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Macreep 07-30-05 02:07 PM

MAcreep tutoriAL
 
Ight

FLow and shit

STRUCTURE
When making a real song...this means nothing.But in text...it means a lot.Some people may not even read the verses...if it's ugly...they say fuck it.And vote for the neater verse.
ex of ugly verse-
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...483&postcount=5
ex of neat verse-
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...468&postcount=5

//....."blah-blah-blah"......~blah-blah-blah~
^^avoid having these things.

You do not need to have a "perfect square structure"...look at OMB's verses/tutorial to see wat I mean.Just don't make it ugly.

FLOW
Doesn't matter as much in text as it would in audio.But still matters.That same syllables thing is BS in my opinion.I seen lines that flow when it didn't have same amount or near to same amount of sllyables.Just read it to urself after and judge it to see if it flows.

Rhyme scheme...now..this is just bassically the way you place your rhyming words.Newbs will not care about this....but vets will chastise you for it.WHen battlin someone with skill....do not use a basic rhyme scheme.And DO NOT BITE SOMEONE ELSE"S RHYME SCHEME.Find ya own.WHen ya start off...you will have a basic rhyme sheme...but it'll get better.Which is why....when ya first start...battle newbs.

Basic rhyme scheme
blah-blah-blah-blah-whack
blah-blah-blah-blah-black
blah-blah-blah-blah-sack
^^see the 50 cent/Tupac shit...as a newb...go for it...as a vet...BOOO!

Be indirect too...don't just say shit.That gets you no where.
ex.
instead of sayin.,.."eating a box of fruit loops'
say..."eatin a cereal with parrot on cover"
^^weak exampe I know..but you get the idea....

Multis
See OMB's tutorial...he describes it in detail

ALLITERATION
This is the same sound of letters in a row.Use it if ya can...but no forcing....

Now Beowulf bode in the burg of the Scyldings, Leader beloved, and long he ruled In fame with all folk since his father had gone

^^Not a requirement....but it will help you out.A poetry skill...that can be used in battles

Punches and shit

Punches are something that should be funny or make us go "DAMN..THAT WAS HARSH!!!!"They must be complex..but still be decipherable to the reader.

WORDPLAY
Like the name says...a play with words

HEre is an example
Nobody goes to 'Bat' for you....like Transylavia got bombed

^^sorta weak example...but an example
As you can see bat for you..is a term for standing up for you.
And bat as also means the animal...found in Translyvania

NOT wordplay..but punches
I'd say I'd eat you up...but you'd probably spread ya legs open

Ur elevation skills ain't flying anywhere...like the BULL turned Crip
^^
Now as you can see...these are good disses..but they are not wordplay.
As you can see...you can take things on TV and put them in punches.REd BULL...flying....turned CRip=blue.Clever punch...courtesy of myself.

PERSONALS
These are disses that are directed straight to your oppent.AT least 90% of the verse should consist of these...they should come from the oppent name,profile, or wat he said or did.GO through his posts and shit to find some dirt on him.NEva be afraid to say something.LOok for the lowest blow possible so the other guy feels stupuid

Personals can also be combines with wordplay

Middleweight cuz you stay between guys, thats sick
K-Trini(dad)?.. ya, cuz "boxers" always stay on dicks
Your wack, ok-trini? And damn, your rhymes aint felt
N' I aint talkin boxin when trini swings bellow the belt
This guys bad, he's done, n' his rappin is fuckin sad
Fuck boxers, when I son this bitch call me trini-dad
-Posted by Jack the ripper againt K-trini(props on the verse Jack)

As you can see....his whole verse consisted of personals combined with wordplay.VEry creative,and complex...yet simple enough for us to understand.

SET-UP LINES
This is something non-existant in battles.The set-up line must be relevant in some way to the punch.It really helps.Because if the punch is a gay joke...but the line above it talks about how dumb the guy is...then it's sloppy.EVEry line must be a punch...or set-up.


CLOSURE
HAve fun...and remember...if you lose a battle....keep at it...don't complain.But there will be a time....when people will hate on you for being good...and then they will purposely vote against you in battles out of hate and envy.When this happens....then make a new name.(*gasp*..is that a clue to your alias Macreep!?!?!)

