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Premanition vs wayne
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6 - 12 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-23-05 at 09:22 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Wayne has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-20-05 09:38 AM.
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Premanition has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-20-05 09:43 AM.
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Let The Games Begin...
. . “..Dope? Shit! you can quote that I ‘beg’ to differ..” Down on two like ya mother, but her legs were stiffer Kid get a grip you couldn’t be sick if ya brains hurled Eatin from a bin, that’s like an insight to ‘waynes world’ kid don’t stress, I blame ya girl for them stretched rhymes cos them overweight stretch lines are bound to effect minds damn just drop the act bitch and pick up your reality you bout as much a ‘hot sauce’ as Williams was a casualty (*) this verse will serve you with flows that ‘paste’ to impress & you beta hope its ‘spreadable’ so you can taste the success . . (*) – hot sauce is his alias - Danny Williams ducked his boxing fight this wkend cos he suddenly got stomach ache . . pu pow |
We agreed that I could go over the limit
I Bomb-Geeks with Strong-Speaks that'z bound to Hit prem Harder than Concrete, son your beyond-weak...// My "Led-Is-Wreckless" each Verse Dispersed Keepin son Dead-and-Breathless..Precision Incisions from "Head-to-Necklace" leave u "Ejectin-Breakfast"...// ok..check this... attack-with-a-force-above-average.. so when I pile-drive you from a mile-high you'll land-in-the-core-of-the-planet...// I'm labeled-as-flagrant.. watch me discard-your-jaw-bitch with a martial-arts-kick when your face lays-on-the-pavement...// All of your lettering's-wasted on this veteran's-flagrance.. I'll superglue your lips and paste them to leprosy-patients...//(eww) Mc nice when he writes? Nah...bout to get Slayed twice, I'm cold enuff 2 FREEZE HIS DOME -N- punch'm in the head just to "BREAK THE ICE"...// Take his life and get RID-OF-THE-CORPSE, smack this PITIFUL-WHORE wit CRITICAL-FORCE, my 'delivery got this "Newbie Kid" hooked' like AMBILLICAL-CORDS...// ~FINISHER~ hit you in "spanish",send "rockets" in your "culo",make him switch his name from scam and take a trip to "pluto"...// |
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Voted For: Wayne
wayne gets my vote. good structure. nice punches. ill pile drive you from a mile high . nice imagination . good job Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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This was feedback posted for Wayne
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hmmmm don't think that will count with no real explaination
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Voted For: Premanition
won easily Better punches and shit Other guy had nothing.Got that newb structure too. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Premanition
Premanition Dope? Shit! you can quote that I ‘beg’ to differ..” Down on two like ya mother, but her legs were stiffer 3.. Kind of played.. Kid get a grip you couldn’t be sick if ya brains hurled Eatin from a bin, that’s like an insight to ‘waynes world’ 4.. Seen the wayne's world shit before on him.. Decent flip.. kid don’t stress, I blame ya girl for them stretched rhymes cos them overweight stretch lines are bound to effect minds 0.. Just a weak ass statement. damn just drop the act bitch and pick up your reality you bout as much a ‘hot sauce’ as Williams was a casualty 6.. Decent concept.. this verse will serve you with flows that ‘paste’ to impress & you beta hope its ‘spreadable’ so you can taste the success 3.. Didn't really connect Total - 16/100 Wayne Your structure is fucking gay. Now, I Bomb-Geeks with Strong-Speaks that'z bound to Hit prem Harder than Concrete, son your beyond-weak...// 0.. No punch.. My "Led-Is-Wreckless" each Verse Dispersed Keepin son Dead-and-Breathless..Precision Incisions from "Head-to-Necklace" leave u "Ejectin-Breakfast"...// 0.. Ejecting breakfast? Forced to shit.. attack-with-a-force-above-average.. so when I pile-drive you from a mile-high you'll land-in-the-core-of-the-planet...// 0.. Just a wack fucking statement.. I'm labeled-as-flagrant.. watch me discard-your-jaw-bitch with a martial-arts-kick when your face lays-on-the-pavement...// 0.. Ok? Can you talk about something relative to a battle? All of your lettering's-wasted on this veteran's-flagrance.. I'll superglue your lips and paste them to leprosy-patients...// 0.. Just another weak ass statement.. Mc nice when he writes? Nah...bout to get Slayed twice, I'm cold enuff 2 FREEZE HIS DOME -N- punch'm in the head just to "BREAK THE ICE"...// 0.. I DONT GIVE A FUCK ABOUT THIS SHIT. Make a witty fucking punch already.. Take his life and get RID-OF-THE-CORPSE, smack this PITIFUL-WHORE wit CRITICAL-FORCE, my 'delivery got this "Newbie Kid" hooked' like AMBILLICAL-CORDS...// 3.. Decent.. hit you in "spanish",send "rockets" in your "culo",make him switch his name from scam and take a trip to "pluto"...// 0.. Weak ass statement.. weak ass execution.. weak ass shit.. Total - 3/80 Vote - Premanition |
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Voted For: Premanition
