Peace Back vs bam!
 

Battle Rules:

10-14 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

haha

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-15-05 at 12:16 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

BaM! has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-12-05 11:23 PM.

I’ll stab you in the front, ‘cause your back is provoked
Peace is dope…
This just shows; even his explanations are jokes!
You need a scope for your verse, to better see the punches/votes you score
This faggot wouldn’t have me in “Stitches” if he pushed me into the store!
You must be four, ‘cause your disses are just immature bullshit.
If your verse is better than THIS , than you obviously stole it!
Your gayness is like your mouth; you can’t control a muzzle (muscle)

To reply to that, Id laugh, “HA” yeah, I’ll “chuck – L”
Only thing I’m battlin’ off is my pants, yeah FUCK SLACK
Steal the peace from your name and leave you… BARE, back!

…Fagit.

Peace Back has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-13-05 12:09 AM.

It would be better if you weren't even born, for God's sake
My parents planned to have me but you're a drunken mistake
Your two dads hooked up in the back of a crack-place
Takin turns man-juic-in on each others face
I know they taught you all you know about fuckin a man
Cuz the only place your known for takin it's "in the can"
Your favorite part of prisonlife was getting raped in the slammer
That's how you earned your nickname of Bam-the-fag-hammer
And the chocolate-tossed-salads were your favorite food
Takin turns putting ya face in the assess of dudes
Stealin ya name from the catchphrase of Emeral Lagasi
Yer-only wins are cheap crew votes from the girls in your posse
Now yer burnt cuz my popularity's spreading like fire
And the only thing left for you to do is retire

This was feedback posted for Peace Back
 

yo the flow wasnt great but i would have to go with Peace Back on the flow...i think the vote would have to go to peace back because everything rymed and it was easier to follow...holla back at shyea boy

Voted For: BaM!

you had a sorta played structure but his punches were not existant.

Marked.

Yo Daubs, that is the lamest feedback I've ever seen. Bam, if you have any respect for yourself, drop that vote. There was no explanation.

there's no explanation needed, if we remove all the votes, it will take 3 years to get this closed

It was meant to be feed, dq it if ya want...its strate.

Voted For: Peace Back

i vote for peace back becuz his punches structure everything is better........tko peace back

goddamn fucking newbies. up............................

why?
 

Why bro? what makes you any different from them? your record is 0 and 0. Why don't you quit cryin b/c someone voted against you

listen "bro", im a fucking alias. if i was to battle you under my real name i would set a min. # of posts to vote, and you wouldnt get jack shit from these newbie retards who think that perfect flow is what wins a battle... im done argueing over this pathetic bullshit, you suck. 1.

Voted For: Peace Back

Vote for Peace back..

Peace.. i liked your structure.. u made the flow easily followable and to me thats a huge part of a battle decision.. your punches were decent.. i wont brag on them.. mostly, your rhymes were basic words.. nothing big on the vocab..

BaM.. u showed that you did your homework which is good.. the 2nd quote u added tho dint match the structure of ur verse.. i don want to stop reading a verse.. to read a quote.. and go back to the verse.. u gotta make the transition of the two collide..
You had decent punches.. probly the same as Peace Backs.. not a bad verse.. im not sweating it either

Overall Vote is to peace back.. in his punches, he directed them as much as posible to baM.. they attacked him and him only.. Bam.. u attempted that with the quotes.. but u didnt attack him with that.. u just found a quote and made a line to rhyme with it.. thats creative but its not a personal punch.. Peace also had a couple more multis and that kicked it up a knotch..
v/peaceback

Voted For: BaM!

I’ll stab you in the front, ‘cause your back is provoked
Peace is dope…
Quote:
Originally Posted by Peace Back
I said Retardo (like retarded) instead of Ricardo
This just shows; even his explanations are jokes!
^^good personal with the qoute and all....6/10
You need a scope for your verse, to better see the punches/votes you score
This faggot wouldn’t have me in “Stitches” if he pushed me into the store!
^^OK...4/10....
You must be four, ‘cause your disses are just immature bullshit.
If your verse is better than THIS , than you obviously stole it!
^^in the set-up...why is he a four?...makes no sense..3/10
Your gayness is like your mouth; you can’t control a muzzle (muscle)
Quote:
Originally Posted by Peace Back
prepare to meet your fate then, my friend. You're about to get hustled.
To reply to that, Id laugh, “HA” yeah, I’ll “chuck – L”
^^Good...kinda forced wordplay..but ite...4/10
Only thing I’m battlin’ off is my pants, yeah FUCK SLACK
Steal the peace from your name and leave you… BARE, back!
^^weak...set-up was gay...2/10

Ok...good verse.Flow was a lil off due to the qoutes.But as far as punches...the qoutes may have saved you.U need to work on your punches.The nameplay in the closer and the chuck-L were forced wordplay.U need to overcome that.Aside from the personals..not much here.But a good verse nevertheless.


It would be better if you weren't even born, for God's sake
My parents planned to have me but you're a drunken mistake
^^what ur parents plannin on havin u have to do with anything?...3/10
Your two dads hooked up in the back of a crack-place
Takin turns man-juic-in on each others face
^^WOW...this wordplay was forced as fuck...2/10
I know they taught you all you know about fuckin a man
Cuz the only place your known for takin it's "in the can"
^^basic ....these are generic disses....2/10
Your favorite part of prisonlife was getting raped in the slammer
That's how you earned your nickname of Bam-the-fag-hammer
^^forced rhyme and the 1st line is played as fuck..1/10
And the chocolate-tossed-salads were your favorite food
Takin turns putting ya face in the assess of dudes
^^stop with the gay joked..GOD..they not funny...2/10
Stealin ya name from the catchphrase of Emeral Lagasi
Yer-only wins are cheap crew votes from the girls in your posse
^^Crew votes are not allowed in battles...1/10
Now yer burnt cuz my popularity's spreading like fire
And the only thing left for you to do is retire
^^Not a punch..this a compliment..so he did it all already..and only thing left is to retire?..that's good for him...0/10

OK..bad.Flow/structure was ite.But the content...my goodness.The set-ups in your punches need to be relevant to the punch somehow.1st bar was stupuid as your parents planning to make u has nutin to do with it.Only spit the core of the punch and that only.And you also had forced wordplay.Overcome that issueAnd that last bar...nice compliment.DOn't just say shit because it rhymes man..that'd get u nowhere.

Vote-BAM
VOTE IN LINK BELOW
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204478

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204014


HEy Bam...I just noticed you don't have 50 posts...so vote in the link above...

Telling him the only thing left left for him to do is retire is in no way an objective compliment. Maybe the definition to you has that connotation, but to retire simply means to end one's career. People do it all the time. I'm sorry you didn't understand. If you don't understand, don't vote.

Voted For: BaM!

iight even though the quotes and link turned me off...to me u still got this hands down...ur punches were more decent and ur verse kept on flowin better than PB's...PB u had some stuff but u just didnt enetrtain cos it didnt really make sense to me..u shoulda used a lil bit of more personals that woulda given u a plus...ur opner was weak and same with closer...bam instead had more personals which really helped him...both were a lil ehh...but bam was better...