Deranged vs Jeezy
 

Battle Rules:

10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
3-0 KO

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-30-05 at 11:28 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.


Win by 3-0 KO

Jeezy has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-27-05 11:30 PM.

Ima be real witcha dogg, cuz this battle isnt my first time..
ill even piss in ur mouth and u still wouldnt spit a hot line..*
Like T.I. "im a king" and ur just a pawn, u cant 'check' me 'mate'..
and like fags wearin blue claimin bloods, bro i consider u fake..
If u got guns then point em away cuz u dont wanna hurt yourself..
Only one u touched was that super soaker u got when u turned twelve..
ur verses are like midgets..they wont even stick out if you held down and 'SHIFT IT'..**
I can ask santa to give u raps for christmas and u still wouldnt be 'lyrically gifted'..
u probably have like 10 accounts banned..so you decided to hide behind an alias..
cuz u prefer to 'bite' the cock no matter what the 'DAILY' is..***

explainations for the slow ones:
*-piss is hot..
**- holding shift and typing his verse
***-DAILY=daily special

Deranged has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-28-05 01:51 AM.

Wow seriously..from now on im setting the battles getting tired of herbs using all 3 days to post and wasting time.

^^he said that in this thread..

this battle's a sure win..I'ma smack him so his aunti'll feel the thump
and wtf..why you in a rush to lose?..when ur' panties in a clump*
ur own mother hates you twice..and she's the one who placed u in strife
and while you claim I'm wasting time...
......bitch........YOUR WASTING LIFE!**
must think you pretty now..but after this u'll be boasting a few cuts
callin me a herb but you the one gettin roasted like peanuts***
u better start hualin ass cuz ur fallin flat..down in the subject
Cuz Jeezy.. I ain't DMX..but I'ma still clown you in public
u ain't rising...you epotimizing..full of whackness in the package it seems
tired a herbs?....how?..when your the wearin them in your genes (genes)***

***-all the bars with the stars are based of the quote

^^for boasting this kinda talk..I expected you to be dope :laugh:

Voted For: Jeezy

Deranged

this battle's a sure win..I'ma smack him so his aunti'll feel the thump
and wtf..why you in a rush to lose?..when ur' panties in a clump*
No played out..
ur own mother hates you twice..and she's the one who placed u in strife
and while you claim I'm wasting time...
......bitch........YOUR WASTING LIFE!**
ok... seemed a little forced. How can she hate twice?
must think you pretty now..but after this u'll be boasting a few cuts
callin me a herb but you the one gettin roasted like peanuts***
ok
u better start hualin ass cuz ur fallin flat..down in the subject
Cuz Jeezy.. I ain't DMX..but I'ma still clown you in public
No wack!
u ain't rising...you epotimizing..full of whackness in the package it seems
tired a herbs?....how?..when your the wearin them in your genes (genes)***
ok punch poor closure

your lines were played an forced. You had some okay punches but your multis were forced.. You had a poor strucutre though. Nice flow. All i can say is elevate on harder punches personals an forcing lines.

Jeezy

Ima be real witcha dogg, cuz this battle isnt my first time..
ill even piss in ur mouth and u still wouldnt spit a hot line..*
Funny shit.. nice punch
Like T.I. "im a king" and ur just a pawn, u cant 'check' me 'mate'..
and like fags wearin blue claimin bloods, bro i consider u fake..
GOOD 10/10
If u got guns then point em away cuz u dont wanna hurt yourself..
Only one u touched was that super soaker u got when u turned twelve..
No played
ur verses are like midgets..they wont even stick out if you held down and 'SHIFT IT'..**
I can ask santa to give u raps for christmas and u still wouldnt be 'lyrically gifted'..
Good
u probably have like 10 accounts banned..so you decided to hide behind an alias..
cuz u prefer to 'bite' the cock no matter what the 'DAILY' is..***
ok closure could of done better

You had a nice verse. Hard funny punches. Nice alias personals. Good wordplay an strucutre with the flow

BreakDown
Punches- Jezzy
personals-Jeezy
flow-Tie
Strucutre- Jeezy
complexity- Jezzy
creativity- Jezzy
wordplay-Jezzy
Multis- Jezzy ( De had some but i felt they were forced. A mom cant hate twice?? Make sense

v/ Jezzy for fuunier harder hitting punches an personals with wordplay.

no hate.

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Good call bro, uppin this bitch

This was feedback posted for Jeezy
 

good battle not voting just looking around.........

uppin for some real votes

not some hate votes..

