opt1k vs Rile1
 

Battle Rules:

16 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

jsut a friendly battle so good luck man

Minimum posts to vote: 50

Check in by: 08-02-05 at 10:20 AM

Must drop verse in 150 minutes after check in.

Rile1 has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-05 09:21 AM.

aight homie u post first!!!!!!bring hardcore homie!!!!!!!!

opt1k has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-05 09:28 AM.

lol ok then man im typing it now

you cant write a bar, you keep secrets and hate, you take way to far
you have a monkey on your back...thats more famous then you are
so im in my car, its a wonderful day for eating, and man you know
that theres a earthquake...............nah its Opt's fatass playin sumo
you rap in slomo, I am the devil, and my verses, dawg u can fear it
think we rewind ur records for cults?..no,we just dont wanna hear it
hand me a beer shit, im gonna relax cuz dude u only have fans in Paris
I posted first so now the truth,ur verses suck..so stop being embarrased
so where is opt1k? maybe on the terrace trying to get a look at hooters
and thug? man u only cut me with razors when we're riding the scooters
roto rooters, eww man ur poor as fuck and iono who can be rung dumber
funny to me u only make ppl crack up when ur fixin pipes ya dumb plumber
put ya to slumber, man ur ugly as hell and sweaty, heres some towels
so beaty and the beast.....is when im fucking his girl while he growls
collin powels, clones attack and u die, I write books and kill bunnies
and when I did a show for ur crew,a book came out called rapping for dummies

if u dont get my verse please dont vote..thanks

the clock tickin slowly life goin real fast
this nigga takes so long,his lyrics be considered the past
have him traumatized real dimented and strange
wantin a battle homie this fool dont got game
killiin this full slowly take the pain
matter of fact i'll burst his cell and his vien
crack his cranium droppin lyrics hard as a crane
hittin him wit swords he could even die by a switch blade
talkin lot of shit sayin he bored wants a battle
he dumb enough to accept he gon get dismantled
cock back and blast this fool blow his brains
have him mentally retarded have him goin insane
he rappin on the cyphers thinkin he gots dope lyrics
he thinkin in his head yea ya'll gon feel it!!!!
whatever mayne u weak ass hell
have ur mom tuck u back in bed my bad ur cell

hahaha........something real quick hahaha...........nuthin special

nice drop homie u won............damn hoime i said friendly battle but u drop some hard shit homie!!!!!!1hahaha............nice use it as ur tryout homie i think its good enough!!!!!!!!

awesome man..urs was pretty good too..oh and yeah I go all out all the time sorry lol


but if ppl dont get my verse or jsut certain punches pm me with questions please

aight homie REMatch this time ill go all out topical choose the topic

lol man ill lose but ill PM u with one

hahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!come on man!!!!!!!!!!lets go topical head!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!aight

Voted For: Rile1

look man optik you came to soft,compared to wat i've seen
Rile took dis one
the breakdown:
struvture=optik
creativity=rile
punches=rile
personals=none
metas=i saw none
flow=definity Rile
overall rile favorite line:
"proto rooters, eww man ur poor as fuck and iono who can be rung dumber
funny to me u only make ppl crack up when ur fixin pipes ya dumb plumberunch"

This was feedback posted for opt1k
 

checkin polls!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!1

hahaah yea this was wsoft compared to all my other shit........i just thought friendly battle so take it quick!!!!!!!!!!but rile1 take it personal so yea we have a rematch on topical now so see ya then!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!hahaha rile 1 won this all man!!!!!!!!!hahahaha

^^ lol I know haha...well we cant even get damn voters

Voted For: Rile1

Rile1:

you cant write a bar, you keep secrets and hate, you take way to far
you have a monkey on your back...thats more famous then you are
^^decent opener 4/10
so im in my car, its a wonderful day for eating, and man you know
that theres a earthquake...............nah its Opt's fatass playin sumo
^^ok 4/10
you rap in slomo, I am the devil, and my verses, dawg u can fear it
think we rewind ur records for cults?..no,we just dont wanna hear it
^^ehh 3/10
hand me a beer shit, im gonna relax cuz dude u only have fans in Paris
I posted first so now the truth,ur verses suck..so stop being embarrased
^^ok set up wack punch 3/10
so where is opt1k? maybe on the terrace trying to get a look at hooters
and thug? man u only cut me with razors when we're riding the scooters
^^good meta 6/10
roto rooters, eww man ur poor as fuck and iono who can be rung dumber
funny to me u only make ppl crack up when ur fixin pipes ya dumb plumber
^^ok 4/10
put ya to slumber, man ur ugly as hell and sweaty, heres some towels
so beaty and the beast.....is when im fucking his girl while he growls
^^ehh 4/10
collin powels, clones attack and u die, I write books and kill bunnies
and when I did a show for ur crew,a book came out called rapping for dummies
^^decent closer 5/10

