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Detrimental vs Natural killa
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No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-09-05 at 01:22 AM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
how many lines?......unlimited?......................
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fuck i accidentally deleted it.....make it 12-16 lines man lol......
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ooh......ok.......I'ma drop tommorow at like 4:00 Pm.......peace.....I'm goi to bed..
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hold up talkin to this girl tryin to confort her i'll drop in an hour
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Detrimental has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-08-05 02:54 AM.
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Natural Killa look like he just learnin to rap 1.
Says he's here to kill when he's never heard of a gat 2. Your life is this website man you ugly as a sin You're probably mad cuz nothin blows you but the wind He's fake he just claims the cliq he's hangin with 3. Trigga Town? ya'll aint down with the bangin shit 4. You're a hatin bitch and you wonder why we hatin you Have to tie food to your neck so dogs play with you We can safely assume you probably think you're fresher But takin my lyrics is the only way you'll sell a record You must be stupid, beating me will always be a wish So from that your IQ must be as small as your g/f's tits This battle is a prime example of how far your wishin gets Messin with me leaves your record like the system guest's 5. Pathetic, you'll probably dick ride if worse comes to worse This a mans game, next time you step take off your skirt 1.he's a newb 2.his title thing says Coming To Kill You All 3.I'm callin him fake sayin he just claims a cliq if he hangs with them 4.Trigga Town must be his cliq and it makes it seem like they down with guns when most people talk fake about that shit 5.System Guest has a 0-1 record and NK has a 0-0 but i'll change that lol |
Natural killa has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-08-05 10:47 AM.
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i'll give him some scars and a note,while this bitch tries to be hard with a pose
and his name's death-try-mental(name),cause he's like a retard with a rope so I be at your crib,perspiring you mother,while you at school,firing some butter n your rhymes are maid as F-rest(fresh),as some aspiring butlers count on me to deliver the bomb apropos,n watch it blow,soon as ya mom looks down below n i'm bein real when i say....what real emcee comes from "Akron,Ohio?" battle a kid whose comments repatee's nerd?,and his career is conferee'd cursed? and he ain't creative,nah,this bitch named himself after an SAT word a brat behind guys,might as well hold up the sign,admit,you deliver the fries you re-hearse(rehearse) that verse more times than a cat with 9 lives PMS'n crazily,flippin on people,in a legit paging,and no doubt,you in a pre-writ staging but you don't really diss-guys(disguise)well,like untrained secret agents in the middle of the night,this cat gets caught tight,and board wide n c'mon,look at his user title,kid can't even spell "thoughts" right* *his user title says....detrimental to your thougts"..but he's probably gonna change it now.. |
Voted For: Natural killa
ok D u do not need to put numbers by ur lines tht is the worst thing to do man also u need to up ur punches quite a bit.. Natural again u come with some ill ass wordplay man, and it was making me laugh, also it was damn harsh too, good battle but V/Natural for punches and structure...please vote on the abttle in my sig..thanks |
thx......but^^ya got only 2 battles and i checked polls in one and voted in one already
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This was feedback posted for Detrimental
man your verse could have been straight if you would just RHYME and if you did must've not picked up on it
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i'm not gonna rely on a newbs opinion to elevate....how about you read over dumb ass uppin |
Voted For: Detrimental
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Voted For: Natural killa
