Natural killa vs kamze
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

3-0 KO

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-05-05 at 03:40 PM

Must drop verse in 360 minutes after check in.

Kamze has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-05-05 03:14 PM.

Natural killa has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-05-05 03:22 PM.

he got GAME in his avatar,and GAme in his signature,what the fuck?
does helook like a ferris wheel to u?,ridin up and down on his schumck
im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
wanna call-out newbies only to show off,like a bold ladies strut
your rhymes all fade out of our minds like an old 80's haircut
Kamze?,wtf is that shit?to you,the alphabet and ya name's the same
cause you urself don't know wat it's sopposed to be sayin

Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,
All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
You have no experience or skill, so there's no way you'll get a win over me,
Cuz you're like a 'man in a wheelchair',cuz,..........you're both at a 'disability',
My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'.

Ay yo, we uppin for votes.C'mon vote and we'll RTF!!!!!!!

We uppin for votes. c'mon we'll RTF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This was feedback posted for Kamze
 

Feelin lazy and tired since I been writing verses all day...but..

All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
^^This line will mess you up.

FIrst...he just got here...so how he got a few wins?And it didn't rhyme.

Ur verse didn't have any personals BTW...so it was probably pre-written

As for the other guy...I ain't read it...

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c'mon.....stop sleeping on this...................

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Voted For: Natural killa

uhh this battle was kinda weak...But it was alrite...here is what i think

KAMZE
Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,
...didnt like the openin...wasnt strong
(2/10)
All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
I felt that one...it was pretty good but didnt even rhyme tho...
(4/10)
You have no experience or skill, so there's no way you'll get a win over me,
Cuz you're like a 'man in a wheelchair',cuz,..........you're both at a 'disability'
aiiite....likd it sort of(5/10)
My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'.
ok....(3/10)
14/40 = 35%


Natural Killa



he got GAME in his avatar,and GAme in his signature,what the fuck?
does helook like a ferris wheel to u?,ridin up and down on his schumck
wasnt feelin it.......(3/10)

im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
i liked this one lol.....(6/10)
wanna call-out newbies only to show off,like a bold ladies strut
your rhymes all fade out of our minds like an old 80's haircut
aiiite.....kinda outplayed a lil (4/10)
Kamze?,wtf is that shit?to you,the alphabet and ya name's the same
cause you urself don't know wat it's sopposed to be sayin
ummm....what the hell?? (2/10)

15/40 = 38%

My vote goes to Natural Killa....Close battle but a weak 1

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This was feedback posted for Kamze
 

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Voted For: Natural killa

Natural Killa got this...
Why?,you ask.

Well here's tha Breakdown "KIDS!"

Killa's verse:

line(1)-he got GAME in his avatar,and GAme in his signature,what the fuck?
does helook like a ferris wheel to u?,ridin up and down on his schumck
^^^^^^There was no multi's,no good flow of words,and the punch was lackin....but it was a punch.Personal was a personal..at least you had one. 2/10

line(2)-im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
^^^^^Nice punch...I like that one,tha first line was okay at best,but tha last line with tha punch was nice.7/10

line(3)-wanna call-out newbies only to show off,like a bold ladies strut
your rhymes all fade out of our minds like an old 80's haircut
^^^^okay punch...not nothing really new,but it was nice wordplay lil multi's in it...like I said tha punch was aiight.5/10

lines(4)-Kamze?,wtf is that shit?to you,the alphabet and ya name's the same
cause you urself don't know wat it's sopposed to be sayin
^^^^Weak and was hard ta spit it..maybe tha way I would've flow'd it and tha way you would spit it might make a lil diff.Still weak for a closer.But it was a punch(Eh..tap.)2/10

In all tha structure was off,and tha 1st and 4th line was weak.At least you came wit punch's,and a few multi's,a lil wordplay,and that 2nd line.It made tha whole 2 weak lines fade away.

6.5/10-


Now ladies an Gentle-men..Here's tha breakDown 4 Kamze!
Hold on ta ur Seat Folks,Cuz this ones a Scorcher.




Kamze-

line(1)-Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,
^^^That was no punch,Real weak...an almost personal,and had no wordplay or multi's...1/10

line(2)-All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
^^^Weak..didnt rhyme at all..real throwback ass punch..0/10

line(3)-You have no experience or skill, so there's no way you'll get a win over me,
Cuz you're like a 'man in a wheelchair',cuz,..........you're both at a 'disability',
^^^^A PUNCH!!!:smile:..finally!..but,it was another throwback line..heard it before an done better...3/10

line(4)-My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'.
^^^^yet again,self glory is not the intention's of a battle..Damn,You at least rhymed this one,no multi's, good structure.Weak line tho'...2/10

2/10 overall for Kamze's verse...You need ta elevate sum more,cuz there was no punch but 1,an that 1 was weak and played out!

my vote goes for KILLA....

