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Rv's multi king
check my perfect picture like some purchased liquor im the perfect figure
your spitting worthless scriptures so wak you dont deserve this mixture watch your thoughts die violently,you try silently like discrestion's admired I guess you lesson's desired im leaving you choking like your messing with wire, if this was a job then im guessing your fired Im spitting verbal abuse while this herb will just use a feeble excuse These rhymes are like a needle once used,leaving you with an internal bleed or just bruised so lets ....back track the crack sack this whore acts wak You extract black yet lack dack to clap back. with each mic grip..each night rip...each mind slip ...bitch eat my dick -YSD@- P.S DIE! |
Ok...well...you had flow.....stayed constant throughout the whole thing.And the vocab was good.So props on that.
But...your multis were forced.Which is what I expected.As the title shows...you based your whole verse on multis.Which is a big no-no.And when you have forced multis..you have bland content.Didn't seem like you were sayin anything either. Overall-4/10 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204478 ^^don't be a fag...I read ur shit and left feedback didn't I? |
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right back at ya.... :thumbup: |
what a dork -_-
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Drop a link fool!
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not returning favor...what a fag -_- |
your feedback was retarded.....this was a multi verse, hence the title.........thats why it was solely based with multies.....
smh.....anyways, i liked it, job line was coo....i didn't like the last line though :S |
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I know it was sopposed to show off multis....but he forced it in my opinion. |
yes, but you were like......"your verse was all multies, which is a big no-no"
like wtf? how is it a big no-no? you're not a pro......too many kids these days think they know what they are talking about.....all you had to say was " i think some of your multies were forced, but overall, it was decent for multies....try and expand your rhyming horizon though" like that should have been your feed, :shoot: |
^^he did base his shit on multis.....it is a no-no...because...everyone knows ya can't just put multis outta nowhere like that.
Ya gotta know what it is your saying...then incorparate that with rhyme scheme. Yea..I ain't no pro in multis..but even I know ya can't just write down multis and put em together without saying a damn thing. Shit...and ysdat had to get sensitive on me... |
ok let me hit you in thead with some multi's
look i'm reaching flagrant wearing bleaching agent like MICHAEL JACKSON I'm a psycho in action with a clever clever plan down in never never land my luck bend while i tuck in cats // tower to height in quota wearing a flowerlike odor got power like Yoda so the force be with me its a gift G |
^ yo, thats why you havn't passed gr.2 yet
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Drakel only thing wrong with that is your ass can't write that feel me?
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well, normally....i dont write things with my ass :huh: but you're comparing your rhymes to me writing with my ass....seriously... wtf? :wtf: |
Drakel nobody is buying your interpretation we all know what i mean that's just society talk but you too stupid to pick up on it damn where you been? dang what a fuck head get lost
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Drakel not smart show me some flow or just go away as simple as that you not funny homey you crummy only without rhymes feel me?
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Drakel's crummy without rhymes, but you're crummy with them.
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haha, wow dude. i think i would whore you. but if you want, i could make a poll to see who's better. |
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make a poll to see who's better? umm...there's battling...try it :thumbup: |
Ysdat ya stuff was cool...the multies were quite alright same with the mets
the closer had me gigglin...nice nice... 1 |
nice job man, way to keep up the multis and still stay on topic...felt it a lot....
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