fraud vs New Edition
 

Battle Rules:

6 - Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-22-05 at 12:51 PM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

New Edition has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-22-05 12:27 PM.

fraud has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-22-05 12:29 PM.

Playa thinks his "fat" spitter, ou.............eat me like piece of cake,
just eat,cauze "NEW" cake doesnt choke,it makes ur insides brake.
And fuck that solo told me to take new teacher....i dont,
Im not like u fraud, my only homework is get beat ya.
But you are with stupid........... so u cant type ur words,
cauze bitch doesnt duck in "net" he looks competitors.

explation

check his call out and his sig....nothing else needed

U Dont Want Beef Or You'll Trigger My Inc, So Obay Your Boss..
You Aint Dieting On Mc's So Like Fat People Weight, Ur Expecting A Loss..

My Punches Like 'The-Art-Of-War, Stabing You With Sharp Objects From 'Hardware-Stores'
Lemme Break This 'PIMP' Like Ya Got 'Larger-Pores'..' Cumming' To Get a 'Beat'in', I've Seen 'SMARTER WHORES'!!

U Winnin' Battles? Just A 'Matter Of Interaction' - Nothin SHORT-OF-PHYSICS,
Damn U Still Here? I'll Just Leave Your Career Here Short-Lived Like ABORTED-MIDGETS

You're Done

ok......lol...........gd job man...no hate...........can we now get some votes.............

Voted For: fraud

IP:


U Dont Want Beef Or You'll Trigger My Inc, So Obay Your Boss..
You Aint Dieting On Mc's So Like Fat People Weight, Ur Expecting A Loss..

could have been better but still a very funny line.. i really liked it

My Punches Like 'The-Art-Of-War, Stabing You With Sharp Objects From 'Hardware-Stores'
Lemme Break This 'PIMP' Like Ya Got 'Larger-Pores'..' Cumming' To Get a 'Beat'in', I've Seen 'SMARTER WHORES'!!

you really need to work on ur structure these lines are really stretch but the content was hard hitting.......... but work on keeping line balance helps make lines easier to read

U Winnin' Battles? Just A 'Matter Of Interaction' - Nothin SHORT-OF-PHYSICS,
Damn U Still Here? I'll Just Leave Your Career Here Short-Lived Like ABORTED-MIDGETS

desent closer.........could have been better.......but sums everything up pretty well.....pretty good drop work on the stuff i mentioned and u'll be even better....keep writing and good luck to both............

Voted For: fraud

fraud

U Dont Want Beef Or You'll Trigger My Inc, So Obay Your Boss..
You Aint Dieting On Mc's So Like Fat People Weight, Ur Expecting A Loss..
3.. Barely decent..
My Punches Like 'The-Art-Of-War, Stabing You With Sharp Objects From 'Hardware-Stores'
Lemme Break This 'PIMP' Like Ya Got 'Larger-Pores'..' Cumming' To Get a 'Beat'in', I've Seen 'SMARTER WHORES'!!
1.. This was just retarded..
U Winnin' Battles? Just A 'Matter Of Interaction' - Nothin SHORT-OF-PHYSICS,
Damn U Still Here? I'll Just Leave Your Career Here Short-Lived Like ABORTED-MIDGETS
3.. Barely decent again..

Overall - 7

New Edition

Playa thinks his "fat" spitter, ou.............eat me like piece of cake,
just eat,cauze "NEW" cake doesnt choke,it makes ur insides brake.
0.. This was just a statement..
And fuck that solo told me to take new teacher....i dont,
Im not like u fraud, my only homework is get beat ya.
2.. Why the shit did you add "i dont" after teacher. That totally bombed the rhyme scheme in this line.. However, the concept had potential.. it just didn't work out right..
But you are with stupid........... so u cant type ur words,
cauze bitch doesnt duck in "net" he looks competitors.
2.. Concept had potential.. but you bombed it with your wording..

Overall - 4

Vote - Fraud

thx for feed................still uppin...................

This was feedback posted for New Edition
 

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up up up up up up up and away she should blow i guess

thx for feed................still uppin...................

