A-Sez vs Law_Jr
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
You drop your verse first

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Check in by: 08-09-05 at 06:18 PM

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Law_Jr has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-06-05 06:19 PM.

This kid doesen't kno who tha fuck he's battlin/\Newsflash dawg your not an emcee your style is generic
Shoot off Wit only one clip and already his head's rattlin/\Have this nigga vommitin because i flow toxic

This niggaz on kool kol-b's dick he needz 2 be eraticated/\Dude givin out dumb-ass votes he's fuckin eerie
Kool kol-b in Member Mugshots wasn't the first time he masturebated/\Cuz like faggots at at a bitch party he always says Fuck Puss-c

When this cat thinks of kool kol-b he gets a bizzy-bone-r/\Cant even compare his shit to bone thugz n harmony
U can tell he's always at home jackin off he's a fuckin loner/\Ha fah this guy battlin me is intolerable cruelty

A-Sez has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-06-05 11:57 PM.

this kid bends over fo tha fellas n he takes it raw
i dont need 2 commit a crime, but ima break tha law
i dont even gotta use good rymes, cuz ur shit is wack as hell

yeah, it means i just put this pussy 2 sleep myself*
c wut im sayin? my lyrics kill u, ur about 2 die
ima school this kid. battle me? wut is Jr.? high?**

* vets = vetranarian, pussy = cat, ahh, u know wut the fuck i mean
** SCHOOL this kid, Jr.? high? = Junior High

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Voted For: A-Sez

This kid doesen't kno who tha fuck he's battlin/\Newsflash dawg your not an emcee your style is generic
Shoot off Wit only one clip and already his head's rattlin/\Have this nigga vommitin because i flow toxic
^^Umm..I assume this is a bar?...but there's no punch
This niggaz on kool kol-b's dick he needz 2 be eraticated/\Dude givin out dumb-ass votes he's fuckin eerie
Kool kol-b in Member Mugshots wasn't the first time he masturebated/\Cuz like faggots at at a bitch party he always says Fuck Puss-c
^^well...you had a good concept on Kool-B...but where was proof...or is it a fake personal on him d/r'n.?
When this cat thinks of kool kol-b he gets a bizzy-bone-r/\Cant even compare his shit to bone thugz n harmony
U can tell he's always at home jackin off he's a fuckin loner/\Ha fah this guy battlin me is intolerable cruelty
^^your just all over the place....

OK...your structure sucks.Just being honest....here.What I think you need is to write you verses normally.not with the ^ shit.And you just seemed to be all over the place.A half of a line spoke about him and Kool-col..and then the other half was about voting...word your shit up and fix structure.



this kid bends over fo tha fellas n he takes it raw
i dont need 2 commit a crime, but ima break tha law
^^played..every battle with Law has to have something like this?
i dont even gotta use good rymes, cuz ur shit is wack as hell
Quote:
Originally Posted by Law_Jr
damn yall niggaz know what no vets means
yeah, it means i just put this pussy 2 sleep myself*
^^No punch.....
c wut im sayin? my lyrics kill u, ur about 2 die
ima school this kid. battle me? wut is Jr.? high?**
^^OK..best line in this bar

Ok...you had a better structure and flow.And wasn't all over the place like LAw.But your punches were weak.1st bar about breakin law has been used against law jr in every single battle he's been in.2nd bar was nothing.3rd was the best.

Vote-A-SEZ
RTF BELOW PLEASE
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203195

my bad forgot to quote proof

battle kool col-b vs puss-c this was a vote for kool




from what are you listening to thread

my bad forgot to quote proof

battle kool col-b vs puss-c this was a vote for kool




from what are you listening to thread


please revise vote........

^^that was feed back not a vote

^^that was feed back not a vote

Law....it's too late now to post proof...the voters wouldn't be able to see it.....

Voted For: Law_Jr

V/law_Jr

LAW had better disses better multis better vocab man a-sez just cuz in ur mind u think u good dont mean u only gutta put 3 whack lines no hate just stating my opinion law ur shit was fresh nothing played.....a-sez ur shit was shit nothing at all man no hate.........RTF OR THIS VOTE WILL BE DISQUALIFIED

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Voted For: A-Sez

wow this was hella one sided fam..Sez...good drp man yo shit was hot...last line that shit had me rolling...


Law homnie work on ya structure fam it's fucked horribly.....i did'nt even finish tha verse becuz i culd'nt....

but anywho my vote goes to A-Sez


rtf in my sig or i will get this vote removed fam..i mean it

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checkin polls.....................haha...a-sez won cuz he had personals and because he wasnt on some stupid ass shitty structure shit like dickhead over there

Voted For: A-Sez

IP:


this kid bends over fo tha fellas n he takes it raw
i dont need 2 commit a crime, but ima break tha law
ok opener, but wasn't that strong of a punch.8/10[B]
i dont even gotta use good rymes, cuz ur shit is wack as hell

Quote:
Originally Posted by Law_Jr
damn yall niggaz know what no vets means


yeah, it means i just put this pussy 2 sleep myself*
[B]Good punch,was strong,liked the quote too,good use of it against your opponent..10/10
c wut im sayin? my lyrics kill u, ur about 2 die
ima school this kid. battle me? wut is Jr.? high?**
good punch, was strong, nice wordplay against him.9/10
overall good verse, you said a lot in a little amount of space.
IP:


