loyalty vs will a peer
 

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Check in by: 07-30-05 at 04:41 PM

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will a peer has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-30-05 04:12 PM.

Loyalty has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-30-05 04:16 PM.

kids wack tried 2 get in ue and failed now hes tryin 2 bounce back
so he pms me tryin to buy cs for rv cash wall street stats are fallin fast
kid says hes not a new b check the facts look at his battle rec damn kid
alias banned for bitin unregistered guest he cant name one beaten vet
kid says hes done with this shit fuck rapverse they’re all wack faggots
this kid cant leave he loves are lines he cant refuse like a coke addict
this kids on my clit and im drippin blood now he got his red wings
red all down his face like his pic of wayne swallowed my tampon string
ill throw this kid a 1000 bux cause he bothere to shpw up and drop
lchange his name cause hes ashamed wouldn’t be the first thing hes bought
fuck a quick 10 ill go 12 while im waitin for this bitch to drop doesnt no how to check in
45 minutes wasnt long enough for 5 bars watch me have to reset this again
lol just waistin time but hurry up im not reseting it again cause u dont no how to check in

good battle took u long enough lol........................................

Its All Good And Fun...............................

Voted For: Loyalty

loyalty owned this shit sun...i cant buleave it, yo~

shit, loyaltee, punches were tight, so good man, you got shit down on pact, had ideas flowing through your noggin like putting water in there man, sick shit! you owned her good with you opener, had it sealed, werd man, keep elevate alot though, word.

will a peer, just didn't have it man, you gotta git betta wordplay and word ya shit alot better, come up with better concepts, and use betta wordplay and shit, but you almost had her, didn't like your shit though, nothing special, keep up.

v/loyaltee

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Wall Street killed it.........

Voted For: Loyalty

The Only Time She Will A PeerIs If There's Some Dick Around
^
ooo nice punch

you seemed to flow thru to each punch nicely,they all connected well and hit hard.Personnals were good.

will a peer. your verse seemed ok, but didnt really have the same amount of solid punches. The end was wak(even though you were doing it on purpose to try express how much you didnt care about the battle,or su'ing) It still didnt help your battle out.

your lines are stretched.

Vote-Loyalty

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Voted For: Loyalty

Loyalty:

This Chick Couldn't Spit Dope If She Started Choking On Weed
Claiming Queen's A Federal Offense...........Just Go On And Leave
^^ehh ok 4/10
Half Your Losses Are More Then Half Your Wins This Is A Trip Out
The Only Time She Will A PeerIs If There's Some Dick Around
^^lol good bar 7/10
Like An Arm Amputees Fight...Punches.... You Can't Bring
You Won't Make It In Rap...You Got Better Chances Going Camping
^^ehh 4/10
Crime Syndicate? Only Time You Was A Felon Is On True Crime
Your Punches Wouldn't Conncet To Two Lines If It Was Glue Lines
^^ehh 4/10
It's Against Your Will To Win.....Your Talent Does Not Exist Dear
Your Entering A Restricted Zone.......Turn Around The Exits Here
^^ok 4/10

Overall: 23/50 (46%)


Will A Peer:

kids wack tried 2 get in ue and failed now hes tryin 2 bounce back
so he pms me tryin to buy cs for rv cash wall street stats are fallin fast
^^no 2/10
kid says hes not a new b check the facts look at his battle rec damn kid
alias banned for bitin unregistered guest he cant name one beaten vet
^^ok 5/10
kid says hes done with this shit fuck rapverse they’re all wack faggots
this kid cant leave he loves are lines he cant refuse like a coke addict
^^decent bar 5/10
this kids on my clit and im drippin blood now he got his red wings
red all down his face like his pic of wayne swallowed my tampon string
^^umm no 2/10
ill throw this kid a 1000 bux cause he bothere to shpw up and drop
lchange his name cause hes ashamed wouldn’t be the first thing hes bought
^^ok 4/10
fuck a quick 10 ill go 12 while im waitin for this bitch to drop doesnt no how to check in
45 minutes wasnt long enough for 5 bars watch me have to reset this again
^^no 3/10

