Ridicule vs Natural killa
 

Battle Rules:

10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
3-0 KO
4-1 KO

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-11-05 at 11:45 PM

Must drop verse in 120 minutes after check in.

Natural killa has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-05 06:42 PM.

suffocating as i'm braiding out ya air,ya fading outta here,as i spit my innuendo array
cuz he's about as close to a young profit(prophet) as nintendo is today**
i bet a rich boy like you feels rebelious and intellectual for one liter-a-chore(literature)
but after this battle,your stuck staring at the sky like TuPAc in ya signature
crying for the nurse tattle,cuz it's his 1st battle,n he's gonna buffet the best born
but he's a rook-key trapped,like someone locked away the chess board
10 bars off the top,'s all it took,like old books,we'll just put you on the shelf
could be another Miss Cleo,cuz ya name tells us what ya verse gon do to yaself
ya lost ya 1st quick like sonic,n ya now listened to the chronic,like ya shocks stay full
ya dumbass is clueless,shit,ya's behind times like giving the clocks anul


His user title says "Young prophet"**

Ridicule has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-05 06:53 PM.

im droppin early cant be assed hangin about here goes.....good luck homie

Dawgs been talking, that a textie be gettin whored by an audio head
So I went over,took a look…….lines that resemble u,just to overfed
Stopped in his tracks cuz you got chewed up and spat back down under
Battles which u cud have neva won,taz has been renown for herb asunder
How the fuck u here to kill us because u can’t beat us went ur knocked out
Getting beat by cartoons,audio n even da blind,is nothing im shocked about
This fags rhymes all recycled,so stay away, he aint safe for the envirement
Cuz he's gonna be like former boxers "Trinadad" going into Retirement
Been banned by Vets and beat by newbies,cuz in a few months that’s occurred
And hows ya music gonna go far, when even your Ma doesnt want you to be heard

Expiation:
1st Bar: He’s get beat by a audio head eg Tha Q n the rest is easy
2nd Bar: He got beat by a guy called Taz! Taz lives down under(Aussie) n asunder means torn apart
3rd bar: His title and the Taz n Tha Q bit
4th bar: He claims he’s from Trinidad n with K-Trini he got banned
5th Bar: His life story on RV n Ma=Mother n doesnt want you to be heard=Creep which makes Ma+creep=Macreep his old account

nice drop homie..............uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LoL...Ok...but....what's with all the K-trini refernces and when did i rep trinidad?

wtf is talking?

uppin 4 votes.....

still can't get over it nigga....you think I'm K-trini/Macreep and comprimised a whole verse based on it...

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2359087
^^here...thassarap asked me if I was him too...check it..we got different Ip's...

smh..

Voted For: Natural killa

Structure-Natural killa, had better flow, ridicule....flow was kinda off....didnt feel it...up on making ur liines end up near eachother....

Vocab-Natural killa, had better vocab, went nicely with his verse was feelin it...Ridicule, ur verse had plain and simple vocab wasnt feeling thta at all...up on that...try enhancing ur vocab as ur verse goes along

Personals-Thought Ridicule had better personals than Natural Killa.....thats about that

Punches-Natural killa had better punches.....more fresh original stuff than ridicule, ridicule didnt feel ur verse was as hard hitting has naturals

Multis-Natural killa...HAd better multis but with his multis he added enhanced his vocab....very nice job killa, ridicule didnt feel ur multis was hott.

Originality-Natural killa had original hott verse....which was eye appealin the whole verse....Ridicule...ur structure is eye soring try and fix that up a bit

V/NATURAL KILLA

PLEASE RTF SINCE I TOOK THE TIME TO VOTE ON URS

This was feedback posted for Ridicule
 

No way man,

mutha fuck..............:wink: .

Yo dawg structure is to keep ya verse in a block shape!!!!!!! :cussing:

:cussing: ^^mother fuvker......calllin me k-trini!!!!.................... :cussing:

This was feedback posted for Natural killa
 

y0 tHaT sHiT wUz FiRe SuN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lmao, goddamn newbie :shoot:

hehe, jp...i know everything!

Voted For: Ridicule

suffocating as i'm braiding out ya air,ya fading outta here,as i spit my innuendo array
cuz he's about as close to a young profit(prophet) as nintendo is today**
^^^^^^^^^
Sorry man but that line sucked IMO...it was a decent attempt I saw the fact it was hard to try

i bet a rich boy like you feels rebelious and intellectual for one liter-a-chore(literature)
but after this battle,your stuck staring at the sky like TuPAc in ya signature
^^^^^
Ok wheres the punch...but good wordplay..that was ok

crying for the nurse tattle,cuz it's his 1st battle,n he's gonna buffet the best born
but he's a rook-key trapped,like someone locked away the chess board
^^^^
PLAYED....so many chess lines its crazeee
but ok

10 bars off the top,'s all it took,like old books,we'll just put you on the shelf
could be another Miss Cleo,cuz ya name tells us what ya verse gon do to yaself
^^
haha I liked this...nice line...1st one i rlly felt

ya lost ya 1st quick like sonic,n ya now listened to the chronic,like ya shocks stay full
ya dumbass is clueless,shit,ya's behind times like giving the clocks anul
^^^
GOOD...best line of ure verse...a pretty bad verse from the beggining but then the last 2 bars were hot ill give you that
Overall