This kid doesen't kno who tha fuck he's battlin/\Newsflash dawg your not an emcee your style is generic
Shoot off Wit only one clip and already his head's rattlin/\Have this nigga vommitin because i flow toxic
hmm, ok, your structure is maad stretched, decent punch, didnt think toxic and generic rhymed well together.6/10

This niggaz on kool kol-b's dick he needz 2 be eraticated/\Dude givin out dumb-ass votes he's fuckin eerie
Kool kol-b in Member Mugshots wasn't the first time he masturebated/\Cuz like faggots at at a bitch party he always says Fuck Puss-c
hmm, again too stretched and jumbled, and don;t like the rhyme scheme, you try to fit too much in.5/10

When this cat thinks of kool kol-b he gets a bizzy-bone-r/\Cant even compare his shit to bone thugz n harmony
U can tell he's always at home jackin off he's a fuckin loner/\Ha fah this guy battlin me is intolerable cruelty
you mention kool colb way too much in this verse, and your trying ot make it seem your opponent is on his dick when in fact, you drop his name 4 times, this bar is waaayyy too stretched. And all over the place. overall you need some work on your verses 6/10

by the number it looks like A-sez gets this one. good battle both, rtf, honest vote.link in the siggy.1

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Voted For: A-Sez

take this vote outt..i was lazy to hit feedback

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This was feedback posted for Law_Jr
 

pollz.........

hey, our battle records are opposite
1-5=you
5-1=me!

Voted For: A-Sez

U can tell he's always at home jackin off he's a fuckin loner/\Ha fah this guy battlin me is intolerable cruelty

vs
this kid bends over fo tha fellas n he takes it raw
i dont need 2 commit a crime, but ima break tha law


weak battle,

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thanx fa tha vote i actually thought u voted against me..........unblacklist.......... whats ur old alias?

Voted For: Law_Jr

WOW at how bad you fucking suck......

damn.....
polls...

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Voted For: Law_Jr

I think that ThatNi**a got this battle because i feel that ThatNi**a came stronger in the following categories...Punches i felt ThatNi**a got it they were at best average but they were on point A-Sez u shoulda been a bit more creative on this occasion personals i felt went to ThatNi**a good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to Both coz it wasn't very overly creative and flow and structure i'll give to A-Sez.

V/ThatNi**a There's my sig be sure to return the favour honestly within 3 days or vote removed :thumbup:

Voted For: A-Sez

A-Sez

this kid bends over fo tha fellas n he takes it raw
i dont need 2 commit a crime, but ima break tha law
Cool..
i dont even gotta use good rymes, cuz ur shit is wack as hell
yeah, it means i just put this pussy 2 sleep myself
Nah..
c wut im sayin? my lyrics kill u, ur about 2 die
ima school this kid. battle me? wut is Jr.? high?
Concept had potential.. the wording was horrible, though..

ThatNigga

This kid doesen't kno who tha fuck he's battlin/\Newsflash dawg your not an emcee your style is generic
Shoot off Wit only one clip and already his head's rattlin/\Have this nigga vommitin because i flow toxic
Not a punch..
This niggaz on kool kol-b's dick he needz 2 be eraticated/\Dude givin out dumb-ass votes he's fuckin eerie
Kool kol-b in Member Mugshots wasn't the first time he masturebated/\Cuz like faggots at at a bitch party he always says Fuck Puss-c
Didn't connect..
When this cat thinks of kool kol-b he gets a bizzy-bone-r/\Cant even compare his shit to bone thugz n harmony
U can tell he's always at home jackin off he's a fuckin loner/\Ha fah this guy battlin me is intolerable cruelty
Nope..

Overall, this battle wasn't that good at all. A-Sez had that one cool line about "breaking law," but the rest wasn't that good. ThatNigga's verse was just bad. Two of his three punches didn't even rhyme (generic/toxic, harmony/cruelty) and his concepts weren't original. Overall, A-Sez just had the more polished verse, and his one good punch was enough to take the win.

Vote - A-Sez

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Voted For: A-Sez

lmao @ A-sez closer....

was by fasr the best line in this battle..

..the battle itself dissappointed tho.

V/ A sez

for having better punches and wordplay.

jr, you need to pick up ya structure. that style never has and never will work. word.

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Voted For: A-Sez

hmmm this battle sucked... and nothing sucked worst than JR's verse... A-Sez last line by it self crushes JR's entire verse... Law Jr. 4got to throw any punches at all... *smh*

Opener: Sez
Closer: Sez
Punches: Sez
Personals: Sez
Creativity: Sez
Complexity: Sez
Enjoyment: None

Vote: A-Sez

lmao yea, this was my first battle, wow @ how much ive elevated

Voted For: A-Sez

i voted for a-sez his lines flowed better and his punches hit hard
and overall his structure was better

young law i didnt voted for u cus ur lines didnt flow as nice and the rymes werent as tight as his

no hate thog

rtf on one of my battles