Overall: 33/80 (41%)


Opt1k:

the clock tickin slowly life goin real fast
this nigga takes so long,his lyrics be considered the past
^^decent opener 5/10
have him traumatized real dimented and strange
wantin a battle homie this fool dont got game
^^no 2/10
killiin this full slowly take the pain
matter of fact i'll burst his cell and his vien
^^no 2/10
crack his cranium droppin lyrics hard as a crane
hittin him wit swords he could even die by a switch blade
^^ehh 3/10
talkin lot of shit sayin he bored wants a battle
he dumb enough to accept he gon get dismantled
^^ehh 3/10
cock back and blast this fool blow his brains
have him mentally retarded have him goin insane
^^ok flow thats it 4/10
he rappin on the cyphers thinkin he gots dope lyrics
he thinkin in his head yea ya'll gon feel it!!!!
^^no 1/10
whatever mayne u weak ass hell
have ur mom tuck u back in bed my bad ur cell
^^no 2/10

Overall: 22/80 (28%)


Vote: Rile1


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Voted For: Rile1


Rile1

you cant write a bar, you keep secrets and hate, you take way to far
you have a monkey on your back...thats more famous then you are
so im in my car, its a wonderful day for eating, and man you know
that theres a earthquake...............nah its Opt's fatass playin sumo
you rap in slomo, I am the devil, and my verses, dawg u can fear it
think we rewind ur records for cults?..no,we just dont wanna hear it

^lmao @ the monkey bar rofl...made me laugh...and the earthquake one was funny too man, coo first part of the verse here, kept nice consistent with the punches and all

hand me a beer shit, im gonna relax cuz dude u only have fans in Paris
I posted first so now the truth,ur verses suck..so stop being embarrased
so where is opt1k? maybe on the terrace trying to get a look at hooters
and thug? man u only cut me with razors when we're riding the scooters
roto rooters, eww man ur poor as fuck and iono who can be rung dumber
funny to me u only make ppl crack up when ur fixin pipes ya dumb plumber

^plumber line and the razor one to me were the best ones in this part, I don't get the Paris line but I'm just dumb I guess hehe, punches kept going strong, vocab on point as well as flow

put ya to slumber, man ur ugly as hell and sweaty, heres some towels
so beaty and the beast.....is when im fucking his girl while he growls
collin powels, clones attack and u die, I write books and kill bunnies
and when I did a show for ur crew,a book came out called rapping for dummies

^I used the rapping for dummies line once too, closer was good too but didn't jump out really, overall solid battle ya kno


shodown

the clock tickin slowly life goin real fast
this nigga takes so long,his lyrics be considered the past
have him traumatized real dimented and strange
wantin a battle homie this fool dont got game
killiin this full slowly take the pain
matter of fact i'll burst his cell and his vien

^i'm diggin first two bars, not real consistent punches though but overall decent first part of ya verse, vocab is on point, flow is good too

crack his cranium droppin lyrics hard as a crane
hittin him wit swords he could even die by a switch blade
talkin lot of shit sayin he bored wants a battle
he dumb enough to accept he gon get dismantled
cock back and blast this fool blow his brains
have him mentally retarded have him goin insane

^a lot of gun and blasting out brain talk, i aint really diggin all that ya kno, gotta get your opponent down by dissin em harder bro

he rappin on the cyphers thinkin he gots dope lyrics
he thinkin in his head yea ya'll gon feel it!!!!
whatever mayne u weak ass hell
have ur mom tuck u back in bed my bad ur cell

^closer is best part, better punch, bit personal, vocab not that good tho but flow is aight

umm mmm lol... upping this..please vote people.....

This was feedback posted for opt1k
 

checkin the polls..................................

lol that sucks....I want some votes!!! gosh everyone sleeps on shit 'cept for me

Voted For: Rile1

FLOW-Rile1 easily..shodown's rhyme sheme was a mess.Don't even think he has one neither.

PUNCHES-This was clearly in Rile1's favor...Shodown...the problem with you is that you talking too much about beating him up.I saw that more than 60% of your verse consisted of that too.It's ok to use that and self glorifing as a set-up or filler....but not as a punch itself.

MULTIS-Rile 1 again.SHodown....stop using one sllyable rhymin.That shit went out in the 80's.THat's the reason we hate 50 cent too.USe multis.

COMPLEXITY-RIle1...showdown was just stating stuff.Though some more metas and wordplay would be nice from both.

PERSONALS-Neither...i think ya'll both need to elevate here.

Vote-Rile1

Voted For: Rile1

I LIKED rile one better, be cuz of the better punches kinda funnier....better flow and structure.....shodown no doubt u have talent just thought rile 1 took it.......v/rile 1

ayyo please return the favor its in my sig