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Voted For: fraud

U Winnin' Battles? Just A 'Matter Of Interaction' - Nothin SHORT-OF-PHYSICS,
Damn U Still Here? I'll Just Leave Your Career Here Short-Lived Like ABORTED-MIDGETS
^^^
ANY MIGET LINES ARE PLAYED TO HELL


U Dont Want Beef Or You'll Trigger My Inc, So Obay Your Boss..
You Aint Dieting On Mc's So Like Fat People Weight, Ur Expecting A Loss..
^^
GOOD PUNCH WITH WORDPLAY NOT WORDED TO WELL BUT IT HIT
My Punches Like 'The-Art-Of-War, Stabing You With Sharp Objects From 'Hardware-Stores'
Lemme Break This 'PIMP' Like Ya Got 'Larger-Pores'..' Cumming' To Get a 'Beat'in', I've Seen 'SMARTER WHORES'!!
^^
YOUR LINES ARE STRETCH TO HELL, U SHOULDA JUST KEPT THE BREAK PIMP WITH LARGE PORES LINE AND CUT OUT THE REST... CUZ THAT WAS A DECENT PUNCH WITH WORDPLAY THE REST SUCKED AND STRECHED THE LINE
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ALL AND ALL U HAT DOME DECEN'T PUNCHES BUT SOME PLAYED SHIT AND YOUR BARS ARE TOO STRECHED
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ne
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ALL YOUR LINES SUCKED BUT..
Playa thinks his "fat" spitter, ou.............eat me like piece of cake,
just eat,cauze "NEW" cake doesnt choke,it makes ur insides brake.
^^ IF U SAID...
try eatin me like im a peice of cake faggot
i'll make your stomach break more than cars in traffic
^^
use metafors and get creative with it with wordplay and shit
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PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR ON MY BATTLE... LINK IN MY SIG... AGIANST MR. LYRICIST

Voted For: fraud

I understand your opening line, but the meaning is jumbled because you are thinking of getting too much in at the same time. Your concepts are ok on the whole, though, there is not much to this piece. Fraud you rep yourself so much that you forget that you need to make your rhyming flow consistantly.

my vote goes to new editon

This is because he has a little bit more understanding of the structuring of ryhmes. He did lose me a bit with his second line, but I remember Fraud mention something about battling was a piece of cake somewhere. I re read both as you do and saw that new edition also had better word play.

could u some1 change this vote^^^he said for voting me...i think he polled wrong..thx

oops i voted wrong...could u some1 exchange this please

^^^ do u have some kinda beef with me???

cuz u the only one who voted agenist me and have been talking shit about me since my first tread whats good u wanna battle or something??

Voted For: fraud

Fraud
U Dont Want Beef Or You'll Trigger My Inc, So Obay Your Boss..
You Aint Dieting On Mc's So Like Fat People Weight, Ur Expecting A Loss..
Lol ok 7/10

My Punches Like 'The-Art-Of-War, Stabing You With Sharp Objects From 'Hardware-Stores'
Lemme Break This 'PIMP' Like Ya Got 'Larger-Pores'..' Cumming' To Get a 'Beat'in', I've Seen 'SMARTER WHORES'!!
Good multi...8/10
U Winnin' Battles? Just A 'Matter Of Interaction' - Nothin SHORT-OF-PHYSICS,
Damn U Still Here? I'll Just Leave Your Career Here Short-Lived Like ABORTED-MIDGETS
HAHA good closure 9/10

Good punches multis metaphors an wordplay. Elevate on personals i didnt see ne in there. Work on your strucutre a little flow was good..

New Edition

Playa thinks his "fat" spitter, ou.............eat me like piece of cake,
just eat,cauze "NEW" cake doesnt choke,it makes ur insides brake.
Dont get it...0/10
And fuck that solo told me to take new teacher....i dont,
Im not like u fraud, my only homework is get beat ya.
Nooo 0/10
But you are with stupid........... so u cant type ur words,
cauze bitch doesnt duck in "net" he looks competitors.
dont rhyme 0/10

elevate on punches an personals. New wordplay would be nice your rhymes were played...

v/ Fraud for harder hitting punches an personals.