at u trust me they aint laughing wit u
it was boring and you dont need to explain ya shit it make s you look like a herb...but you lost anyways

v/stanza

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uppin like always.....................

Voted For: Stanza


You know how they say that you should... "learn from your mistakes"
But when u hear Stanza’s rhyming we’ll all have a bad case of an ear-ache
^^c'mon...wat kinda concept is this?His music so bad ya ears hurt??C'mon.
Cuz he fake, and when he types his verse they already been a recognition
His rhymes and lines repeat over and over just look for Stanza’s definition
^^TOo basic....just cause his definition means sumtin...doesn't mean you can just state it
So after u get ripped like old comics... ull be crying when u lose so heres ur tissue
And the hilarity u hearin is that they laughing at u trust me they aint laughing wit u
^^^Played out......

C'mon you need to work on your concepts.2 of your punches were played out.That 2nd bar doesn't make sence.Stanzas has same rhyme shceme,rhythm and shit.But not the same words.So that bar made no sence.That 3rd bar.....they not laughing with you....they laughing at you?.....that shit was used in a Disney movie I saw long time ago.Weak verse.

This Dude Is "Incorrectly Dissing" Me Like "Typo's When He Curse"
Ayo He "Predistined To Lose" Because He Used a *Recylcyed Verse*
^^^nah.....not that hot
Im Checkin In & Dropping & This Dude Aint Even Viewed The Thread
You "Eating Pencils" So Its No Use of Me To Try To "Fill You With Lead"
^^Pencil/Lead lines are played out
3 Wins & 8 Loses?....Damn I Shouldnt Say No More Yo Rec Speaks Itself
I Must Be a "Janitor" The Way I Left The "Pen N' Paper" On The "Shelf"
^^Meh....played......but the best line in this battle

Well...ur verse was weak too.Had played concepts like janitor/shelf and pencil/lead.That first bar was the most creative bar in this...but it didn't hit him one bit.You should put some frsh wordplay and shit.Take out the (") and (*) in every bar.We not that stupuid that we need hints to decode a bar.Esspecially when it wasn't that complex.

Vote-Stanza

vote plz yall cmon now and vote...................

Pen N' Paper That Lil Qoute In Sig Spose to make me a bitch ?

How ? lol

1-0 im up

Voted For: Stanza

You know how they say that you should... "learn from your mistakes"
But when u hear Stanza’s rhyming we’ll all have a bad case of an ear-ache

MEH, OK CONCEPT BUT PUNCH TOO BASIC.

Cuz he fake, and when he types his verse they already been a recognition
His rhymes and lines repeat over and over just look for Stanza’s definition

NICE PERSONAL, I LIKED IT.

So after u get ripped like old comics... ull be crying when u lose so heres ur tissue
And the hilarity u hearin is that they laughing at u trust me they aint laughing wit u

AGAIN A GOOD CONCEPT BUT KINDA BASIC.

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This Dude Is "Incorrectly Dissing" Me Like "Typo's When He Curse"
Ayo He "Predistined To Lose" Because He Used a *Recylcyed Verse*

GOOD SET UP, PUNCH WAS OK BUT NOT AS GOOD.

Im Checkin In & Dropping & This Dude Aint Even Viewed The Thread
You "Eating Pencils" So Its No Use of Me To Try To "Fill You With Lead"

KINDA PLAYED BUT GOOD PERSONAL / PUNCH.

3 Wins & 8 Loses?....Damn I Shouldnt Say No More Yo Rec Speaks Itself
I Must Be a "Janitor" The Way I Left The "Pen N' Paper" On The "Shelf"

NICE NAMEPLAY GOOD PUNCH

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OVERALL THIS WAS KINDA CLOSE, BUT STANZA GETS THIS FOR BEING LESS BASIC AND MORE COMPLEX.

ALSO STANXA HAD BETTER PERSONALS IMO.

NO HATE BUT HE DEFINATELY GOT THIS.

This was feedback posted for Stanza
 

nice verse dawg

2-0 Im Up One more vote and I Can Get This damn Thang closed Bcuz Your not worthe battling Like I said the first Damn Time

aight then but stanza stop hatin.........lol..............

Stop Hatin?

You The one who Started all This and You Can Ask Around I Dont beef I Battle

So if you Talk Junk Then You Must Wann Battle me So Yeah

You Got Messed up all You had to do was Jus Avoid The Small talk But Anyways

Yeah We Coo......Long As You Dont rUn You Mouth No More .............Bcuz you Know you Got Merked

up...........up............up.....................

Voted For: Stanza

You know how they say that you should... "learn from your mistakes"
But when u hear Stanza’s rhyming we’ll all have a bad case of an ear-ache
^^Wat the hell is it...this puchline is bullshit
Cuz he fake, and when he types his verse they already been a recognition
His rhymes and lines repeat over and over just look for Stanza’s definition
^^^OK......not spectacular...but good compared to the one before
So after u get ripped like old comics... ull be crying when u lose so heres ur tissue
And the hilarity u hearin is that they laughing at u trust me they aint laughing wit u
^^^WAT the fuck.....just shut the fuck up!!...

Ur verse was bullshit.Terrible wording and even worst concepts.Ear-ache.That bullshit.

This Dude Is "Incorrectly Dissing" Me Like "Typo's When He Curse"
Ayo He "Predistined To Lose" Because He Used a *Recylcyed Verse*
^^OK.............
Im Checkin In & Dropping & This Dude Aint Even Viewed The Thread
You "Eating Pencils" So Its No Use of Me To Try To "Fill You With Lead
^^^played out....wat the fuck!!!"
3 Wins & 8 Loses?....Damn I Shouldnt Say No More Yo Rec Speaks Itself
I Must Be a "Janitor" The Way I Left The "Pen N' Paper" On The "Shelf"
^^agin......played out..wat the fuck!!!

U had some bullshit lines too.But your problem was not str8 bullshit...but more of being played out.But this was a fuckin weak battle

Vote-Stanza

Let me do this correctly-


Pen&Paper-Work on your fuckin concepts.That "laughing at you,laught with" shit line was used by little kids in pre-school.And you think you can you use it as a diss?Wrong.Make something that gives us that "OOh factor".Nothing was wrong with ur strture and flow.But your rhyme sheme was whack and newbish.That only decent line was Stanza one....but that wasn't executed correctly.May have been sumtin if it was...............

Stanza-Ur concepts,unlike Pen &Paper,were played as opposed to just weak and embarrsing to urself like pen &Paper.Like him though,you had a good structure/flow....but a simple rhyme sheme.First bar was OK...the best in the battle.That lead line and janitor/shelf has been played out to death.Even newbs use those concepts.

Vote-Stanza

yo stfu ur the fuckin newb man who the hell is u u betta stfu man 4real or ill make u stfu.....man ur vote dont even amke sense man talkin bout newbs u one bitch.....

Well Atleast You know that I dont have nuttin to do with This Bcuz he diss my shit To lol So Im Jus shocked

But Hey a vote is a vote

battles over 3-0 KO

-peace-

Voted For: Stanza

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u didnt have to vote.....lol but its closed already anyways.....lol

da aint no newbie pnp.

He would tear your insides out :thumbup:

Voted For: Stanza

A'ight...I'ma have to give this one to Stanza...he just came way harder with the punches and the personals...flow was good, structure was nice...

Pen and Paper...that was weak...Your first bar was lame...and the rest of your verse didnt really stick out any...flow was okay, structure was a'ight...

No hate...

Return the favor please...

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