Microsoft Rap
 

http://www.soundclick.com/artist/8/...htaim_music.htm

when you hear the beat you'll know why its called what its called..lol...i've improved in a lil bit of everything since my last drop so listen and leave feed
oh and by the way this my first thang i did on Cool Edit Pro

here's my links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203068
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202519

no offense but this is trash man.....no emotion, really no flow at all....is this a joke?, i mean your delivery is horrible, you didnt ride the beat at all....and its gay dental floss, wow

sorry Newbie Method...but this shit probably wont really be that good ta gays knowin that im straight....u suck fuckin dick...fuckin trash...commercial mainstream ass bitch...mike jones probably ur fuckin idol...this aint a joke..u r........oh and sorry i dont ride shit like u

uppin for some real feedback...ya'll know i atleast elevated a lil from my last shit never said i was perfect like this muthafucka's expectation

damn kid, new meth been speaking truth, he aint a hater so he not posting just to piss you off.

he letting you know truth strickly for elevation purpose's. If he licked your ass and said"this is good your good blah blah blha" you would think your doing somthign right.

when on the REAL, this track sucks. everything NM said is true bro. take it as constructive critism.

constructive critism????? "this is gay dental floss"??? "this is trash" that aint fuckin constructive critism thats straight hatin...if it was some real fuckin constructive critism he would say what the fuck i should do and tell me more better not just sayin its fuckin trash i dont expect him ta say it good if it wasnt but he coulda just said "it wasnt that good elevate in ur flow make it end at the snare" or some shit like that..that would be constructive and then i wouldnt be bitchin bout the feedback..jesus christ u people have ta be stupid

I see you had fun with the effects lol

Let me break it down.

Mic presense/delivery: Aight I'ma help you with this.
You seem to keep a mono tone voice through the whole thing.
That bores people.Like have an emotion in every line.
Like throw some powerful pain in your voice.No matter what you're saying.
Your emotion effects the mood of the song.You can say the same shit in a different
way and it'll turn out completly different. But since you had a mono tone voice
it was in the gray.The more emotion the more it effects people.You NEED to effect.

Flow:Keep a steady pace.I need to be able to nod your head to every setup
and punchline.And you went off and on.ON some spots you had it and then it
and then it went right back off again.Just when u get the beat make up a flow right
there and then fill in the blanks.Like this "dadada bop dadadada bop".Like a draft.
Then fill in the blanks with words.Its a tough process but you are improving.

Chorus:Oh make a better chorus lol Microsoft rap meant internet rap right?
Basically when you make a chorus always split it into 3 or 2 things.
Have a chant for the people to remember easily and have something to sum up
the song with.

its real simple once you get deep into it.

You're getting better obviously so keep trying and ignore the big weanies like
new method :nono: Take this crit and save it maybe and use it anytime you're lacking
in a specific area.


buhbye :love:

I love you indeph

man straight aim shut the fuck up seriously, ur gettin me frustrated, they only leavin fuckin feedback and ur bitching them back, bitch me back i dont care cuz it was wack seriously, not bcuz i said that ur elevating that its good god fucking dammit

everybody does ysdat...everybody does...and speats you aren't helping you little....person you :mad:

im the one helpin him elevating on msn

Speatz....why the fuck u gettin involved if muthafuckas would leave REAL feed like Indeph did then i wouldnt be bitchin cuz indeph said what needed ta be said and not that it was just trash...u want me ta fuckin enter one of ur song threads and say it was nuthin but fuckin trash and not leave any CONSTRUCTIVE feed...oh and by the way didnt leave any fuckin feed

and i love you too indeph dont worry for that

I'm the one elivating him on AIM.Beat that :evil:
strait aim my homie G dog for the streetball.