Wayne: I Bomb-Geeks with Strong-Speaks that'z bound to Hit prem Harder than Concrete, son your beyond-weak...// ^^no 1/10 My "Led-Is-Wreckless" each Verse Dispersed Keepin son Dead-and-Breathless..Precision Incisions from "Head-to-Necklace" leave u "Ejectin-Breakfast"...// ok..check this... ^^decent 4/10 attack-with-a-force-above-average.. so when I pile-drive you from a mile-high you'll land-in-the-core-of-the-planet...// ^^no 2/10 I'm labeled-as-flagrant.. watch me discard-your-jaw-bitch with a martial-arts-kick when your face lays-on-the-pavement...// ^^decent 4/10 All of your lettering's-wasted on this veteran's-flagrance.. I'll superglue your lips and paste them to leprosy-patients...//(eww) ^^funny 5/10 Mc nice when he writes? Nah...bout to get Slayed twice, I'm cold enuff 2 FREEZE HIS DOME -N- punch'm in the head just to "BREAK THE ICE"...// ^^good meta 6/10 Take his life and get RID-OF-THE-CORPSE, smack this PITIFUL-WHORE wit CRITICAL-FORCE, my 'delivery got this "Newbie Kid" hooked' like AMBILLICAL-CORDS...// ^^dope 7/10 hit you in "spanish",send "rockets" in your "culo",make him switch his name from scam and take a trip to "pluto"...// ^^ehh 2/10 Overall: 31/80 (39%) Premanition: “..Dope? Shit! you can quote that I ‘beg’ to differ..” Down on two like ya mother, but her legs were stiffer ^^ehh 3/10 Kid get a grip you couldn’t be sick if ya brains hurled Eatin from a bin, that’s like an insight to ‘waynes world’ ^^decent 5/10 kid don’t stress, I blame ya girl for them stretched rhymes cos them overweight stretch lines are bound to effect minds ^^ehh 3/10 damn just drop the act bitch and pick up your reality you bout as much a ‘hot sauce’ as Williams was a casualty (*) ^^dope bar 8/10 this verse will serve you with flows that ‘paste’ to impress & you beta hope its ‘spreadable’ so you can taste the success ^^lol good closer 6/10 Overall: 25/50 (50%) Vote: Premanition Return the favor with an honest vote on any battle in my sig or this vote will get removed. |
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Voted For: Premanition
. “..Dope? Shit! you can quote that I ‘beg’ to differ..” Down on two like ya mother, but her legs were stiffer ^Nice punch started strong^ Kid get a grip you couldn’t be sick if ya brains hurled Eatin from a bin, that’s like an insight to ‘waynes world’ ^Umm kinda weak...didnt have anything to do wit ur rhyme^ kid don’t stress, I blame ya girl for them stretched rhymes cos them overweight stretch lines are bound to effect minds ^good punch only cuz his lines are stretched^ damn just drop the act bitch and pick up your reality you bout as much a ‘hot sauce’ as Williams was a casualty (*) ^Good comparison which makes it a good punch this verse will serve you with flows that ‘paste’ to impress & you beta hope its ‘spreadable’ so you can taste the success ^nice closer way to shut it down^ v/Premanition RTF |
Voted For: Premanition
Dope? Shit! you can quote that I ‘beg’ to differ..” Down on two like ya mother, but her legs were stiffer ^^forced multi as punch sucked Kid get a grip you couldn’t be sick if ya brains hurled Eatin from a bin, that’s like an insight to ‘waynes world’ ^^NO....... kid don’t stress, I blame ya girl for them stretched rhymes cos them overweight stretch lines are bound to effect minds ^^used strecthed lines too much...whack damn just drop the act bitch and pick up your reality you bout as much a ‘hot sauce’ as Williams was a casualty (*) ^^NO....whack this verse will serve you with flows that ‘paste’ to impress & you beta hope its ‘spreadable’ so you can taste the success ^^Um....ight?...... Man...ya had an ight structure and all...but the punches sucked.Had some good multis and all though some sounded forced.Get some wordplay and metaphors. I Bomb-Geeks with Strong-Speaks that'z bound to Hit prem Harder than Concrete, son your beyond-weak...// ^^What the hell? My "Led-Is-Wreckless" each Verse Dispersed Keepin son Dead-and-Breathless..Precision Incisions from "Head-to-Necklace" leave u "Ejectin-Breakfast"...// ok..check this... ^^focusing too much on flow... attack-with-a-force-above-average.. so when I pile-drive you from a mile-high you'll land-in-the-core-of-the-planet...// ^^trow a punch... I'm labeled-as-flagrant.. watch me discard-your-jaw-bitch with a martial-arts-kick when your face lays-on-the-pavement...// ^^^ZZZZZZZZZZZZ All of your lettering's-wasted on this veteran's-flagrance.. I'll superglue your lips and paste them to leprosy-patients...//(eww) ^^yOU NOT GONNA TROW a punch...are you? Mc nice when he writes? Nah...bout to get Slayed twice, I'm cold enuff 2 FREEZE HIS DOME -N- punch'm in the head just to "BREAK THE ICE"...// ^^shut up about yourself and diss him. Take his life and get RID-OF-THE-CORPSE, smack this PITIFUL-WHORE wit CRITICAL-FORCE, my 'delivery got this "Newbie Kid" hooked' like AMBILLICAL-CORDS...// ^^*sigh*...finnaly over OK.....terrible structure.Good flow.But you seemed to focus too much on it.You had no punches.NONe.ZERO.All those lines spoke about yourself or something.Work on dissing. Vote-Premanition LOL http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203166 |
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Voted For: Premanition
v/premantion you came consistent, not the best i've seen from you, but consistent punches, with a few personals, got the job done. flow was nice, nothing stretched, wordplay was alright, originality i liked....overall, you had a nice verse, nothing seemed out of place, consistency was a main issue here, and you came on top. wayne, you really need to stop self-glorifying, because you have nice concepts and originality, good with multies, but too much self-glore, which takes away from your verse....and not too mention a structure thats all fucked up. but you do have some skill, realize you dont have to rhyme EVERYTHING, aight, word....no hate v/prem |
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