Natural Killa look like he just learnin to rap 1. Says he's here to kill when he's never heard of a gat 2. ^^^Weak Opener Your life is this website man you ugly as a sin You're probably mad cuz nothin blows you but the wind ^^^No.... He's fake he just claims the cliq he's hangin with 3. Trigga Town? ya'll aint down with the bangin shit 4. ^^^ight.... You're a hatin bitch and you wonder why we hatin you Have to tie food to your neck so dogs play with you ^^^Wack No Punch We can safely assume you probably think you're fresher But takin my lyrics is the only way you'll sell a record ^^^Weak..... You must be stupid, beating me will always be a wish So from that your IQ must be as small as your g/f's tits ^^^Weak.....No Diss really This battle is a prime example of how far your wishin gets Messin with me leaves your record like the system guest's 5. ^^^Played..... Pathetic, you'll probably dick ride if worse comes to worse This a mans game, next time you step take off your skirt ^^^Ight Closer i'll give him some scars and a note,while this bitch tries to be hard with a pose and his name's death-try-mental(name),cause he's like a retard with a rope ^^^Ight Opener so I be at your crib,perspiring you mother,while you at school,firing some butter n your rhymes are maid as F-rest(fresh),as some aspiring butlers ^^^Ight Punch... count on me to deliver the bomb apropos,n watch it blow,soon as ya mom looks down below n i'm bein real when i say....what real emcee comes from "Akron,Ohio?" ^^^Good Personal.... battle a kid whose comments repatee's nerd?,and his career is conferee'd cursed? and he ain't creative,nah,this bitch named himself after an SAT word ^^^NIce personal...... a brat behind guys,might as well hold up the sign,admit,you deliver the fries you re-hearse(rehearse) that verse more times than a cat with 9 lives ^^^No Played PMS'n crazily,flippin on people,in a legit paging,and no doubt,you in a pre-writ staging but you don't really diss-guys(disguise)well,like untrained secret agents ^^^Ight Solid punch in the middle of the night,this cat gets caught tight,and board wide n c'mon,look at his user title,kid can't even spell "thoughts" right* ^^^Good Closer wit a personal.... V/Natural Killa......This was a one sided battle....Det came wit some basic weak punchs an His personals REally weren't good No hate Jus werk on ur Punchs an vocab.....Nk....u came wit a better verse some played lines but some good punchs mixed wit many personal's.... R>>>T>>>F............ |
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Voted For: Detrimental
Naturall killa didnt come with to many punches, the structure was fucked up,so work on dat, his rhyming was aight but didnt do him anygood, considering that the rest wasnt all that good. Detrimental, every bar in his verse had a punch, the best one to me was But takin my lyrics is the only way you'll sell a record, his structure was good, and he made sure he rhymed this vote goes 2 natural killa Vote switched |
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Voted For: Detrimental
detrimental got this.... Your life is this website man you ugly as a sin You're probably mad cuz nothin blows you but the wind vs. nothin basically detrimental threw the one solid punch in this battle....natrual killa you tried to come complex, but it back fired failed attempts at wordplay, made your punches weak and not connect...you should try being more simple and just punch...also dont use stretched lines....basically detrimental gets this for throwin a good punch |
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Voted For: Natural killa
detrimental: Natural Killa look like he just learnin to rap 1. Says he's here to kill when he's never heard of a gat 2. ^^^VERY BASIC..NOT A GOOD OPENER...U CAN KILL PPL WITHOUT A GAT FAM LOL Your life is this website man you ugly as a sin You're probably mad cuz nothin blows you but the wind ^^^DIDN'T LIKE DA FLOW ON DIS 1...PUNCH WAS DECENT COULD OF BEEN WORDED BETTA He's fake he just claims the cliq he's hangin with 3. Trigga Town? ya'll aint down with the bangin shit 4. ^^^WHERE'S DA CREATIVITY FAM??? You're a hatin bitch and you wonder why we hatin you Have to tie food to your neck so dogs play with you ^^^U SERIOUS?????...DIS IS SOME LIL KID SHIT We can safely assume you probably think you're fresher But takin my lyrics is the only way you'll sell a record ^^^^NO You must be stupid, beating me will always be a wish So from that your IQ must be as small as your g/f's tits ^^^^NO AGAIN This battle is a prime example of how far your wishin gets Messin with me leaves your record like the system guest's 5. ^^^SYSTEM GUEST LINE HAS BEEN USED LIKE 1000 TIMES ALREADY Pathetic, you'll probably dick ride if worse comes to worse This a mans game, next time you step take off your skirt ^^^WEAK CLOSER.. natural killa: i'll give him some scars and a note,while this bitch tries to be hard with a pose and