MaRVJay1009 vs Pen N' Paper
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 07-22-05 at 12:32 AM

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Pen N' Paper has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-21-05 12:33 AM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-21-05 12:48 AM.

MaRVJay at first I was thinking u were good but that’s what I thought
Cuz ur verses are like Jaws Sequels u were biting but just not caught
Man RV is not for u, do I gotta tell u 1009 times to get it through ur skull?
I darken the name while for u to get attention ur whole verse should be bold
Cuz they mad borin and u still askin why they callin u amerikas nightmare?
MJ ur verses are like Micheal Jackson no need to ask if they just might scare
Man just face it ur verses will never be hott unless u burn them wit matches
Ur punchlines are weak they like bad baseball players no one actually catches
So now that we kno the truth bout u ur reputation gon fall like rain precipitation
U aint winnin no more u aint lucky like winnin a raffle so thnx for ur participation

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Quick Explanations--(if u dont get any)
1st bar- Cuz he biting like jaws but never been caught cuz jaws always comes back in sequels......
2nd bar- If u notice that the words bolded is in his name and his rhymes are so boin that he whole verse needs to be bolded
3rd bar- His sig says amerikaz nightmare cuz his verses are so scary cuz they so wack....lol and MarvJay the initials is MJ, micheal jackson and his verses are scary like micheal and no need to ask if they might scare
4th bar- The only way that they hott if he burned them....lol....and like bad baseball players they cant play good so they miss the ball when they try to catch it
5th bar- he gon lose his reputation cuz he biting and its gon fall like rain and precipitation is rain.....and when u try to win a raffle u need to have luck but when u lose they always say like thnx for playing or thnx for ur participation...

dis kid is a clown he think net rap is cool,should i slap dis fool?.
'pen n paper' wouldn't sale if he drop'd durin time 2 go 'back 2 school'
fam u gota lil rep on dis site but dont be proud of it fag.
u record tracks? nah u like "dexter's sister" u not "allowed in da lab".
i been back 4 nights...now u talkin like you nice.....where????
ya rap career like 'toy story' u wont have a 'buzz' 4 a few 'light years'.
need protection in his own hood so he give detective's bread.
i aint badd with 'writin tools' but ima fill dis nigga 'pen with lead'.
no hot bars from dis guy just weak...so fam all da lyin pleez stop!
cuzz you couldn't "make-classics"...."designin reeboks".

another amerikaz nightmare bar lmao......

hey idk u and dont have any good personlas from u so what can i do.......lol.....if u had a pic i woulda diss u but u dont so ur sig is next.....lol........uppin dis for some votes....hott battle.....

This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

Marv murdered him...

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This was feedback posted for Pen N' Paper
 

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

pen n paper spit with good flow n nice overall verse

marv came had personals and punches raped up...cool word play and dat dexter line was funny...

v/ marvjay

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This was feedback posted for Pen N' Paper
 

both seem to be throwback rhymes but u got this one

Voted For: MaRVJay1009



dis kid is a clown he think net rap is cool,should i slap dis fool?.
'pen n paper' wouldn't sale if he drop'd durin time 2 go 'back 2 school'
fam u gota lil rep on dis site but dont be proud of it fag.
u record tracks? nah u like "dexter's sister" u not "allowed in da lab".
i been back 4 nights...now u talkin like you nice.....where????
ya rap career like 'toy story' u wont have a 'buzz' 4 a few 'light years'.

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MaRVJay at first I was thinking u were good but that’s what I thought
Cuz ur verses are like Jaws Sequels u were biting but just not caught

Sorry PNP but this battle was pretty one sided.... ur comin with concepts but ur not landin punches or anythin.... u needa learn how to word ur shit better so it comes out as a punch..... ur flow and structure was beter but that doesnt matter in a battle all that much wen u come down to it.... Marv had consistently better punches and LMFAO at that Opener... once i saw ur opener i knew Pen was in for a rough battle, lol... this was some of the dopest ive seen Marv write in a while...

V/Marv

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

dis kid is a clown he think net rap is cool,should i slap dis fool?.
'pen n paper' wouldn't sale if he drop'd durin time 2 go 'back 2 school'
-I liked the Opener, Nice wordplay. Good Punch

fam u gota lil rep on dis site but dont be proud of it fag.
u record tracks? nah u like "dexter's sister" u not "allowed in da lab".
-Ha Nice Concept, Good Punch


i been back 4 nights...now u talkin like you nice.....where????
ya rap career like 'toy story' u wont have a 'buzz' 4 a few 'light years'.
-Lol Decent Concept Nice Punch


need protection in his own hood so he give detective's bread.
i aint badd with 'writin tools' but ima fill dis nigga 'pen with lead'.
-Good Punch

no hot bars from dis guy just weak...so fam all da lyin pleez stop!
cuzz you couldn't "make-classics"...."designin reeboks".
-Ok Closer

Overall= This was a decent verse you dropped. Nice Wordplays with good concepts, and nice punches w/ personals. Keep Dropping.




MaRVJay at first I was thinking u were good but that’s what I thought
Cuz ur verses are like Jaws Sequels u were biting but just not caught
-Hmmmm Ok Opener. Nice Concept.


Man RV is not for u, do I gotta tell u 1009 times to get it through ur skull?
I darken the name while for u to get attention ur whole verse should be bold
-Nah Not feeling this Punch. Good Concept, should've worded it better

Cuz they mad borin and u still askin why they callin u amerikas nightmare?
MJ ur verses are like Micheal Jackson no need to ask if they just might scare
-Word Better next time. But Ok Punch with a Ok concept.


Man just face it ur verses will never be hott unless u burn them wit matches
Ur punchlines are weak they like bad baseball players no one actually catches
-Ha Nice Punch. Good Concept.

So now that we kno the truth bout u ur reputation gon fall like rain precipitation
U aint winnin no more u aint lucky like winnin a raffle so thnx for ur participation
-Ok Closer.

Overall- Some of your punches were "Ok", It just needed to be worded better. The baseball Line was good. The concepts In your lines was Nice, but next time word your Lines better.

Conclusion- Alright this was an Nice battle. Both came good, But I'm going to have to vote for Marv. He had nice punches with good concepts and decent wordplay w/ Personals. Pen and Paper you punches was good, it just seem that your Lines could've been worded better. The concepts you had was nice, it just that you need to word your lines better. Sorry But marv got you with "Punches, Wordplays, Personals"..Chea.


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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Man just face it ur verses will never be hott unless u burn them wit matches
Ur punchlines are weak they like bad baseball players no one actually catches
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no hot bars from dis guy just weak...so fam all da lyin pleez stop!
cuzz you couldn't "make-classics"...."designin reeboks".
dis kid is a clown he think net rap is cool,should i slap dis fool?.
'pen n paper' wouldn't sale if he drop'd durin time 2 go 'back 2 school'
fam u gota lil rep on dis site but dont be proud of it fag.
u record tracks? nah u like "dexter's sister" u not "allowed in da lab".
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vote/ marv.... and by the way ya'll should stop wit the simalies... u made a couple good ones but punches aint as hard hittin wit 'em.

and pen dont take away your vote from my battle just cuz i didn't vote for you.

and marv return the fav... or i'll get this vote removed... durr durr durr

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