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Drama Queen vs chip
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15-30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Hate No Dickriding No Bullshit TOPIC: Deadly Visions Crew Battle: The Establishment vs. Trigga Town Inc. Declining The Battle = Automatic Loss. Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 08-24-05 at 03:11 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. |
chip has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-22-05 10:38 PM.
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i got deadly visions, nightmares of bein this bad dream, that puts niggaz to sleep like the father that had me
makin bad scenes in the middle of Krogers, tellin me to shut up pull down my pants and bend over, that made me the grown man that u fear today, starin thru any crew gettin in my way, havin these visions of me bein a legend, peerin thru my own soul so iknow this iz where i'm headin', but hatin dudes, i'm like superman, i'll use my x-ray laser vision lyricism and bring it to this essay, to let u know that Morpheus controls the visions of others, put u in perfect peace and u'll still be sein my colors, and patterns, whatever's on the bottom of my shoe, i'm out of shape, but i'm still able to run thru crews, i'm startin to see things in a whole new light, now know the truth, u gotta be wrong, i'm always right and no hatin between our crews baby, we all right u can be like me on my pc, yo i'm on all night but really my lyrics iz a sight for sore eyes,and a eyesore, to hatin brothaz that wish that they could take away my life force, but most hataz got 'deadly vision' wishin they could stare holes thru me, yeah right, most of these asses literally wanna screw me, let me do me homey i can only beat myself, i see the future one of us will die but i'ma keep my health. |
Drama Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-24-05 03:47 AM.
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Deadly Visions What is there to do when you see what everyone else ignores? When they view the solid ground and you the eagle that soars When there is just no answer left to find and they remain blind To what lies behind your eyes that makes you strive to rewind The terrible things you’ve seen by closing one eyelid at a time Those millions of lost souls that dark sky hides oh so sublime Many faces with no name that placed a bet but lost the game But how dare you claim that they have themselves to blame?! For it’s truly naïve to believe that death does not have a cause To consider it as a mere pause or one of Mother Nature’s laws When every human eye had his or her share of deadly visions That unfortunately can lead to the most dangerous decisions Rapid rush of placing those trembling fingers on rusty trigger To make you get bigger or because you’re just a gold digger No matter what your motives are: once you’ve gotten that far There’s no turning back, you attack and survive an inner scar Then you seek your next foe to crush with one effective blow Although you know it’s wrong, you crave for the blood to flow It’s the most addicting drug when all you really want is a hug But you cannot give up; you need to squash them like a bug And so you keep on going ‘till your hatred turns towards you Your rage will pursue, you’ll view what you put others through You’ll fly across that crimson sky and shed your bloody tears Where my lost soul appears, consuming me and all my fears |
This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
Dope drop DQ! :)
Way to bring one home for the crew...:love: |
^Thanks
Now let's get some votes for this one... |
Voted For: Drama Queen
Drama Queen-Aiight This Here Was Nice Emotion Was Good Imagery Was Great. Vocabulary Was Still But, It Was Good. Your Structure Was Neat About Perfect. The Way You Described It Was Terrific Like It Was Right There Nice Going With That Keep This Up Drama. Chip-Aiight Man Pretty Good. But Imagery Wasn't As Good Vocabulary Was Too Still Not To Much Here Just Basic Words If You Would Of Used Multi's Then It Wouldn't Of Mattered. Anyway Emotion Was Decent. Not As Good Though. Keep Elevating Your Pretty Decent Right Now Man Only Honesty Drama Queen Check Out The Link In My Sig. One |
^You didn't have any battles open so I dropped feed on your open mic...
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Upping this battle to get some more votes............
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Uppity Up Up.....