SOme dope lines to leave you with

Nigga.. hop off the Aim List, and stop with the name flips
Number One!? Get real evolve - that means you Aint Shit!
You gay bitch, James is amazin' - league needs picking up
so fuck Herbs, i Gave up Smoking, & im just Kicking Butts!
blessed w/ sickenin' touch, forfeit - & save from losing man,
this week, i'll be Dropping E harder than Rave Music Fans!
destroy & abuse yur plans, im gruesome & w/o the quotes
By the look in ur Eyes, its obvious your Cornea then most!
and so, im floorin this hoax for boastin in posts, but fuck it
tried kickin the habit, but verse me: all ur kickin's the bucket!
This kid got lucky, u was a no name up til u ditched ya crew
sure, theres no U in Bitch . . but theres a lot of Bitch in You!
im rippin dudes up daily, maybe i should be-head this whore
dump his Corpse on the Beach. . & leave him Dead for Shore!
this threads a bore. . but im sure that your groupies will pass
because voters'll be Riding On E ..like the car was Outta Gas!
w/o all the trash talking, wonder why im @ ur house in the mornin?
Yo Momma! <--- perfect example of getting Somethin from Nothing!
but fuck it, i'll end this here, and Sink your Champion-Ship
just cause we call you a Pussy -
dont mean ya Gods Gift To Women, Bitch!
-James Bondage

you suppose to be dope??..kid's a fake & i'll expose his ploy
put his Neck on the Line & Hang him like RB's Poster.... Boy(old sig)
watch his post get destroyed.. can't prevent me, forget it
Baron Mynd?? nah... CamaWac is simply Empty Headed
dudes pathetic.. just upset his alias's down right tanked
so like his name, i'll leave James.. Bound Tight & Spanked
crowd's will like & thank.. im forced to leave this Biter Rocked
forget Scratching the Surface, im Cracking his whole Writer's Block
stop sweating me & leave my jock.. dawg, ive been hotta
why do you think Krupp made a thread naming you..........
"This Weekend's Pinata"
thats ^^ werd.. you got alot of nerve acting like your nice
especially since the Punch in your sixth bar.... was Swung Twice
yeah that's right.. i did a search, thought it would be fun
"What's Happening Now".. his words aint Phat, their just ReRun
he's done.. plus he's a fag.. yeah, this kid is just Gay .. see
no matter how you figure it.. you can't spell Blow Job w/o a JB
so maybe .. now is the perfect time for you to cease & desist
considering how.. ORIGINALLY your Fists have Ceased to Exist
just leave, I Insist.. stop your non-sense, not concerned w/ your verse
you had your Turn @ a title Shot.................................
-Evolve

Honestly, you're nothing special, and I ain't one to bluff
I'd chew you up and spit you out, but you ain't even up to snuff
He wont reign, I'm stormin' upon his horizon of thoughts
And take this cats 9 lives without needing some time to paws
I'm savage, g, I almost gay bashed and had your faggot ass kicked
But you never came out the closet...you just stayed in there to jacket
How'd you ever get to the championship? I mean the fact is
I grazed through like half your battles and couldn't get pasture wackness
Had enough, friend? That's how it might look
But you revved my engine, so InturnI'll comebustchins with a right hook
This battle's a waste of my time, so instead of crackin' your clock
I killed you online, now have the admins put Jack in a box
-9th degree vs Jack the Ripper

.Barz Of Steel. 07-30-05 02:24 PM

Nice tutorial, but wrong place for it. You explained everything pretty good though, so props on that.

Macreep 07-30-05 02:25 PM

^^wrong place....where it sopposed to go?

*Bad Newz* 07-30-05 02:27 PM

yeah preety good K umm i mean Mac..........get sumone to move this tuts.......good job though...

MC Firetruck 07-30-05 02:30 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Macreep
^^wrong place....where it sopposed to go?

Where the hell do you think?

Macreep 07-30-05 02:31 PM

^^I can't post in Tutoral faggot....a mod has to move it don't they?

