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Pen N' Paper vs Nostradamus
Battle Rules:CREW BATTLE
(Topical) M.alicious M.ilitary M.entality vs. Undestructable Emcees 14 - 20 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 07-25-05 at 12:23 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
I think they forgot to put the topic in... ?
What do you want to write about.. |
well sorry bout that....lol...BC said that our topic is
War...... aight NOS.... |
Very creative and inspiring topic choice..
I'll pm you when I'm ready to drop. |
aight then but ill prolly drop on monday aight so ill checkin late but will drop monday fo sure...aight.....1.g/l homie.....
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Sixth Sense has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-25-05 06:09 AM.
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Nostradamus has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-25-05 06:48 AM.
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I start to paint a picture a beautiful scene on the canvas Different colors I paint with but for some reason I can’t have it Cuz when the brush touches it, it turns to red cuz of the violence Then I suddenly stop to see the picture… and im shocked I stay in silence . . . I try to stay away from the picture too scared to see the result Cuz what I saw was a big deal when I saw all the people in devote People in the streets stealing everything cuz of this situation im in disgust We started this picture but my country came with the idea?...im in mistrust Why did we wanna have this… and I was wonderin when is it going to be finish? So I took a match and flamed the picture but to my surprise it just got extinguished The only thing for me was to hide and stay alive so went underground to survive But this is my country I gotta fight Panama is where I’m from that’s why I have pride . . . My mind was busy with the thoughts of survival I was so confused Head hurting, legs tired, and arms stretched out is it cuz im bruised? Im tired of asking questions so now im looking for the answers verbally But the guns and bullets flying past my ear im getting the responses brutally . . . The many feets I see on every step is counted to how many deaths Cant walk anymore im losing everything I got im losing my breath My country’s soul is getting back to where its suppose to be Not locked in a cage finally its back and now its where its free No dictatorship Noreaga has been captured I heard in the news So as some had to pay their dues Panama is back like it was new The imprisoned have been listened so we as a country lost fear Now we can see and hear what we want to in our eyes and ears ------------------------- EXPLANATIONS- i was born in Panama in 1985 and i was like 5 when i experienced a war in Panama due to dictatorship there and the American Army helped us out get rid of the dictator named Noreaga...... |
War Check it.. Shits made often.. My optic metaphorical content. On played topics, like war.. Comming with a comical offence. You got this? Take notes or stay closed like car doors. To this death match, "Lord of the rings" opposing "Star wars". First off, its gandalf, the mans packing magic weaponry. http://img1.imagetitan.com/img1/1/5...ge1_gandalf.jpg "You step to me, I'll split ya spine off, with my telepathy." Respectivly....................Gandalf is up against a cobra. Prone to throw oponents over the edge, hes known as yoda. http://img1.imagetitan.com/img1/1/5/top_image2_yoda.jpg "No match you are, padawan, teach you I will" Drew his lightsaber, cracked the staff in half, then reached to kill. But gandalf, did a spell reacting like a sleeping pill. Now yoda's immobal, like breathing over an ether spill. He needs to chill.. http://img1.imagetitan.com/img1/1/5/top_image3_yoda.jpg "Weak I am, but still kill you I will." He used the force, to wake up, tilted ill on his grill. Fully aware, jumped on gangalf's shoulders & pulled his hair http://img1.imagetitan.com/img1/1/5...ge4_gandalf.jpg "You little shit!!" He grabbed yoda like Tyson & bit his ear. This meant war.. Since yoda got his ears ripped, he couldnt hear shit. He used the force, cracked gandalf with gimli's battle axe.. http://img1.imagetitan.com/img1/1/5...mage5_gimli.jpg "Give it back before I catch you fag, youll fear this." But the wizard was already dead, I guess the war is finished. And its like that.. OMG & liek if u dont get da punchaz and shit den dont vote nah mean |
Fucken hell man.. Good job going over the line limit..
I cut mine heaps short to make sure I didnt.. :annoyed: |
my bad.....lol......so ur gonna 4get that i went ova the line limit rite? for some reason i counted wrong dammit........
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This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
Nice drop to both .....keep it up...just lookin at polls
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Voted For: Nostradamus
Sixth - You had good emotion in yours, good imagery...I was feeling it. Nostra - Wow. "Secret Wars" by The Last Emperor, is one of my favorite underground tracks. This was really reminiscent of it. It was also quite humerous at parts. Sixth had a good story, but the fact that Nostra was able to take a topic as serious as war and just make it funny...well that takes the cake in my book. V//Nostradamus RTF please, link's in my sig. :) |
aight then more votes here...........plz more votes.........
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Voted For: Pen N' Paper
third time trying to vote on this shit... i shoudla saved my last 2 ones i thought sixth sense took this.. overalll i thought he had a better message in his and he reallly set it off with alot better emotion the vocab on both sides was nice. but i thought nos sorta strayed from the overall topic . on a structure sense nos took it.. i liked having a visual aspect but overall i thought you lacked in the personal application part.... sixthsense really stole it with his message i could feel the emotion. Vote//Sixth Sense |
ok thnx for votin any more votes plz uppin this.........
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This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
Whoa...dope Nos.....................................
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Voted For: Nostradamus
good battle by both...Nos....I loved your creativity..you OWNED the topic....you went completely left field an ended it wit a very enjoyable piece.....it was asimplistic at times but it wasn't a serious piece so its kinda hard to fault you for that....however ya rhyme scheme was nice...good struture you flowed off the pics nicely....I liked this piece the overall creativity was great Pen....you had a strong piece too, really Nos jus outdid in the creativity cateogory...you spit somethign expected....I figured one of you would spit an introspective tale like yours...but you flowed good...structure good..you piece was good...it jus simple got outdid...thats really all I cna say...cuz u def woulda won wit dat in most cases....but creativity an originality always wins in my book so much props to both yall but I'm a give to....... Nos |
Voted For: Nostradamus
Nos- this is original as fuck. The imagery is absolutly astounding.(pictures kinda helped) metaphores are solid thru this.This has got an insain fantasy feel to it. Pen n paper- I liekd your peice but the originality got outshined. You still came strong with your verse but it got kinda boring thru out it. you lyrics are solid and probley had one up on nos with them, but content originality and imagery just dont match up slightly. good solid battle. vote nostradamus |
Voted For: Nostradamus
Lmao, well, this was different to say the least. Pen: Serious approach, decent emotion. However, I felt your wording was kinda bad. You also had unneeded metaphors, like you were trying to complicate things for no reason. Flow was fine, but I didn't like your piece that much. Not a ton of originality, but it was a different view, but not that different. If you had tried to see it from the dictator's point of view, it may have been able to win. But the originality was just too low, and the wording was blah. Nos: Lmfao, wow. Now see I always though Gandalf would kick Yoda's ass. Anyway, very original idea here. I liked the spin on the topic. Your verse was good, rhyme scheme stayed consistant, and the times it changed helped the flow. I wish it could have gone on, good job man. Nice to see originality still alive. v- Nos |
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