flow verse vs Defined
 

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No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

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Check in by: 08-02-05 at 11:13 PM

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Defined has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-05 10:44 PM.

recross to the mosh im untouchable like randy 'moss'
........rewind this verse so ull eazily get to ur 100th 'loss'
be ready to forfiet ur prize undisputed rhymes disguise my 'size'
........realize ur 'deadwieght' like a turtle turtle in 'Master of Disguise'*
prepare for this to be ur final battle beware 'flow verse'
........u couldnt spit 'Loud' and 'Clear' if u were a 'Crow Sperse'**
distorted to rubble destroy u like a 'Finger' to a 'Bubble'
........commense to a pray cuz uve been retorted to a 'Struggle'

*master of disguise is a movie where this guy gets disuised as a turtle and yells 'Turtle Turtle'
**loud and clear crows r very loud and annoying

flow verse has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-05 11:07 PM.

Like a football linebacker no matter how much he works out he can’t be defined
So don’t worry about elevation this win is already mine

He thinks he’s funny? . . . yea like jokers in a deck of cards . . .just throw them out
He can’t spit unless you mean the cum dripping out his mouth

Bitch has to “recycle” his lines. . . cause the ‘trash pickers” don’t want his “garbage”
Lacks creativity cause he gives his head but receives no knowledge

To him “Pun” was just a rapper . . . which explains why he doesn’t get “wordplay”
Bitch couldn’t drop decent “bar” if he spit from “Pelican Bay”





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Voted For: Defined

v/Defined

He had better punches and creativety and had a punch in nearly all lines making it more interesting to read. Defined had his punches hit harder than flow verse.

Flow verse, good punches but not as good as Defined, they didn't hit as hard. But flow verse did have some good lines

'Bitch has to “recycle” his lines. . . cause the ‘trash pickers” don’t want his “garbage”
Lacks creativity cause he gives his head but receives no knowledge'

That was good, as it had good wordplay and hit pretty hard.

But Defined gets my vote.

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Voted For: Defined

this cat has my vote, his flow was able to understand, and punch's was aiight, flow verse had some good punch's but his didnt flow like his name states he "flows"

Voted For: flow verse

iight good battle both of u but flow verse took it real eazy

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Voted For: Defined

recross to the mosh im untouchable like randy 'moss'
........rewind this verse so ull eazily get to ur 100th 'loss'
^^^NO punch
be ready to forfiet ur prize undisputed rhymes disguise my 'size'
........realize ur 'deadwieght' like a turtle turtle in 'Master of Disguise'*
^^wat does turle turtle have to do with deadwieght?
prepare for this to be ur final battle beware 'flow verse'
........u couldnt spit 'Loud' and 'Clear' if u were a 'Crow Sperse'**
^^simplitic
distorted to rubble destroy u like a 'Finger' to a 'Bubble'
........commense to a pray cuz uve been retorted to a 'Struggle'
^^too simplistic

You verse had structure.FLow was OK.But punches sucked.Some made no sense.Like that turtle turle line...wat does that have to do with deadwieght?Seems like you just put it there for the hell of it.And you were far to simplistic.

Like a football linebacker no matter how much he works out he can’t be defined
So don’t worry about elevation this win is already mine
^^No punch...set-up was good...but it set-up nothing
He thinks he’s funny? . . . yea like jokers in a deck of cards . . .just throw them out
He can’t spit unless you mean the cum dripping out his mouth
^^^PLAyed to death......
Bitch has to “recycle” his lines. . . cause the ‘trash pickers” don’t want his “garbage”
Lacks creativity cause he gives his head but receives no knowledge
^^simple
To him “Pun” was just a rapper . . . which explains why he doesn’t get “wordplay”
Bitch couldn’t drop decent “bar” if he spit from “Pelican Bay”
^^PLAYed....

Better flow and structure.But punches lacked even more.Every one of your lines were either played or str8 whack.It's all about wordplay and metas.you can't just state bullshit.

ANd both of you...where are the personals and multis?

Vote-Defined(rtf)

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203166

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Voted For: flow verse

the wordplay was simple but very hard hitting .......... i enjoyed your verses thought they were really funny....... structure needs work tho .................like the personal in the opener ...........Defined had a good drop too ................ but my vote goes to flow..... nice drop man ......good luck to both..keep writing

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Voted For: flow verse

Structure-Defined ur structure was far better than flow verse had a better flow.Flow verse try and get all ur lines to match up at the end....makes it look neater!>

Vocab-Niether had any vocab to be reconized for i suggest you both up on vocab, as ur verse goes on u have to enhance ur vocab iight?....up on that yo

Personals-Flow verse had better personals by far....had good fresh personals that were hott.Defined, ur verse lacked good personals thta caught my eye....didnt feel them at all up on that and try to get ur personals noticed iight?

Punches-Flow verse had fresh hott punches that hit hard my friend.

"He thinks he’s funny? . . . yea like jokers in a deck of cards . . .just throw them out
He can’t spit unless you mean the cum dripping out his mouth"=best line funny as hell!
Defined didnt really see any hott disses, make sure u diss ur opponent, no hate though...

Originality-Flow verse had better fresh lines that were appealing and iight to read, although defined had better flow it didnt seem as fresh and hard hitting.

Multis-Defined had fresh hott multis on his verse, made it flow better fa sho!...Flow verse up on multis it will make ur verse more enjoyable to read iight!

V/FLow verse

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