Overall: 21/60 (35%)


Vote: Loyalty


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Voted For: will a peer

kids wack tried 2 get in ue and failed now hes tryin 2 bounce back
so he pms me tryin to buy cs for rv cash wall street stats are fallin fast
- Ok Opener. Felt that wasn't a decent Punch though.

kid says hes not a new b check the facts look at his battle rec damn kid
alias banned for bitin unregistered guest he cant name one beaten vet
-Ok Punch with a personal....

kid says hes done with this shit fuck rapverse they’re all wack faggots
this kid cant leave he loves are lines he cant refuse like a coke addict
- You mean "Our" Lines...Word your lines better. The Punch was Ok.

this kids on my clit and im drippin blood now he got his red wings
red all down his face like his pic of wayne swallowed my tampon string
- I liked this Bar, good Punch with a wordplay and a personal.

ill throw this kid a 1000 bux cause he bothere to shpw up and drop
lchange his name cause hes ashamed wouldn’t be the first thing hes bought
- Cool, I liked the Punch. Good Personal.

fuck a quick 10 ill go 12 while im waitin for this bitch to drop doesnt no how to check in
45 minutes wasnt long enough for 5 bars watch me have to reset this again
lol just waistin time but hurry up im not reseting it again cause u dont no how to check in
- That...Was...A...Whack Closer...Word your lines more better. and the Punch wasn't Decent...Just Basic.


Overall- Ok verse. The Punches were ok, just word your line's more better and your grammar. You had 1 bar of a good Punch and that was the "Dissing the sig" Line. I felt that was the best in your whole verse. The closer was not good. Elevate on Punches. Chea.

This Chick Couldn't Spit Dope If She Started Choking On Weed
Claiming Queen's A Federal Offense...........Just Go On And Leave
- Meh...Ok opener..Seen the 1st Line so Played out. The 2nd Line was Not a Good Punch.. Overall not a good bar.

Half Your Losses Are More Then Half Your Wins This Is A Trip Out
The Only Time She Will A PeerIs If There's Some Dick Around
- Ahh Nice Bar. I liked the personal. Wordplay was ok. The Punch was good though.

Like An Arm Amputees Fight...Punches.... You Can't Bring
You Won't Make It In Rap...You Got Better Chances Going Camping
- Meh Didnt Find this a good Punch. Could've Worded it a little better. But it wasn't a good Punch.

Crime Syndicate? Only Time You Was A Felon Is On True Crime
Your Punches Wouldn't Conncet To Two Lines If It Was Glue Lines
- Nice Wordplay here. Good Punch

It's Against Your Will To Win.....Your Talent Does Not Exist Dear
Your Entering A Restricted Zone.......Turn Around The Exits Here
- Ok Punch. The 1st Line was Good. The 2nd Line was bleh...Basic...Bleh.

Overall- This was...I can say...A...Average Verse. You got some Good Wordplays there. Some were Good Punches, some were not. Keep Dropping I say elevate on Punches...w/ Wordplays.

Conclusion- ALright. This was a good battle to say atleast. I'mma vote for WillAPeer. Sorry Loyalty But she got you with Punches with more personals. Punches more Effective. Your Punches overall was ok,, just need to work on Punch Lines w/ Wordplays. Good Verse But willapeer got you with more Personals and effective Punches...

V/ willapeer


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Voted For: will a peer

hahaha.. this was a okay battle..

kids wack tried 2 get in ue and failed now hes tryin 2 bounce back
so he pms me tryin to buy cs for rv cash wall street stats are fallin fast

good line

45 minutes wasnt long enough for 5 bars watch me have to reset this again
lol just waistin time but hurry up im not reseting it again cause u dont no how to check in

not a good dis but funny lol..

flow was okay.. lil too long.. not wut u would do in a real battle like live wise.. but yeah.. your punclines were okay.. only had a good ones..

loyalty..
Like An Arm Amputees Fight...Punches.... You Can't Bring
You Won't Make It In Rap...You Got Better Chances Going Camping

didnt make sence???