thats how i elevated:thumbup:

speatz u know damn will u dont wanna beef are u too blind ta see that aint real feedback...how the fuck would u respond wit that type of feed

i dont respond and wait for real feed...if ud never said something about new method's feed and waited for indeph's feed everything would of been okay

oh am i supposed ta bend down and kiss his ass cuz of the fucked up feedback he left if he woulda said he didnt like it i wouldnt fuckin mind i woulda just thanked him for the feed...but je didnt have ta fuckin put it that way

ah do the fuck what you want, keep bitching at people leaving feed

u see i didnt bitch at indeph i dont care if im down wit him or not i woulda never bitched bout it...if it real feed i wont bitch bout it...u know damn will that other shit wasnt real feed

LMAO

WTF is up wit all this wack shit on RV lately

kid sounds like he spittin through a straw

But...for the "real" feedback


ur flow is bad...u didn't ride the beat at all...its like dancing...there are DANCERS and then there are people who have RHYTHM...u don't have RHYTHM

ur delivery is bad because it sounds like ur stumbling and stammering over ur own tongue


the quality is horrible cuz it sounds like ur rapping through a cell phone...

If u bought a CD and it sounded like this, wud u honestly think NOTHING was wrong wit it?

c'mon...really

no one is an expert here...but listen to people man...why wud someone hate on u

u think this shit is sooooooooooooooo good that we ALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLllll are jealous and are HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATIn on u?


get fuckin for real


and get a life while ur at it


stupid ass


Take the criticism and try again

and again

and again

and again

until u get it right

PERIOD.

ayo i dont think my shit perfect but it like startin off wit text u start wack as fuck and u elevate....im just droppin this shit so i elevate..but i cant elevate wit people just sayin this trash and it aint shit....maybe true but u have ta leave tips so i can elvevate fo real i wouldnt be even half the asshole i am if people would leave some real feed....Bro Yao i can understand..lol....and i aint rich so i cant afford anythang else right now until i can get the money..lol i didnt ask ta think of this as perfect quality..i'll get that through time but for a lil ya'll gon have ta deal wit it...and i know i dont have rhymn but it takes time ta elevate like i said im sure u didnt start out the way ur rappin now...this is no diffrent really u have ta admit this was better than the last shit I put out but yo except for the comments i appreciate that u took time ta really type feed not JUST that it was trash..that i dont have a prob wit

lol hey speats, are u in a film titled duex phun du camping?

^lmaooooooooooooooooo

yo no freepostin

lmao @ indeph stealing my dope feedback method

u found that on my myspace lol haha

holy shit.....this fuckin wack as hell....shit ur about as wack as it gets at starting.....u gotta wack voice..ya voice and change ups are gay..damn man you need too practice a lil before you spit..ur lyrics are gay too "Dental Floss" wtf...thats gay as fuck...step up ur game man

i jotted down wack shit so what...it was on ur fuckin level anyways Gayboy oh i mean Jroy....shut the fuck up and let this go down...and i aint as wacka s it can get..have u ever bro yao...i dont fuckin think so...shut the fuck up....you know i elevated lotz since this i hope ta fuckin god u know becuase that shit wasnt close to my best lyrics..im just savin my good shit for when i elevate..so shut up...i aint even gon beef over thsi shit ur lucky we in the same fam....and i aint gon say no more ta get me kicked out so..just keep ur mouth shut and i'll leave mine shut

yo ... straight up .. you can call me a hater I really dont give a fuck.... you suck dawg. The beat wasnt that great... your flow is horrible, you sound like your freestylin shit that your reading... if that makes sence? You gotta practice playa... if you want some pointers get at me... If not ... then .... act like everyones hatin on you ....

yeah i said i was saving my "GOOD LYRICS" when i was wack too

LMAO at your sig.....^^^

yo ST you know that "preview" track on ur soundclick, wot beat did you use for that??? that is a mad nice beat

i used "hell on earth" by mobb deep

Straight aim u need some discipline and control seeing that u get so wound up about this shit. That was pretty bad man, u need to check out one man band's tut and read it over n voer carefully

you would to if u werent where u wanna be

hey straight, i peeped ur mos def song and your gettin better man, ur flow is gettin better...now u need to show emotions cuz ur gettin better