his name's death-try-mental(name),cause he's like a retard with a rope ^^^WHUT????...SHOULD OF EXPLAIN DIS SHIT so I be at your crib,perspiring you mother,while you at school,firing some butter n your rhymes are maid as F-rest(fresh),as some aspiring butlers ^^^LMAOOO WHUT DA FUCK IS DIS...DA MULTIS IS GOOD BUT U AINT MAKIN NO SENSE count on me to deliver the bomb apropos,n watch it blow,soon as ya mom looks down below n i'm bein real when i say....what real emcee comes from "Akron,Ohio?" ^^DECENT PERSONAL battle a kid whose comments repatee's nerd?,and his career is conferee'd cursed? and he ain't creative,nah,this bitch named himself after an SAT word ^^^^????????????????????????????????????????? a brat behind guys,might as well hold up the sign,admit,you deliver the fries you re-hearse(rehearse) that verse more times than a cat with 9 lives ^^^^WEAK....LOL I KNOW WHO U ARE NOW FAM PMS'n crazily,flippin on people,in a legit paging,and no doubt,you in a pre-writ staging but you don't really diss-guys(disguise)well,like untrained secret agents ^^^DOPE LINE...NEVA SEEN DIS BETTA THAN DETRI'S WHOLE VERSE in the middle of the night,this cat gets caught tight,and board wide n c'mon,look at his user title,kid can't even spell "thoughts" right* ^^^OKAY CLOSER...HE DID CHANGE IT THO.... DIS BATTLE HAD A WHOLE BUNCH OF DUMB LINES...BUT NATURAL PULLED IT OUT WITH DAT DISS-GUYS LINE...AND HE HAD SOME CREATIVITY...DETRI HAD NO CREATIVITY IN HIS VERSE NO LINES STOOD..YEAH U HAD PERSONAL CONCEPTS ABOUT HIM BUT U MADE DEM REAL WACK |
Good........someone gimme a win now...............
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This was feedback posted for Detrimental
y0 tHaT sHiT wUz FiRe SuN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Voted For: Detrimental
I gots ta give the vote to you man. Killa, bro, your shit's too long and doesn't flow. You two were both ok on the personals. and I loved the statement comparin the IQ to the gf's titties - that's priceless, but what if his gf has massive titties? and btw, what the fuck is a "gat" |
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Voted For: Natural killa
Detr Natural Killa look like he just learnin to rap 1. Says he's here to kill when he's never heard of a gat 2. Your life is this website man you ugly as a sin You're probably mad cuz nothin blows you but the wind This was some pre-mature shit He's fake he just claims the cliq he's hangin with 3. Trigga Town? ya'll aint down with the bangin shit 4. You're a hatin bitch and you wonder why we hatin you Have to tie food to your neck so dogs play with you the same here We can safely assume you probably think you're fresher But takin my lyrics is the only way you'll sell a record You must be stupid, beating me will always be a wish So from that your IQ must be as small as your g/f's tits this was better i liked the way it flowed and not a bad diss either This battle is a prime example of how far your wishin gets Messin with me leaves your record like the system guest's 5. Pathetic, you'll probably dick ride if worse comes to worse This a mans game, next time you step take off your skirt best from your verse 5.5/10 the beginig was horrible but you picked it up in the end,in the end i liked your vocab and your flow NK i'll give him some scars and a note,while this bitch tries to be hard with a pose and his name's death-try-mental(name),cause he's like a retard with a rope LOL so I be at your crib,perspiring you mother,while you at school,firing some butter n your rhymes are maid as F-rest(fresh),as some aspiring butlers OK count on me to deliver the bomb apropos,n watch it blow,soon as ya mom looks down below n i'm bein real when i say....what real emcee comes from "Akron,Ohio?" aight battle a kid whose comments repatee's nerd?,and his career is conferee'd cursed? and he ain't creative,nah,this bitch named himself after an SAT word This was nice as hell a brat behind guys,might as well hold up the sign,admit,you deliver the fries you re-hearse(rehearse) that verse more times than a cat with 9 lives this was nice PMS'n crazily,flippin on people,in a legit paging,and no doubt,you in a pre-writ staging but you don't really diss-guys(disguise)well,like untrained secret agents damn this battle is already over in the middle of the night,this cat gets caught tight,and board wide n c'mon,look at his user title,kid can't even spell "thoughts" right* Nice ender 8.5/10 this was completley one sided IMO natural killa came with some clever punches and his verse had me laughing vote-NK |
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