New Meth0d 07-30-05 02:33 PM

lmao @ the dope lines

Macreep 07-30-05 02:34 PM

^^LoL...but..hey........I gave DAz props for those who don't like K-trini.

Sean Gunner 07-30-05 02:34 PM

Anyone notice how 2 of the verses are from a K Trini battle?

Macreep 07-30-05 02:35 PM

^^So.............wat.......it got wordplay..........for once...take the hate and envy out and give him props that he deserves.

Sean Gunner 07-30-05 02:37 PM

He doesn't deserve any. His wordplay was old and not original. He used punches a 10 year old could think of. Not to mention half of his 'wordplay' was barely even wordplay.

New Meth0d 07-30-05 02:39 PM

that and k-trini was banned....mostly because he's wack

Macreep 07-30-05 02:43 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by The Revelation
He doesn't deserve any. His wordplay was old and not original. He used punches a 10 year old could think of. Not to mention half of his 'wordplay' was barely even wordplay.



w/e

And look.......I ain't in the mood for beef.PLEase.

Sean Gunner 07-30-05 02:44 PM

I don't beef, I point out facts.

Spektikul 07-30-05 02:47 PM

Macreep...

Nobody Likes You...:thumbup:

(^thats sigabble ppl^)

Macreep 07-30-05 02:47 PM

^^OK.....so wat if I put 2 K-trini verse......would you like me to remove one...if it bothers you so bad?

Nynth Degree 07-30-05 03:03 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Spektikul
Macreep...

Nobody Likes You...:thumbup:

(^thats sigabble ppl^)

That's not siggable, that's old news! :)

Macreep 07-30-05 03:06 PM

^^That coming from someone who got props in my tutorial ?HUH 9th?

Nynth Degree 07-30-05 03:11 PM

Lol so what? Woohoo, I got props in a tutorial...you know why? Because it was a creative verse.

Macreep 07-30-05 03:12 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by 9th Degree
Lol so what? Woohoo, I got props in a tutorial...you know why? Because it was a creative verse.



Yeah it was....now stop dissing me every chance you get.I don't know wat your problem with me is.

∆ P E X X 07-30-05 03:19 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Macreep

SOme dope lines to leave you with

Black Queen and cheddar's a myth,like stories about the moon
And this battle was neva tided/tied,liked the ocean at noon
Shaving her pussy is the only time a day she gets a raze/raise
Trappin her d/r's in a net is how she gets a catch phrase/praise
But somehow,her crew whack ass crew of fags stay the most wet
And I swear,she must be a bad model
.................................................. .....way she fails to 'pose' a threat!!!!!
I'd use my best against you,but dat'd just be a waste
Only water can like your rhymes cause it got no taste
-K-trini vs Black Queen

think ya a manuscript master ? well im here to prove your wacker
cuz you always drops wack(wax)like when candles hit the plaster
this battle was a bad move-E(movie)like ya choosen the wrong vid.
so im dropping the 'E' kids, cuz the.C(sea)gets split like mosses did..
easily bruise ya ego to blue from black like a fuckin hockey puck mark
cuz its E.C(easy)to leave C spinning in circles, like damn copy write mark
ya should've stalled, cuz wack n lame is what ya mixtures called...
n after this battle he’ll be leaf-in(leavin)the sight like pictures of fall…
-Daz vs E.C.

Honestly, you're nothing special, and I ain't one to bluff
I'd chew you up and spit you out, but you ain't even up to snuff
He wont reign, I'm stormin' upon his horizon of thoughts
And take this cats 9 lives without needing some time to paws
I'm savage, g, I almost gay bashed and had your faggot ass kicked
But you never came out the closet...you just stayed in there to jacket
How'd you ever get to the championship? I mean the fact is
I grazed through like half your battles and couldn't get pasture wackness
Had enough, friend? That's how it might look
But you revved my engine, so InturnI'll comebustchins with a right hook
This battle's a waste of my time, so instead of crackin' your clock
I killed you online, now have the admins put Jack in a box
-9th degree vs Jack the Ripper


Where's the dope lines? Those pieces that you show as examples are AAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS. Only on RV woulda 1syl rhymescheme still be hot. That shit went out in 1989. The wordplay in the last verse was straight up . And I'm saying this because there's way iller shit out there than any of this, lol, bu this got chosen as the "examples". smh....