If you consider all votes against u to be hate votes...expect 4 more coming

Lmao@you thinking your verse was nice and wasn't played

w/e u say..i have no time to argue with you. lets just let the votes decide nawmsayin

yea........werd......gotta wait for some votes -_-

Voted For: Deranged

Jeezy

Ima be real witcha dogg, cuz this battle isnt my first time..
ill even piss in ur mouth and u still wouldnt spit a hot line..*
-7/10-decent opener coulda came harder
Like T.I. "im a king" and ur just a pawn, u cant 'check' me 'mate'..
and like fags wearin blue claimin bloods, bro i consider u fake..
-9/10-probly your best line pretty decent
If u got guns then point em away cuz u dont wanna hurt yourself..
Only one u touched was that super soaker u got when u turned twelve..
-6/10-seemed forced rhyme and wasnt that great of a punch
ur verses are like midgets..they wont even stick out if you held down and 'SHIFT IT'..**
I can ask santa to give u raps for christmas and u still wouldnt be 'lyrically gifted'..
-8/10-nice play on words with the 2nd line a decent verse
u probably have like 10 accounts banned..so you decided to hide behind an alias..
cuz u prefer to 'bite' the cock no matter what the 'DAILY' is..***
-7/10-pretty weak closer you coulda came harder

Summary:37/50 Not too bad of a drop you coulda came harder but not to bad

Deranged

this battle's a sure win..I'ma smack him so his aunti'll feel the thump
and wtf..why you in a rush to lose?..when ur' panties in a clump*
-8/10-Decent opener nice usin personals
ur own mother hates you twice..and she's the one who placed u in strife
and while you claim I'm wasting time...
......bitch........YOUR WASTING LIFE!**
-8/10-the first line sucked....2nd one was pretty tight tho
must think you pretty now..but after this u'll be boasting a few cuts
callin me a herb but you the one gettin roasted like peanuts***
-9/10-That one actually made me laugh probly your best verse
u better start hualin ass cuz ur fallin flat..down in the subject
Cuz Jeezy.. I ain't DMX..but I'ma still clown you in public
-6/10-weak
u ain't rising...you epotimizing..full of whackness in the package it seems
tired a herbs?....how?..when your the wearin them in your genes (genes)***
-7/10-Decent close but coulda came harder

Summary:38/50 Better than Jeezy's by a hair only because of the personals you both need to elevate but nice drop

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uppin 4 some real votes

Voted For: Deranged

open.der
flow.der
structure/tie
vocab.der
wordplay.der
punches.der
personals.der
finish.der

vote.deranged

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Voted For: Deranged

this battle's a sure win..I'ma smack him so his aunti'll feel the thump
and wtf..why you in a rush to lose?..when ur' panties in a clump*
lol nicwe opener
ur own mother hates you twice..and she's the one who placed u in strife
and while you claim I'm wasting time...
......bitch........YOUR WASTING LIFE!**
aight nice punch
must think you pretty now..but after this u'll be boasting a few cuts
callin me a herb but you the one gettin roasted like peanuts***
nah didnt feel it didnt connect well
u better start hualin ass cuz ur fallin flat..down in the subject
Cuz Jeezy.. I ain't DMX..but I'ma still clown you in public
lol nice
u ain't rising...you epotimizing..full of whackness in the package it seems
tired a herbs?....how?..when your the wearin them in your genes (genes)***
nice closer could have been worded better tho

Ima be real witcha dogg, cuz this battle isnt my first time..
ill even piss in ur mouth and u still wouldnt spit a hot line..*
nah aight it was worded terribly but w/e
Like T.I. "im a king" and ur just a pawn, u cant 'check' me 'mate'..
and like fags wearin blue claimin bloods, bro i consider u fake..
nice connected well
If u got guns then point em away cuz u dont wanna hurt yourself..
Only one u touched was that super soaker u got when u turned twelve..
nah didnt feel this
ur verses are like midgets..they wont even stick out if you held down and 'SHIFT IT'..**
I can ask santa to give u raps for christmas and u still wouldnt be 'lyrically gifted'..
rofl nice good wordplay
u probably have like 10 accounts banned..so you decided to hide behind an alias..
cuz u prefer to 'bite' the cock no matter what the 'DAILY' is..***
nah didnt connect tried to put a personal but didnt work

wrk on expanding your vocab these punches are mostly played out as fuck deranged came origainal you didnt he had some hard hittin punches you didnt

multis-none
wordplay-deranged
flow-deranged
originality-deranged
punches-deranged
personals-deranged

pretty one sided huh..............

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Voted For: Deranged

hmm, deranged...uhh, it was okay, a lil non-creative...but you did take this, all of jeezy's lines were mad played........and the fake blood one was so gay........nothing special really in this battle, i did like one line though:

ur own mother hates you twice..and she's the one who placed u in strife
and while you claim I'm wasting time...
......bitch........YOUR WASTING LIFE!**

set up was a little, ehhh, thought.....keep up to both, elevate

v/deranged

thx for voting everyone........uppin..............

This was feedback posted for Jeezy
 

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This was feedback posted for Deranged
 

aaaa cheking votes mayne

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Voted For: Deranged

damn.......

ur verses are like midgets..they wont even stick out if you held down and 'SHIFT IT'..**
I can ask santa to give u raps for christmas and u still wouldnt be 'lyrically gifted'..

VS.

shit the whole verse


wow deranged i really enjoyed your verse..it was moe entertaining


Jeezy...wow

your was good too...but man he got
u

v/deranged

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