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The Essence.
oblivious, society's views are powerfully corruptive, and wickedly captivating... but it's the one's who rise above, that are the truly gifted... ...The Essence... this session leads, leaving trails to my expressions exceeding the norm, with speed, i have fate in my possession the questions of life, dont answer on their own obsession and greed, lessons to weave so seeds of your soul will grow to full potential, expanding strong with the network but standing beyond those who have to suck dick to get work and to those who are demanding my dream ship cannot be landing free im more creative with this hiatus since you're all about profanity see, i bring the music with me, believing in ingenuity leaving rebels feeling distant for decieving continuity heaving grievances, perceiving naives, retrieving thieved truths seeing conceited youths, acheiving lute from pre-conceived routes to receive repute? i'll explain, settling for fake fame does not create you remaining true moves you closer than embezzling ever takes you im not meddling with the message, listen to whispers instead of shouts dont be selling yourself short, before you've begun to sprout but if you're one to doubt, clear it out from intuition let your mouth spout words used as lyrical ammunition you'll hear it from this magician, my vision changes wishes you'll be asking for the music, instead of booze or stage bitches and ditch the digits, put on my tunes and expand your mind unravel from views of time and travel to my land of rhymes where i mesmerize mankind, turning a blind eye to lies with my pride refined i dont look around for motivation..........i glance behind and i look around at these crooks of the game, i see them stressing while they come out with their same shit, i aim to leave you guessing but im only a small venue of blessing, so savor my presence because on my menu of music.....the flavour is essence ___________________________________________ feed. |
Fuckin' sick OM..
I'll leave better feed later, I'm gong mini golfing.. |
Dope...the flow was there without a doubt, and this is really a masterpiece. Maddrapper might even call this rap, but more likely he'll post one of his own verses in here. The multis were well thought out, as well as the content and everything else. One of those pieces that I read a few times. Good job on this...
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thank you.
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This was some dope stuff right here.And....is that some multis I see?LOL...dope.
wording stayed on point throughout the whole verse.Vocabulary was extrodianary.Flow was smooth as ice.Nothing bad to say.10/10. |
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Nice Ill Drop Feed Later
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dope flow was sick good multis an aight vocab
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good shit right here.
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dope piece man....really liked it good emotion nicely flowed......excellent structure right here.....good multies man iight vocab.........8/10
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i'll see what i can do.
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Fuckin Dope, Good job.. Your point really got thru in this piece, great flow.. multis were nyce.. Keep droppin' pieces like this, its enjoyable to read..
RTF, if you can- http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203343 |
word...........
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lets get some feeeeeeeeeeeed
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Nice flow, i was feelin this good topic.....nice vocab...everything was on point 8/10...kepp it up
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thank you son..
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cmon bitches.......
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word, this was gangsta :shoot:
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Dope. Theres not much wrong with it, and youve been told whats good about it so i wont waste time. It was ill.
This might be a bit hard to understand so bear with me... Cos I have to try to explain something wierd that could be said by just saying you need more change ups, but that wouldnt really help you. -_- Basically, the only bad thing about it was your style. But don't take that personally :thumbup:.. Your style is good. The vocab, flow and general vibe of your style is good, BUT a style like yours needs a bit of character. That verse objectively was perfect, but subjectively it needs more. I think you know about this already though, if not conciously then unconciously, because about two thirds of the way through the vibe changed to more of a bliss n eso type thing... you'll hear it from this magician, my vision changes wishes you'll be asking for the music, instead of booze or stage bitches ^from that line is where that happened... Which was cool. You just need more... color... or something. Its really hard to explain.... it needs more... personality.. I just read it again, and I really can't pinpoint what it is im talking about. Are you ever gonna do audio? Cos emotion in your voice would really make a piece like this dope. But yeah... it needs more soul or something really hard to explain. Dont worry too much about it, because half the time im an idiot and it probably doesnt even matter... just keep practicing and it will make it better. |
yeah, i understand...mostly; i have drifted a lil from my usual style, mainly because i try to write all my pieces with more of an involving flow, where you can really get into a piece.....im thinkin 'bout doin audio, but i really don't know where to start, meh, maybe one day.....that line, actually, and from then on down, i wrote in about 10 min to finish it off. feed is much appreciated, because now i read it over and what you said makes alot more sense. word
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Ya Real Nice Flow Some Good Multis In There Nice Way You Worded The Whole Thing Structures Pretty Good And Vocab Was Ight You COuld Work on It Tho
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dope good om liked it good multis n good vocab good concepts i couldnt find anything wrong with this!keep up
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uhmm, veyetal says thanks holmes
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uppin..............
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bump...........
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i liked it there was deff a flow there keep on dropin stuff
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