Let's get some votes in here to get this crew battle going... |
Voted For: Drama Queen
got deadly visions, nightmares of bein this bad dream, that puts niggaz to sleep like the father that had me erm not good makin bad scenes in the middle of Krogers, tellin me to shut up pull down my pants and bend over, aight i suppose that made me the grown man that u fear today, starin thru any crew gettin in my way, aight havin these visions of me bein a legend, peerin thru my own soul so iknow this iz where i'm headin', like deep but hatin dudes, i'm like superman, i'll use my x-ray laser vision lyricism and bring it to this essay, aight to let u know that Morpheus controls the visions of others, put u in perfect peace and u'll still be sein my colors, liked nice vocab and patterns, whatever's on the bottom of my shoe, i'm out of shape, but i'm still able to run thru crews, self glorifiying i'm startin to see things in a whole new light, now know the truth, u gotta be wrong, i'm always right aight and no hatin between our crews baby, we all right u can be like me on my pc, yo i'm on all night aight but really my lyrics iz a sight for sore eyes,and a eyesore, to hatin brothaz that wish that they could take away my life force, nice vocab but most hataz got 'deadly vision' wishin they could stare holes thru me, yeah right, most of these asses literally wanna screw me, let me do me homey i can only beat myself, nah i see the future one of us will die but i'ma keep my health. erm this is pretty basic flow was good aight in some parts but meh......................... Drama:nice shit all the way thru good emotion i dont think you needed to try that hard but good loved the vocab real good shit the endin woz real deep loved this peice |
This was feedback posted for chip
Nice battle......checkin polls an uppin for Chip!!!
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lol @ UNF goin thru my piece line 4 line and only droppin a sentence for DQ, but he voted for her. much love anway, uppin for more votes.
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
checkin my polls bitch............................
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This was feedback posted for chip
check'in pollllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll llllllssss
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Uppity Up Up...Checking polls is nice...but we need votes!
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Upping for some more votes on this battle, close it up!!!!
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Uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn for more votesssssssssssssss
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
chip is hispanic..so...you know...you win.........
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Upping for my girl, good drop baby! :shoot:
The Establishmento! |
Voted For: Drama Queen
my vote, is overal drama queen reason for that her structure was immaculate which gave it a better flow, chip ur flow was not good.Her creativity in her verse was far more outstanding than chips her vocab was much expanded...and an overall 8/10 compaired to chips 6/10 v/drama queen RTF ill leave links later |
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206261
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206261 rtf^^leave honest and explained vote on either battle...... |
Upping for my girl................................
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
I had a long vote drawn out, pressed "Post Vote" and I need 200 posts. I don't have Chip's feedback but I had Drama Queen's in a notepad document so here it is:
Drama Queen: You're structure was absolutely perfect, every line was the same length so subsequently it flowed well. It also flowed well due to a lot of inners. Good similes and metaphors and was consistently a good piece. I especially liked: When every human eye had his or her share of deadly visions. Vote for Drama Queen if I could. |
Oh word...forgot about the post count...
Well sorry you typed it out for nothing man...thanks for feed though! |
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
Checking this out...................................
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Voted For: Drama Queen
Drama Queen-Ok...good verse.Stayed on topic and shit.Had a basic rhyme scheme..but flow was still good.I liked some of the metas and comparisons you did.Like the eagle/soarin one.Really deep shit here.Only line I didn't like was the one about needin a hug.As it appearing to come outta nowhere and fucked with your wording and all.But overall...good verse...8.8/10 Chip-Really...and I mean...really...fucked up structure.I mean...look at the 1st 2 lines.You seemed to stay on topic..as the concept goes.But your wording was messed as some lines just seemed to come outta nowhere.And ur flow was ite..but the words u rhymed weren't.Like that 2nd to last one...you were rhymin me with me too much.And ur lines weren't deep...they were really basic.Newbish style.so next time..work on structure..like don't have one line so long and the one after so short.Make ur rhymes more complex.ANd drop the newbish style Vote-Drama Queen rtf below in 3 days :thumbup:...or.....:nono: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207400 |
fuck Macreep's rascist ass......... good vote from Deranged, although i'm not sure what my newbish style is......... it'll probably go away after a couple more battles.........
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Upping this...maybe for last time but then again you never know...
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Voted For: Drama Queen
V/Drama Queen this was a onesided topical battle.....drama killed it wit her vocab an imagnation...i really saw the topical an understood it batter readin her verse.....she has good ideas an brought out the topic of deadly visions out...Chip u need to elavate....No hate but i can tell ur still new wit the topicals....cuz i read ur's an it really wasnt on the topic it was choppy....work on ur vocab too.....V/Drama Queen.... RTF OR THIS WILL BE REMOVED..1...http://community.rapverse.com/showb...d.php?p=2423063 |
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