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Split Optics- First Solo Piece
www.soundclick.com/Paranoid05
alright this is a cool lil track, if you heard my track wit tizzle and then you play this tell me if i did good for elevation please. Beat: The Roots- What They Do alright i put this together in a few hours so..listen give me feed thanks. Links coming. |
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weerd i like the beat
intro is is kidna ehh though...not too big of a deal your vocals could benefit from being turned up a lil bit... lyrically wise its not bad but your emotion really needs to be upped it just sounds like your reading it off something and the flow bores me a bit, like it could be more interesting....mix it up here and there wit some nice multis or something, nah mean? but yea, i think this could be an ok track if those two thigns were fixed... emotion and flow other than that its coo quality is nice, wish mines was like that :( keep working though |
thanks alot tizz, i did use multi's and i used quiote a few if you read the lyrics there.
yea i'm gonna try n mix my flow around some more next track i wanna do a lil track to The Uppercut beat by 2pac, emotion im not quite understanding how to do it yet. |
beat is iight, aint my type of beat, flow is good but could be better, lyrics are pretty dope, flow is kinda rushed but u atleas hit the snares at the right time, emotion is good but could be better too, but yeah u elevated man i heard ur last peace, quality is pretty good, u should do a chorus man
overall u elevated -Speats- |
A'ight listening...
Beat is trippy...first thing...Vocals are loud...long ass intro...you shoulda started near the 20 second mark...flow is lacking...your lines on long enough...Your voice isn't hitting the snare really at all...emotion needs to be hugely upped...I'm feelin the topic for sure...lyrics are straight...just keep workin at it man :thumbup: |
wtf is a snare?
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beat choice is good.....
Long as intro..............seriously, i agree with Limited, i believe you should have started around 25 seconds into the beat Overall - song was ok, but too short.............in the intro, vocal volume needs to be turned down......Vocab was good and storyline was well develop, but your delivery needs to be more complex....more emotion............ outro - good message..... 7/10 - decent track... |
lol ahhhh intro is effin long as hell lol.. lyrically it is good fam.. just seriously up ur emotion.. haha same with ur text lol.. but yeah.. n have better delivery.. than u'll be like me.. COOL ASIAN ;)
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Cool Asian. upfoshizzle. |
lyrics is coo, but mic presences and emotion is lackin....flow is weak, your speeding up or slowing down to try and catch the snare...you need to make everything flow smoothly make everythin fit evenly. ect...
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i already know that,
if you wanna help say something no one else said yet. |
Loud vocals , beat is diffrent.lol.
Appraoch is ok could of come a bit smother.Flow isnt good. Emotion is lacking. |
aint really like this beat
funny ass intro show some emotion man, speak up dog deep lyrics i guess holla at me |
^how is my into funny?
you musta listened to the wrong one. |
uppin..........
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I'mma be mad at you if you didn't ride that "Roots" beat right
"What They Do, What They Do" that's a classic Beat: "What They Do" The Roots from the illadelph halflife album oh you aint do the beat no justice you had no emotions and your timing was off listen for the snare next time that snare ?uestlove is dropping on that beat should be your focal point with a beat like this lyrics cool but it was like you was bored when you was spitting them keep elevating -Storm |
lmao ok first off para wasnt you banned? bitch...anyways track was ass to be honest flow needs alotta work same with emotion i couldnt understand you stop mumblin up your quality also keep droppin...(or not)..=1=......
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word^^^^^^lmao.
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your a ass, you always gotta be hatin, you think your all good comin from new york, fuck off, i left all that nice feedback on yours and you come and be a ass in mine, i aint gonna get banned again unless someone does somin to set me up, and if that happens that just proves how much of cowards people are, and you dont get it, sure i might not be good for a first single, but you know what, your no better so stop actin hard on the net. poser. |
leavin feed while listen-
long intro for real......flow is garbage to be honest, lyrics is iight but ya voice sounded like a robot, emotion sucks. Some part made sense at the same time wack like the terrisom and realism I was like wtf.....quality was ehh.......keep tryin you'll get better wen the time passes on by.......... |
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i dont like that, sayin i sound like a robot, i sound nothin like a robot man, specially comin from someone who is no better then me and you sayin that, i have better quality then you and a better voice and you sayin that, if you knew how to write topicals you'd understand my lyrics better. learn buddie, you elevate:thumbup: |
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see you cant take critism you did sound like a robot, you're flow was kinda fucked up quality could be better so can mine of course cuz it wasnt made ina studio, and I am better than you....this aint topical its audio and you suppose to go wit the beat which you did but it was like ur eh ur robotish type shit.....like I said elevate... |
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i will faster then you will, dont worry bout that man:) and its not the fact that i cant take critism its the fact that you talkin wit all the "your flow is wack and the emotion is crap" that aint nice man, if you wanna keep a nice calm e friend then i suggest you leave feed proper and show empathy when you leavin critism. thats all i mean, i know im not good, but i know i'll elevate faster then you. sry but thats just how it is, cuz i'll be recordin almost every weak maybe like 3 times a weak or more. i got all that time now that i told my mom what i do on the computer, she aint care i told her i'll be makin money off of it in the summer so she lettin me:) well i havent told her yet but i will. |
:thumbup: good for you lol and you dont need to record everyday to elevate...I freestyle any minute I can so yea w/e just leave honest feed like I did for you....
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yea thats very true, my freestyles is rare now man. trust me next audio track i record will be really dope, but the fact that i have that recordin time is good though ya know, it will be fun to sit in my room n spit and listen to it. |
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^ROFL how am i actin hard? i left honest feed yes i dont like you..cause your a homo...cocky one at that..but thats besides tha point that i left honest feed an son fa reelz no better?..thats why i get nuthin but love from most heads on this site god damn jus stfu bitchin cause i was honest las time i speak on this be a man about shit diss me battle me w/e but dont jus run yo mouth...=1= |
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