5/10
work on ure punches

Dawgs been talking, that a textie be gettin whored by an audio head
So I went over,took a look…….lines that resemble u,just to overfed
^^^
sorry dude didnt like the line

Stopped in his tracks cuz you got chewed up and spat back down under
Battles which u cud have neva won,taz has been renown for herb asunder
^^
liked the wordplay...good diss...good punch

How the fuck u here to kill us because u can’t beat us went ur knocked out
Getting beat by cartoons,audio n even da blind,is nothing im shocked about
^^^
Yo ure new good try but this didnt work

This fags rhymes all recycled,so stay away, he aint safe for the envirement
Cuz he's gonna be like former boxers "Trinadad" going into Retirement
^^^
Good shit there...see the punch

Been banned by Vets and beat by newbies,cuz in a few months that’s occurred
And hows ya music gonna go far, when even your Ma doesnt want you to be heard
^^^^
decent punch...complex but decnet

6/10....
Decent shit...you get this IMO...you had the punches...you had sum good lines but still elevation is needed

Thanx uppin.......................................

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y u in here dawg get out.....................UPPIN

Voted For: Ridicule

lol.. okay this was a very weak battle.. seriously

Ridcule: okay.. verse is below average... well average atleast since there was personals.. your punches were okay.. it was really confusing.. n a punch shouldt be hard to understand if it was good.. so yea.. work on that.. strucutre. blah.. flow was blah.. basiclly elvate on battling.. 4/10

Natural:
your verse was basiclly same. your structure is blah.. flow is blah.. the lines on ur verse n his is way too long.. try to make it shorter as if it was a real live battle.. punces were softer that water man.. barely tapped him.. n vice versa for him.. elevate on everyting..

overall: ya got potential.. jst dont try so hard.. if u do than nothing good will come out.. well ya.. elevlate on everything

vote: ridicule.. was all same.. but fact he had better personals..

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Voted For: Ridicule

flow an structure - ridicule
he came with an easier read verse an set ups that fit the rhyme scheeme betta

natural your bars were all connected an it didn't make it hard to read it jus made it look more like a keystyle but the chooped wordplay lines you had wasn't kicking it

punches an personals-ridicule
ridicule came harder with set ups an punches , his closer was funny . i thought ridicule had the better of this battle.

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Voted For: Natural killa

Dawgs been talking, that a textie be gettin whored by an audio head
So I went over,took a look…….lines that resemble u,just to overfed
3...weak, nuthin overly creative and he's also winning his battle against Tha Q 2-0 so it makes this shit kinda gay.
Stopped in his tracks cuz you got chewed up and spat back down under
Battles which u cud have neva won,taz has been renown for herb asunder
5...ok bit of wordplay, but punch was not all that good.
How the fuck u here to kill us because u can’t beat us went ur knocked out
Getting beat by cartoons,audio n even da blind,is nothing im shocked about
4...ok weak, ya still playing on the shit you already said, change the subject.
This fags rhymes all recycled,so stay away, he aint safe for the envirement
Cuz he's gonna be like former boxers "Trinadad" going into Retirement
4...played concepts, especially the recycled environment concept, DAMN!
Been banned by Vets and beat by newbies,cuz in a few months that’s occurred
And hows ya music gonna go far, when even your Ma doesnt want you to be heard
5...not bad, prolly the best bar of ya verse.

OVERALL: 21/50


suffocating as i'm braiding out ya air,ya fading outta here,as i spit my innuendo array
cuz he's about as close to a young profit(prophet) as nintendo is today**
6...nice punch, original concept and good little multi in the first line.
i bet a rich boy like you feels rebelious and intellectual for one liter-a-chore(literature)
but after this battle,your stuck staring at the sky like TuPAc in ya signature
5...not bad, 2pac lines are really played and gay though now.
crying for the nurse tattle,cuz it's his 1st battle,n he's gonna buffet the best born
but he's a rook-key trapped,like someone locked away the chess board
6...good concept, chess thing getting played now but you delivered a decent punch with it.
10 bars off the top,'s all it took,like old books,we'll just put you on the shelf
could be another Miss Cleo,cuz ya name tells us what ya verse gon do to yaself
6...LoL!! another decent punch with a good concept used.
ya lost ya 1st quick like sonic,n ya now listened to the chronic,like ya shocks stay full
ya dumbass is clueless,shit,ya's behind times like giving the clocks anul
5...ok wordplay, not really feeling the punch though.

OVERALL: 28/50


ok battle, natural came far more consistent with decent punches than ridicule who had far too many played concepts....overall natural had the more polished verse and only fell off with a couple of bars, ridicule you need to come more original and throw in some dope wordplay to add more affect to your punches.

V/ - Natural Killa

plz...RTF on my marvjay battle.....links in my siggy :thumbup:

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Voted For: Natural killa

dis battle goes to Natural killa...shit was close though.....harder punches, better vocab, better flow, nice structure and shit...shit was good.....Ridicule's verse was pretty good as well but he didnt come as hard as natural killer in this battle....thats my opinion...

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Voted For: Natural killa

I Vote For N.K. Becaus He Had Better Harder Hittin Punches

Ridicule Had Some Nice Attemps At Some Personals But They Did Really Hit That Hard And That Last Wordplay Wasnt Very Good At All It Was To Complicated

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