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Thin Line Between Love & Hate Pt 1 ft.Black Queen
*Hellllo..Im not Able 2 Answer My Phone..Leave A Message* *Look Listen* Seems like Last November everything was So Somber But You stayin Out Late Nights Puts my Mind 2 Ponder On Whether Or Not..You Must Think My Love is a Joke? Shit I fell In Deep Passion With u..The Moment u Spoke The Way you use to Embrace My Face..The Way u Taste Seems All Gone Now.Im finding Otha Cell #'s Damnit Dont Lie to Me...Are u Trying 2 Replace my Place? Now your Trying Out 2 Socially Enhance your Own Endevers IM THE 1 Remember who gave u your 1st Orgasmic Pleasures Let me Guess Girl..........Do i not Satisfy your Every Need? Do i not Arrive on time and Cater to your every single Plead But you Know what..If you Want Em ..Shit Go right Ahead IM THE 1 for u Remember.Those Lies Huh?Thats wha u Said DAMNIT BITCH!!....Fuck this....No Please Excuse my French But you are To Me.......Just As Stifflers Mom was to Finch Now i Lay Here Day Dreaming..... Thinking About our Past I FUCKIN HATE YOU BITCH.....but Yet i Still Love your Ass Fuck.........*Hangs Up Phone* *Phone Rings* *Hello*..........*Wha the Fuck do u Want* *Black Queen* Time comes and time goes, where have the time between us gone Its like we not even together because it seems like you always gone And it hurt me so deep inside to have this thought goin through my mind That theres someone else that im not the only one that be on ya mind I dont wanna have this thought but you dont give me any choice it hurt Comin in at 5 in the mourin boy you jus gotta kno i kno you not at work And there always these phone calls that wen i answer they hang up Afta dat your cellphone rings you leave the room you kno dats fucked up And we have these crazy arguements its like you jus pushin me away Its funny cus it gets like dat rite afta i ask you wat bitch u fuck today And of course you're gonna deny my allegations of you cheating And i really dont want to feel like me and dis otha girl competing But im tryin to delete these thoughts because i just love you so much And wen we and we are makin love it feel so right wen we touch Me breathing in ya ear while you on top of me how i love it so much But we are starting to fall apart o how much i miss ya soft touch Afta all of this doe i try but i jus cant see myself at all leaving you You my knight and the only person i eva love that much is so true But i guess i gotta live with this thought because ill neva kno the truth There's no use in worryin about it because i jus cant see myself without you *So What Do we Do Now?* |
Drop a link homie or this will be closed
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Man this was deep as hell I loved every line in this entire OM both yall did your thing this is a great drop probably the best I've seen in a while I really liked the imagination on how your girl was cheatin on you and your girl thinkin you was cheatin on her its a crazy story this a 9.5/10 rtf "Grand Finale"
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*title reminds me on an iron maiden song :love:*
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Thanx 4 the Love...and lol @ Iron Maiden
if ya feelin it so much...wont hurt 2 Nominate it |
tight as hell....i loved this shit...nice imagery and vocab.......keep doing ur thing ppl....9/10....
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nice OM .. liked troops verse little better thans BQ her baars seemed to be stretched didnt flow as nicely .. but both was deep and i liked the overall topic of the peice
troops verse- 8.5/10 Black queen's - 7/10 overall like a 7.5 - 8 / 10 hot shit.. return tha favor on this OM id appreciate it http://community.rapverse.com/showt...2323&styleid=14 |
Preciate the Love ya....got damn ^^Yo Avy Scares Me
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thx errybody fo da feed
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Dayum...this was a nice piece...Good topic and concept...It was pretty deep...Also it had good vocab...And had good imagery...But overall-8.5/10...Both you collab very well too...Keep up the good work...
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thx fo da feed wicked
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my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202384) drop a rhyme or critique
Obscene nerds are like European birds they don’t fly high or touch the sky like Red man and Meth did, hell I wing strong with bling on, deprived of fame still alive with name go through jive so lame shot at by glocks and gats got holes in my hat and like FIFTY CENTS Got shot nine times while at the candy shop licking a lollipop damn! Now that pissed me off |
^^^stop postin ya whack rhymes in here
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black queen your verse is weak firsr off it don't rhyme enough plus what are you doing rhyming the same words show lack of skill
2. you have to learn to write in first person dang girl you let no attitude out in this rhyme at all in rap i'll have to rate your verse 2/10 impossible to rap this with any succession |
Go rate her Elsewhere.....Fuck outta here if u aint droppin about the Piece
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lmao thx fo da feed............ :spit: |
yeh my pleasure queen and that conceded partner of yours need to grow the fuck up homey
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^^^naw u need to grow up cus dat verse was in 1st person u didnt read it
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Im jus stickin up 4 Blk.....call it wha it iz
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words came right outta my mouth :thumbup: |
Macreep thanks for being truthful but yeah queen if you call me whack then people will expect you to be unfuckwitable and you're not straight up girl
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damn u still drollin on mah ass get off of it n let it breath n stop postin where i postin u stalkin me kid :laugh: get a life :nono: |
Why are ya Still talkin shit
Yet not Mention a Battle.... If no Battle is Mentioned....Fuck out the thread And Creep leave her alone...b4 i Petition Strobe that your Harrasing Queen...jus like u told on 9th |
fuck you troop you haven't peeped mine you two face bitch now i'm coming with a diss whack conceded below average fuck
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Your 0-2
Didnt kno u could spell ....conceded .........Like that Get ya vocab righ 1st Lil Shit *Nuff Said* |
fuck the record its as fake as your conceded ass coming at you in a jiff
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Are u from England?
I dont understand your Proper Jib Jabb i hope u get Banned from Om... Keep talkin... Cheerio... |
nice om this was a tight on man
a yo dont even worry about macreep man i think he just hating on black queen but i liked the om nice collabo and good topic |
first off this was a very creative drop.....i liked the emotion you both used and the way one verse flowed into the other.....also the way your different styles complemented each other....i enjoyed reading it...keep doing it ya'll :thumbup:
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thank u 4 the supporters
much luv 4 ya..... |
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Dam J Trooper You Had Sone Nice Shit Here Man, Vocabulary Was Just There, You Had Some Good Emotion Here Imagery Was Also Tight Flow Was Nice Man Structure Was Decent Dawg Keep This Up Man Wee Need To Collab Again You Know Last One Made It To HOF HaHa! Black Queen Pretty Good Shit Here, Lines Kind Of Stretched Though Which Kind Of Messed Up The Flow Just A Little Bit, Vocabulary Was Good Though Structure Was Meh Nice Decent Here..Emotion Nice Going Girl, Over All Good Piece Both Of You On The Real Holla Back |
Look for Pt 2....Coming Soon.....
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word, i'll leave feed now:
troop; nice flow man, i enjoyed the easyness of the read, and i thought you came really strong emotionally here, and took a hold of the piece and brought it out more, well done. but i feel there were some parts i didn't like, like using the word 'orgasmic' in a serious, emotional pice.....it doesn't really fit, and the stiffler's mom line was kinda outta place too, but overall, good drop man, keep up. black queen; very strong emotionally, liked it, vocab could be elevated, but thats minor, you know how to write, and you should keep up, because you do a good job. just work on imagery a little more, but since this was centered around love and hate, its obvioulsy an emotion piece, so thats minor as well, but keep up. well done to both, and make sure you check out my new OM coming soon :) |
4sho man
thanks 4 takein time 2 read |
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da shit is hott each time i read it
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