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Law_Jr vs .Merkage.
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Law_Jr has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-06-05 08:57 PM.
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This nigga reppin LL or tha so called dub l's/\But tha R.A.W Reality is he dont know shyt about tha game
Nigga think he havin a seizure truth is im dumpin shellz/\This battle is such a slaughter its a fuckin shame Wow won a tourney round ya cirb, how fuking exciting/\But no 1 gives a shyt, so come back to reality son U actually won, now we gotta figure out who u were biting/\cuz tha chances of u winning are worse than fuckin a nun You actually think u gon get signed and hit up ciara ha very tricky/\Dawg u fukin suck snap out of it aint shyt changed nigga u got less of a chance to blow up than pretty ricky/\Hope you learned somethin cuz im enforcin tha laws of tha game |
.Merkage. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-06-05 09:13 PM.
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Battling me homie not really good for ya health.....
no one takes you seriously look at ya "name" man da dummy underscores himself Look "Jr." You anit tha "Law" but son ya ways are Trife... but since you wanna crime fight I 'll show you a win anit worth me "Tekken" ya life.. Call Me Danno but you illiterate fuck i'll throw u da book and i'll pass u a mirror And man i'll leave this Rascal Dizzy from his own looks Leave you drowsy somone gonna have to cop u a bed and you not cool ya avy needs to place that finger right to ya head... if u don't understand don't vote.... |
Voted For: .Merkage.
Battling me homie not really good for ya health..... no one takes you seriously look at ya "name" man da dummy underscores himself ^^^OK......3/10 Look "Jr." You anit tha "Law" but son ya ways are Trife... but since you wanna crime fight I 'll show you a win anit worth me "Tekken" ya life.. ^^Better........flowed bad....6/10 Call Me Danno but you illiterate fuck i'll throw u da book and i'll pass u a mirror And man i'll leave this Rascal Dizzy from his own looks ^^^NO.....2/10 Leave you drowsy somone gonna have to cop u a bed and you not cool ya avy needs to place that finger right to ya head... ^^No....3/10 Not enough complexity.Far too basic.1st bar was an Ok concept...but it really lacked in wording.2nd was your best...but again...coulda been better.3rd was just stupuid...just being honest there.4th was whack.I mean...some of your lines coulda hit better if wording was better. This nigga reppin LL or tha so called dub l's/\But tha R.A.W Reality is he dont know shyt about tha game Nigga think he havin a seizure truth is im dumpin shellz/\This battle is such a slaughter its a fuckin shame ^^no punch.....1/10 Wow won a tourney round ya cirb, how fuking exciting/\But no 1 gives a shyt, so come back to reality son U actually won, now we gotta figure out who u were biting/\cuz tha chances of u winning are worse than fuckin a nun ^^Played and basic....2/10 You actually think u gon get signed and hit up ciara ha very tricky/\Dawg u fukin suck snap out of it aint shyt changed nigga u got less of a chance to blow up than pretty ricky/\Hope you learned somethin cuz im enforcin tha laws of tha game ^^No punch...wft?stop talking about yourself...focus on the other guy....0/10 Too much self glorifing in here.Only punch was the 2nd bar and that sucked.You can't just state shit and expect to get a good responce.It's all about wordplay and being direct with your shit. Vote-Merkage RTF BELOW OR THIS REMOVED http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203256 Crew vote removed |
.........get this removed you're in my crew.................
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whos in ya crew in LL or sum shyt
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ooh...werd?......i didn't even know the roster..my fault...but leave some feedback in my battle...yea..get it removed. |
ohhh thought u was talkinbout me
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ayo whats takin so logng to get tha vote removed
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wtf................can we get sum fucking votes..........................................
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Voted For: .Merkage.
This nigga reppin LL or tha so called dub l's/\But tha R.A.W Reality is he dont know shyt about tha game Nigga think he havin a seizure truth is im dumpin shellz/\This battle is such a slaughter its a fuckin shame ^^^^structure fucked.....an ight opener Wow won a tourney round ya cirb, how fuking exciting/\But no 1 gives a shyt, so come back to reality son U actually won, now we gotta figure out who u were biting/\cuz tha chances of u winning are worse than fuckin a nun ^^^No played You actually think u gon get signed and hit up ciara ha very tricky/\Dawg u fukin suck snap out of it aint shyt changed nigga u got less of a chance to blow up than pretty ricky/\Hope you learned somethin cuz im enforcin tha laws of tha game ^^^ight Closer Nuthin Special Battling me homie not really good for ya health..... no one takes you seriously look at ya "name" man da dummy underscores himself ^^^Lol good opener Look "Jr." You anit tha "Law" but son ya ways are Trife... but since you wanna crime fight I 'll show you a win anit worth me "Tekken" ya life.. ^^^Good personal Call Me Danno but you illiterate fuck i'll throw u da book and i'll pass u a mirror And man i'll leave this Rascal Dizzy from his own looks Leave you drowsy somone gonna have to cop u a bed and you not cool ^^^ight closer Fell off at the end... V/Merkage this was a onesided battle jr u came wit bad sturcture an u had some played lines seem better from u....Merk u came wit some good personals an punchs also work on ur structure..... RTF Or i Will Get this Vote REmoved an u'll never get another Honest Vote From me agian.... |
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Voted For: .Merkage.
Structure-Both had bad structure, cant vote on this catergorie both up on structure and make ur lines end up at the same point, cant stress that enough. Vocab-Niether had appealing vocab, both should up on vocab as ur verse goes along...makes it more appealing to the eye.... Punches-.MERKAGE., had better punches...more fresh punches that hit harder, law ur punches were sorta played i wasnt feelin them....make sure ur punches actually hits ur opponnet Personals-Best personal has to be from merkage first 2 lines...sick...keep that up homey practically won u the battle....didnt see much from law....up on that homey do you want to win? Multis-Niether had appealing multis to my eye...multis helps the flow and makes it more appealing to read....both up on that....... Originality-.merkage. was more original and fresh...verse law i didnt think urs was so original had very basic rhyme scheme....keep it up and shit..... V/.MERKAGE. RTF SINCE I TOOK THE TIME TO ANALYZE YOURS OR THIS VOTE WILL BE REMOVED :THUMBUP: |
Voted For: .Merkage.
if u don't understand don't vote....: got to be stupd not to understand . . . u won pretty simple ... punches were harder hitting. . . personals was better. . . more structured verse. . . better flow . . well organized .. and easy to read : fav. line. . . look at ya "name" man da dummy underscores himself. . . well done keep writing |
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Voted For: .Merkage.
i guess it goes to merkage : flow was better harder hitting punches: best line :look at ya "name" man da dummy underscores himself Look "Jr." You anit tha "Law" but son ya ways are Trife... :great punch topoo bad it didn't rhyme. . . but the punches were there beside that bar everything else was straight and like i said i still found it entertaining... desent drop keep writing.. good luck to both |
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This was feedback posted for .Merkage.
wow u both came so bad that this was close lol....
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This was feedback posted for .Merkage.
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Voted For: .Merkage.
Flowed better, had better puches, need i explain more?.... |
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