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.Merkage. vs The Revelation
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6 Lines... No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-05-05 at 11:16 PM Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in. |
The Revelation has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-05-05 10:48 PM.
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.Merkage. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-05-05 10:52 PM.
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I didn't know they gave out trophies for worst player in the game, You must get a lotta time, cuz the only thing more played is your wordplay. Call the man white chocolate cuz he's confused within himself, Only time he 'dropped a gat', was when his toy fell off of the shelf. Today is a bad day, cuz your punches are gonna blow me away? HA! Only way you could touch me is if I just had nothing to s.... |
I would son u.....but tha only way you "chip off tha block" is if u were "discarded Lays"
But i did him a favor ........and "pissed" on his old calender so he could "remember tha Golden Dayz" Damn All The Da same Im not used to calling peeps lames But....He stuck his dick in a Xbox so....he could be a "head in da game" ....Im afraid this battle is over homie I was beyond killing you .If someone touched is tits back is da only time the "feeling you" ^^check his sig if you don't understand don't vote... |
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typo's but meh uppin for votes........... |
I didn't know they gave out trophies for worst player in the game, You must get a lotta time, cuz the only thing more played is your wordplay. Call the man white chocolate cuz he's confused within himself, Only time he 'dropped a gat', was when his toy fell off of the shelf. Today is a bad day, cuz your punches are gonna blow me away? HA! Only way you could touch me is if I just had nothing to s.... 1st Bar: Punch on his picture with his trophies. 2nd Bar: Dirty harry is white, he's black. Did a "gangster" pose. 3rd Bar: Making fun of Chicago, windy city, blow. I'm basically saying he isn't worth it to even finish. I had nothing to say to him, and still could beat him. |
Voted For: The Revelation
I didn't know they gave out trophies for worst player in the game, You must get a lotta time, cuz the only thing more played is your wordplay. ^^^bah....basic....2/10 Call the man white chocolate cuz he's confused within himself, Only time he 'dropped a gat', was when his toy fell off of the shelf. ^^OK....kinda amutuer wordplay...5/10 Today is a bad day, cuz your punches are gonna blow me away? HA! Only way you could touch me is if I just had nothing to s.... ^^????.......2/10 2 bars just didn't connect well.Basic rhyme scheme which is a definite no.You had wordplay in the 2nd bar which was amueter.THe last bar was probably your worst one.A pretty weak verse. I would son u.....but tha only way you "chip off tha block" is if u were "discarded Lays" But i did him a favor ........and "pissed" on his old calender so he could "remember tha Golden Dayz" ^^What the fuck?????........1/10 Damn All The Da same Im not used to calling peeps lames But....He stuck his dick in a Xbox so....he could be a "head in da game" ^^head lines are played as fuck...1/10 ....Im afraid this battle is over homie I was beyond killing you .If someone touched is tits back is da only time the "feeling you ^^^meh......4/10 2 bars that sucked.But at least every bar had a punch...that the only positive thing I see for you.1st bar was just flat out stupuid.2nd was played as fuck.3rd was meh....close battle...though neither was good. Vote-Revelation RTF below http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203195 |
Voted For: The Revelation
The Rev Aiight Lols You had Some Aiight Lines Here Some Didn't Rhyme Like The First And Last Bar Play And Game Don't Rhyme Lols Away And S Don't Rhyme Either Man, Try And Get Some Rhyme Scheme In Here Punches Nice Man Wordplay Was Cool Here Call The Man White Choclate Cause He's Confused With Himself Lmao! Good line Mane Merkage Meh Kind Of Good Here Structure Was Ass Though Man I THink Your Best Line WasBut i did him a favor ........and "pissed" on his old calender so he could "remember tha Golden Dayz" Funny As Hell Punches Was Cool Wordplay Nice Man Vocabulary Was Shitting Though Try And Work On That Man No Hate Vote-Rev |
no prop wicked............but i said If u did;nt understand don't vote....and Naturl Killer u obiviously did'nt understand.......the first bar....if u look at his user title u'd get that punch...
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Voted For: The Revelation
um...rev WTF....i have difinetely seen/read better |
Guess no one got what I was using as a personal. But blah. 2 more votes please.
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i meant to press feedback my bad for the vote yall....
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Voted For: The Revelation
Call the man white chocolate cuz he's confused within himself, Only time he 'dropped a gat', was when his toy fell off of the shelf. Vs Nothing The Rev, ur verse was blah.. punches were there.. except they weren’t as hard hittin though. Only one punch in there was good, could’ve made them harder.. but w/e, overall u had a decent verse Merk, ur verse was blah too.. the flow lacked here.. the punches weren’t really connectin in this battle here.. but overall work on ur punches & add some betta personas up in ur verses too.. |
^^you always go around droppin bullshit votes?.....you did that in my battle too.
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...nigga hop off my dick, ur verse was trash anyway
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^^Battle me nigga.................................
you drop unexplained verses twice...in less that 10 minutes |
remove them then... i could care less.. and battlin u
would waste my damn time |
^^ite...ya ain't gon battle....so end it...
peace.... |
This was feedback posted for .Merkage.
checking polls aight!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111
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damn !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
merkage is gettin merk wow!! |
This was feedback posted for The Revelation
Polls Weerd Rev Nice Going..................................
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Voted For: .Merkage.
Yo, I don't know what a discarded Lay is, but the calandar pissed on/golden days is awesome. The Xbox/game quote is an instant classic. Peace to that. You had nice flow and structure in the middle and end, but was still a little choppy. The ending you get a little full of yourself. Its hard to be confident you "killed" someone w / like 4 lines, and the last line had potential, but was weak. The Rev: I like the punches in your first and 3rd lines, but the flow wasn't moving very good, and your last two lines ruined it. The part about gettin blown away kinda sounded shaky, b/c ( and I knwo you didn't mean it like this, but), sounded like you getting blown away was a question, that people could answer yes to. Then you act like you're the shit by not even needing to complete your words. nah man, don't get overconfident. It was interesting though how you attempted to diss where Merkage is from; props for dat. Gotta give my vote to Merkage |
1 more vote please.
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Voted For: The Revelation
Better Punches and some comedy relief in there, but just i liked this verse more.... |
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