Tha battle was weak 2 me....but Killa got it.

please return favor an vote on my battles in my sig!:thumbsup:

^^^Lmao...thx for voting...and i'll return the favor.............bump

Voted For: Kamze

Nothing

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Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,



n.k. work on ur punches & ur wordin to it.. cuz ur whole verse was
garbage.. add some personas in there.. work on ur flow.. and other
shit to make ur verse better.. so overall.. elevate more

kamze.. ur punches were all that great either.. the flow needs work
..the structure was stretched, shorten it a little bit.. and add some
personas in ur rhymes to make the battle more funnier & whatnot
but overall u took this one, cuz n.k. came weaker than u in this

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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Voted For: Kamze

Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,
—decent opener, could’ve been a little harder & ya could’ve switched it up
All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
—meh, this line is sorta played here, but it connected
You have no experience or skill, so there's no way you'll get a win over me,
Cuz you're like a 'man in a wheelchair',cuz,..........you're both at a 'disability',
—nah, not feeling this punch
My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'.
—weak closer


he got GAME in his avatar,and GAme in his signature,what the fuck?
does helook like a ferris wheel to u?,ridin up and down on his schumck
—wack opener, schumck as the last word? ..no son
im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
—weak punch, could’ve made this harder than that
wanna call-out newbies only to show off,like a bold ladies strut
your rhymes all fade out of our minds like an old 80's haircut
—almost, but it wasn’t decent either
Kamze?,wtf is that shit?to you,the alphabet and ya name's the same
cause you urself don't know wat it's sopposed to be sayin
—sayin & same.. meh they hardly rhyme here

overall this battle was weak.. both structures need work.. the flow
practically needs some help on that, didn’t see any personas up in
both ur verses, but overall Kamze took this one.. punches came
harder.. even though you both have the same rating.. Kamze took
this battle w/ punches that weren’t as wack

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uppin 4 votes.....................................

Voted For: Natural killa

look heres da breakdown:
flow:killa
creativty:killa
punches:killa
personals:none(none worth mentioning)
meta:>>>>>>>>>>>>^^^^^^^^^^
overall:killa

Ay yo, why did sik wit it's vote get dq'd and blackfrostbite's didn't. This is a joke the voting.

^^^Well go get it removed.......uppin 4 votes..............

This was feedback posted for Natural killa
 

man i like the line about a fade haircut plus i see that you know what you're gonna talk about but you had a weak openin' but you did good keep it up

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Voted For: Natural killa

natural killa took this battle. kamze's verse was all broken up n shit. he didnt have alot of punches that did anything really.
also "people" and "animals" dont rhyme so you aint get points for that bar really. Also kamze's opener and closer were kinda weak.
Natural Killa's verse was decent some ok metas in there and alot better flow in the verse. He took the opener and closer cuz his punches were a lil bit better.

Kamze's best bar=
My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'
(ehh this was not too hot especially for ya closer, work on that)

Natural killas best bar=im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
(this was ok, pretty decent bar. it was my favorite of the battle)
my vote goes to Natural Killa

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This was feedback posted for Natural killa
 

Checkin Pollz.........................................

Voted For: Kamze

he got GAME in his avatar,and GAme in his signature,what the fuck?
does helook like a ferris wheel to u?,ridin up and down on his schumck
^^wackk...i didnt know a dick was called a schumck...sounded like u was jus tryin to rhyme anythin wit fuck

im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
^^wack...nuttin hard about that at all...real weak !

wanna call-out newbies only to show off,like a bold ladies strut
your rhymes all fade out of our minds like an old 80's haircut
^^blahh...better then the 1st 2 but nuttin hard about these punches at all !...pretty random 2...personals are alwayz more effective then random punches !...especially if they aint hard

Kamze?,wtf is that shit?to you,the alphabet and ya name's the same
cause you urself don't know wat it's sopposed to be sayin
^^horrible closer...flow was bad...punch was worse !!!

^^alot of random punches that didnt hit hard AT ALL...pretty simple verse...work on makin personals and metaphors that hit hard !!!!



Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,
^^wackkkk...not hard hittin at all

All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
^^o my lord...cornyyyyyyy...didnt even rhyme (not sayin a good bar has 2 rhyme but if its as corny as that...at least make it rhyme...wow !

You have no experience or skill, so there's no way you'll get a win over me,
Cuz you're like a 'man in a wheelchair',cuz,..........you're both at a 'disability',
^^blahh...that was an ALRIGHT punch...probly the hardest hittin punch in the battle and it was still pretty weak !...simple metaphor but at least it was a metaphor !

My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'.
^^flow is awful...ur barz have no structure...work on that...and the punch was bad but it was a better closer then natural killa's

weak battle...no complexity or hard hittin punches...i gotta vote for Kamze tho...i was jus feelin his verse more simple as that !...some1 else probly sees it different then me but thas how I see it... no hate on either of u but work on ur lyrics...


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Voted For: Natural killa

vote Natural killa

Your rhymes and your punches,are a joke, they're as 'Killa' as your name,
If you start gettin upset, then guess what, you only got yourself to blame,
no punch or nuthin
All of a sudden, you think you a 'vet',cuz u think you gonna got a few wins over people,
But the only chance you stand of being a 'vet', is if you started 'treatin animals',
ok punch, shit didnt really rhyme tho
You have no experience or skill, so there's no way you'll get a win over me,
Cuz you're like a 'man in a wheelchair',cuz,..........you're both at a 'disability',
i didnt really get it and it was kind of played
My rhymes hit you right in the spot, cuz you can't reach my level, you just not able,
& don't let my lyrics decide your 'fate', cuz the verdict could be.........'fatal'.
bad closer, not really any punch

work on your punches and ur shit wuz kind of stretched

he got GAME in his avatar,and GAme in his signature,what the fuck?
does helook like a ferris wheel to u?,ridin up and down on his schumck
lol, aight
im the grease on the ladder,meaning you gonna stay on the bottom
Kamze's punches all missed(mist) like windsheilds in autumn
ok
wanna call-out newbies only to show off,like a bold ladies strut
your rhymes all fade out of our minds like an old 80's haircut
not bad
Kamze?,wtf is that shit?to you,the alphabet and ya name's the same
cause you urself don't know wat it's sopposed to be sayin
not the best closer, i didnt realy get it

some of your shit was kinda stretched, work no that