Crime Syndicate? Only Time You Was A Felon Is On True Crime
Your Punches Wouldn't Conncet To Two Lines If It Was Glue Lines

ur best line but.. was an okay line..

basiclly only thing u had better was structure and flow... next time work on better punches man.. thats all n try to do better personals

vote: will

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rtf feed in my song please :(.. in song forum .......................

ok thanks for voting kid................................... i hate replying to songs :/

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checkin the pollz.................................

Voted For: Loyalty

iight look i think you won by a hair becuz will apeer shit was a lil played wit a twist her first lines i heard it some time b4 not orignial as wel as you but you kept on dissin her wit her name and i like the where theres a dick she will apear part.....it was real hard cuz both verse wasnt that good didnt like both but for some reason i liked loyaties verse a lil better.....so now you know who i'm a vote for and i'm a vote for loyalty...you won by a single piece of hair.........................

Voted For: will a peer

kids wack tried 2 get in ue and failed now hes tryin 2 bounce back
so he pms me tryin to buy cs for rv cash wall street stats are fallin fast
nice lil opener......

kid says hes not a new b check the facts look at his battle rec damn kid
alias banned for bitin unregistered guest he cant name one beaten vet
ought oh @ personals...lol

kid says hes done with this shit fuck rapverse they’re all wack faggots
this kid cant leave he loves are lines he cant refuse like a coke addict
played................thats all.....

this kids on my clit and im drippin blood now he got his red wings
red all down his face like his pic of wayne swallowed my tampon string
EWWWWWWWW.....but dope bar lol

ill throw this kid a 1000 bux cause he bothere to shpw up and drop
lchange his name cause hes ashamed wouldn’t be the first thing hes bought
pretty nice.....

fuck a quick 10 ill go 12 while im waitin for this bitch to drop doesnt no how to check in
45 minutes wasnt long enough for 5 bars watch me have to reset this again
lol just waistin time but hurry up im not reseting it again cause u dont no how to check in

LOL im not even countin this last part.....

WS
This Chick Couldn't Spit Dope If She Started Choking On Weed
Claiming Queen's A Federal Offense...........Just Go On And Leave
BOOOOO @ Played ass opener.......

Half Your Losses Are More Then Half Your Wins This Is A Trip Out
The Only Time She Will A PeerIs If There's Some Dick Around
Will A Peer = Will Appear concept = PLAYED....Pop Lotty used it in 1st Korv...sorry kid...not cuttin it..

Like An Arm Amputees Fight...Punches.... You Can't Bring
You Won't Make It In Rap...You Got Better Chances Going Camping
WTF......

Crime Syndicate? Only Time You Was A Felon Is On True Crime
Your Punches Wouldn't Conncet To Two Lines If It Was Glue Lines
Pretty decent here...i liked it....

It's Against Your Will To Win.....Your Talent Does Not Exist Dear
Your Entering A Restricted Zone.......Turn Around The Exits Here
umm....no




OOK....basically im going with Will because she only had one played concept...whereas wicked..50% of his verse = played.......Will had wayyyy more personals...and harder hitting punches....and...well...thats what it takes to win a battle....good battle by both...but Willa Mos def wins this

Voted For: Loyalty

i expected more from both of u

loyalty - ur verse was kinda good..i really liked ur personal about her not appearing unless theirs dick..even though i think ive seen it before..ur opener was a little weak..ur first line was better than the second..i didnt like ur closer though..u had some good thoughts in there tryin to attack her crew..but not all the punches connected.....7/10




will a peer - i thought u would do better than this..it looked like u tried to cram a lot of stuff into one line..personals?..u had some good ideas but none of them hit hard..the coke line i think was ur best punch..ur closer was kinda wack too.....6/10


loyalty wins

Thanks Lols Wil lA Peer Herb Trying To Get Votes Removed And Shits..No Wonder Ppl Complain About Rv Cause Peeps Like Her

