E-Ray-Sir vs Unrestricted
 

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6 -8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

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Check in by: 07-29-05 at 10:28 PM

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Unrestricted has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-29-05 09:58 PM.

E-Ray-Sir has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-29-05 09:59 PM.

ok let me set this off with a hello..now that I got that out a the way
why you gotta try be smart? you couldnt be "bright" if your name was "day"
by the way theres nothing unrestricted about being limited in skill
kids rhymes seem dead and run down like week old road kills
never the less...I can still sever the best...with a clever contest
This is a dim day for restricted like the weathers a mess
So how bout we leave it on a positive rhyme
cause youll never transform from wak to dope even if you were optimis prime.

ok,bout to fry this noob named E-Ray, but no need to call me sir
jus becuz u see wat u wana be ertime i look in the mirror
ill put u in the dirt like i was a farmer and u was a seed
and then ill pluck ur ass out like a worthless weed
accepting this battle means u really dont care bout ur record
cuz ur bout to have a loss on it in a very quick second
u suck, u wouldnt have props if u was a stage play
like the d.c. arsonist, ill "fry" u anyday

wrote in a hurry...srry if its weak...had to hurry....

Voted For: E-Ray-Sir

lmao this was a good battle but i havta vote 4 E ray sir, he came wit harder punches, more original concepts such as

ok let me set this off with a hello..now that I got that out a the way
why you gotta try be smart? you couldnt be "bright" if your name was "day"

good use of wordplay and sum of his lines made me laugh, but good battle to both,
v/E Ray Sir

RTF

left feed on your battle due to not enough posts.

more votes please

Voted For: E-Ray-Sir

ok let me set this off with a hello..now that I got that out a the way
why you gotta try be smart? you couldnt be "bright" if your name was "day"
by the way theres nothing unrestricted about being limited in skill
kids rhymes seem dead and run down like week old road kills
never the less...I can still sever the best...with a clever contest
This is a dim day for restricted like the weathers a mess
So how bout we leave it on a positive rhyme
cause youll never transform from wak to dope even if you were optimis prime.

^^aww......shit......I accidentially posted vote....I was gon break it down and leave feedback.....report it unrestricted

just break it down now and vote...why wouldnt you vote?

too late now......................................

did you think i won? if you did then simply explain why.....

u cant post a vote after u already posted so he literally cant vote lol

actually scratch that, i suppose he could keep that vote there and break it down in this reply box, would still count.......thats assuming he was goin 2 vote 4 u....lol

ok let me set this off with a hello..now that I got that out a the way
why you gotta try be smart? you couldnt be "bright" if your name was "day"
^^umm...this was whack
by the way theres nothing unrestricted about being limited in skill
kids rhymes seem dead and run down like week old road kills
^^^OK..................
never the less...I can still sever the best...with a clever contest
This is a dim day for restricted like the weathers a mess
^^^not really much of a punchline
So how bout we leave it on a positive rhyme
cause youll never transform from wak to dope even if you were optimis prime.
^^^stretched...but punch was at least decent

OKay....get some more punches/concepts.Get some wordplay and shit.I think ya got potential to be something.But ya got work.Ya had some stretched lines and shit.Fucked up flow.Get some metas and wordplay.And where were your personals?

ok,bout to fry this noob named E-Ray, but no need to call me sir
jus becuz u see wat u wana be ertime i look in the mirror
^^wat???This was whack
ill put u in the dirt like i was a farmer and u was a seed
and then ill pluck ur ass out like a worthless weed
^^^I fail to see a legitamte punch
accepting this battle means u really dont care bout ur record
cuz ur bout to have a loss on it in a very quick second
^^Where's the punch and it lacked a rhyme
u suck, u wouldnt have props if u was a stage play
like the d.c. arsonist, ill "fry" u anyday
^^Punch.....WHere

OK....too much filler and no punch.Here's wat goin down kiddo.DOn't talk about urself so much.Focus on the other guy.Just try your best to make him feel stupuid.It;s pointless to talk about beatin/killin him when we on the net.JUst diss.

Vote-E-Ray-Sir

OK...I voted...so don't report it anymore Restricted.

Keep elevating both of you.

You lucky I was goin to vote for you E-RAY-Sir..............

wow.


this battle threads a mess..lolol.
thanks for clarifiying that macreep.

upping for more votes.

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Voted For: E-Ray-Sir

both verses was indeed weak
but i got ta choose sum1
E-Ray u came in kinda of lame by say hello so do dat again
u rhymed but did have a few good punches so dats
all i got ta say and u made mo sense

Unrest- yo shit was weak u shouldnt neva rushed through dat shit cuz it couldda been beta

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Voted For: E-Ray-Sir

E-Ray-Sir:

ok let me set this off with a hello..now that I got that out a the way
why you gotta try be smart? you couldnt be "bright" if your name was "day"
^^decent meta, set up was retarded though 5/10
by the way theres nothing unrestricted about being limited in skill
kids rhymes seem dead and run down like week old road kills
^^ok bar not too great 4/10
never the less...I can still sever the best...with a clever contest
This is a dim day for restricted like the weathers a mess
^^good multies, perfect flow, ok meta 8/10
So how bout we leave it on a positive rhyme
cause youll never transform from wak to dope even if you were optimis prime.
^^good meta ok closer 6/10

Overall: 23/40 (58%)


Unrestricted:

ok,bout to fry this noob named E-Ray, but no need to call me sir
jus becuz u see wat u wana be ertime i look in the mirror
^^ehh that was kinda gay 3/10
ill put u in the dirt like i was a farmer and u was a seed
and then ill pluck ur ass out like a worthless weed
^^no 2/10
accepting this battle means u really dont care bout ur record
cuz ur bout to have a loss on it in a very quick second
^^no 2/10
u suck, u wouldnt have props if u was a stage play
like the d.c. arsonist, ill "fry" u anyday
^^decent 4/10

Overall: 11/40 (28%)


Vote: E-Ray-Sir


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Voted For: E-Ray-Sir

Good battle ya'll...

Battle breakdown

Multis-E Ray Sir
punches=E Ray Sir
personals=E Ray Sir
Complexity-E Ray Sir
Vocab- E Ray Sir
structure- E Ray Sir
Wordplay-E Ray

Overall, pretty decent battle..but i'm agreeing with unrestricted.....Ray came out in the first 2 lines swinging hard

Unrestricted...you went first, so i know how that feels......you came half-way decent

VoTE= E Ray Sir

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