Nynth Degree 07-30-05 03:22 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Doomsday
Only on RV woulda 1syl rhymescheme still be hot. That shit went out in 1989.

Word to this.
Quote:
The wordplay in the last verse was straight up . And I'm saying this because there's way iller shit out there than any of this, lol, bu this got chosen as the "examples". smh....

Lol it's just where RV is at this point. Yeah I can see flaws in my verse, and I realize there's way better shit out there. But if you compare it to the rest of RV, well...it gives them a goal to shoot for.

∆ P E X X 07-30-05 03:30 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by 9th Degree
Word to this.

Lol it's just where RV is at this point. Yeah I can see flaws in my verse, and I realize there's way better shit out there. But if you compare it to the rest of RV, well...it gives them a goal to shoot for.


Damn son, that's some low-ass aspirations if that's what dudes here shoudl be aiming at. weren't you KORV at one point or another? And that's what you're fuckin with man? Damn son. I just died a little inside.

Nynth Degree 07-30-05 03:49 PM

I still am KORV, until the next tourney. But yeah, wasn't my best though.

Macreep 07-30-05 03:49 PM

ok........but can you give me some dope verses from this site to put?

and doomsday...that shit was nessersary.u said that shit solely to bash me
or to be funny.

Sixth Sense 07-30-05 04:05 PM

yo how do u get abnned from being k-trini.......lol

Macreep 07-30-05 04:06 PM

^^huh?????............

Germ 07-30-05 04:08 PM

lmlo at k-trini recycling garbage lines

I'd use my best against you,but dat'd just be a waste
Only water can like your rhymes cause it got no taste
-K-trini vs Black Queen

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=197357

/hahahahahhaha, macreep is soOOOoOoOo good at text :rolleyes:

Macreep 07-30-05 04:12 PM

^^wat ya mean recycling....that ain't recyling..I said at bottom I used it against black queen in a battle

Sixth Sense 07-30-05 04:13 PM

^^werd hes so good man werd......lol......sike........

Nynth Degree 07-30-05 04:14 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Macreep
^^wat ya mean recycling....that ain't recyling..I said at bottom I used it against black queen in a battle

I thought you weren't K-Trini.

Germ 07-30-05 04:15 PM

click the link you cunt, and check trin's verse....both closers are the same

wow, it gets frustrating arguing with a fucktard

Macreep 07-30-05 04:16 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by 9th Degree
I thought you weren't K-Trini.



I'm not.....................I got caught up in how he said "I" recycle...and how everyone accuse me of shit.*sigh*

Germ 07-30-05 04:19 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Macreep
I'm not.....................


macreep has a crush on k-trini :love:

and they both love to be whack.

Nynth Degree 07-30-05 04:29 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Macreep
I'm not.....................I got caught up in how he said "I" recycle...and how everyone accuse me of shit.*sigh*

But you did say "I used it against Black Queen"

blatt blatt!

Macreep 07-30-05 04:34 PM

I got caught up in how he keep sayin it was"me" recycling.

Look man...I'm tired..so some other tiime 9th.

Germ 07-30-05 04:36 PM

wow, i didn't say you recycled at all

Quote:
Originally Posted by Drakel
lmlo at k-trini recycling garbage lines


so confusing :rolleyes:

Sixth Sense 07-30-05 04:36 PM

K-trina......lol.....k-trin ~K-trini~......ur all the same as macreep ur all whack.....lol

Crazy Hades 07-30-05 04:40 PM

Lmao. Macreep, you need to stop letting shit slip. XD

∆ P E X X 07-30-05 06:05 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Macreep
ok........but can you give me some dope verses from this site to put?

and doomsday...that shit was nessersary.u said that shit solely to bash me
or to be funny.



No, I did it to bash the weaksauce that those verses were smothered in. why would I be bashing you unless you were one of those that made one of those verses....like K-Trini!!!


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