Voted For: Loyalty

pretty good man not the best i seen from you but it was good man nice work on it. you had some good personals and a fee punches your flow was good you had some nice vocab along with that came the rhyme scheme and punches was okay i felt that it could of came harder a few lines were played but other then these facts you had and okay verse man keep this up and youll elevate more blah nothing special here. you had some even played lines in your verse and the concept that you did more lines then him showed that you couldn't handle his shit. your vocabulary was wow just plain out garbage no hate need elevation on that man. also you rhyme scheme was shitty try and do some work on that that's like a prime example over elevation in text battles to get to audio. punches was and okay thing here nothing that hid hard really elevate on some. wurd.............................................

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Voted For: Loyalty

will a peer came real basic, nothing really hit, he said kid about 15 times, try and mix your vocab up a bit overall also. Wicked scripts had some good complexity, with some decent wordplay and a couple of punches that were quite nice like the glue lines one.

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Voted For: Loyalty

im votin fo Wicked.Scripts, he had better rymes, will a peer, sum of yo shit didnt ryme 2 me... kid and vet?

Wicked.Scripts had sum punches that made me laught that i really liked. will a peer, ur punches werent that good, maybe i just didnt understand them, i dunno

The Only Time She Will A PeerIs If There's Some Dick Around

lol, that made me laugh out loud

this kids on my clit and im drippin blood now he got his red wings
red all down his face like his pic of wayne swallowed my tampon string

ROFL, wtf? lmao

no hate will a peer. anywayz, werd

Voted For: Loyalty

This Chick Couldn't Spit Dope If She Started Choking On Weed
Claiming Queen's A Federal Offense...........Just Go On And Leave
—hah, this opener was decent
Half Your Losses Are More Then Half Your Wins This Is A Trip Out
The Only Time She Will A PeerIs If There's Some Dick Around
—punch was pretty coo
Like An Arm Amputees Fight...Punches.... You Can't Bring
You Won't Make It In Rap...You Got Better Chances Going Camping
[b—hah, this punch was okay, not as hard hitting though, but it was decent[/b]
Crime Syndicate? Only Time You Was A Felon Is On True Crime
Your Punches Wouldn't Conncet To Two Lines If It Was Glue Lines
—aigt
It's Against Your Will To Win.....Your Talent Does Not Exist Dear
Your Entering A Restricted Zone.......Turn Around The Exits Here
—haha, nice closer


kids wack tried 2 get in ue and failed now hes tryin 2 bounce back
so he pms me tryin to buy cs for rv cash wall street stats are fallin fast
—blah, weak opener
kid says hes not a new b check the facts look at his battle rec damn kid
alias banned for bitin unregistered guest he cant name one beaten vet
—aight
kid says hes done with this shit fuck rapverse they’re all wack faggots
this kid cant leave he loves are lines he cant refuse like a coke addict
—nah, wasn’t feelin this line
this kids on my clit and im drippin blood now he got his red wings
red all down his face like his pic of wayne swallowed my tampon string
—aight, this punch was okay here
ill throw this kid a 1000 bux cause he bothere to shpw up and drop
lchange his name cause hes ashamed wouldn’t be the first thing hes bought
—weak
fuck a quick 10 ill go 12 while im waitin for this bitch to drop doesnt no how to check in
45 minutes wasnt long enough for 5 bars watch me have to reset this again
lol just waistin time but hurry up im not reseting it again cause u dont no how to check in
—don’t know if this was actually a 3-lined-bar, but it was okay

overall this battle was okay, both verses had punches that connected,
well, some of them, hardly saw any personas here, but I saw some pretty
decent nameplays and whatnot, but overall Wall Street barely took this
one though, since his punches came a little harder than Will A Peer’s


no hate here, just “typing” the truth