Sudden Scriptures.Presents Murder
 

-UNF-:
Peeps See Ya.. Consumed With Demons, Allies Become Void When The Streets Leave Ya
Reap Peepers Clutching A Meat Cleaver, Capturing Nightmares Like Dream Weavers
Mind Slips Back To Reality, The World Beginning To Be Real Wit Me Cease My Own Fatality
My Morbid Mentality, Stops Like My Morality To Chase A Man Around The Corner And Cease Mortality
As My Blade Seeps Quickly Thru His Vitality My Brain Is Consumed With Abnormality
My Cleaver Slashes His Neck As He Took A Step Cuz He Aint Fuckin Wit A Murderous Personality
Tho My Brain Snaps Hold The Cleaver Way Back As The Blades Pass It'll Leave His Veins Slashed
With Enough Force To Knock U Off Track Like A Train Crash Poundin This Dudes Skull Tell His Brains Smashed
No Remorse As His Breasts Bleed Watchin His Chest Heaves Stealin His Soul Like The Best Theives
Soaked Blood Red Sleeves Laugh Insanly As I Walk Down Streets As His Breath Leaves

Hook(Drama Queen):
Many face we have chased to taste their blood
Many tears we have seen for the crimson flood
Many bodies we have dumped on side of a road
Many lives we have ended by a murderous code

Mad Knight:
The Break of dawn and the sun rises slowly on the perspective
In times of drastic measure I will kill to achieve my life’s objective
Driven to kill for just the love of my child…..my only motivation
This pure determination makes this killing fell more like a dedication
This fucking freak…tortures my child even in the nightmare of dreams
But this is soon my time to conquer my plans,live out my killing schemes
Pull up out side his houses were his ford is parked, so I just sit and watch
How the fuck can this perv live in a hood, where to young girls play hop scotch
Tite grip of my knife,I can now see a open door to which I can now hear a sweet whistle
This is the last thing he will do before is murdering of earths dismissal
As I spring around the corner to see his face,one with shock and desperation
Knife slitting his throat as he screams for mercy, no fear and no hesitation
Blood on my face,jacket and floor but still after the killing no remorse
Leaving the bloody cut up corpse behind like it was just lifes course

Hook(Drama Queen):
Many face we have chased to taste their blood
Many tears we have seen for the crimson flood
Many bodies we have dumped on side of a road
Many lives we have ended by a murderous code

Sin'Cere:
Blastin bullets through my ear I can just see tha fixtures
Silent pistols, Cannons, Ak-47’s the bullets always differ
But murder in these street don’t, the cold-blooded thug way
Hatin for jealousy greed is in there mind almost every single day
Like lights in the corner, I picture the screams and blood in snow
Times here don’t grow I kno bout these murders when it goes slow
I cause them in the gangsta streets of Miami everybody knows somethin’
Especially these snitches that are bitches, they get killed for doin nothin’
Murders in different ways but someone dies the same way in the streets
Even when u in ur seat at ur house nobody knows when u gon hear heats
Blastin through ur windows, and glass shatterin due to the gangsta burner
This is life in the hood or is it jus another life in our world......... Murder

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damn this shit is hot....SS.....yes....we fresh to deaf....lol....really man like this collab and that hook is nasty.....

Goodness Greaciuos LOL. Anyway This OM Was Nice Yo, Vocabulary Came Strong. Some Of You Had Multi's In Here Which Is Great For The Flow. Drama Queen Your Hook Was Real Nice. UNF Good Multi's Here Sin Cere And Mad Knight Some Good Meta's Here Keep This Up For Real Though. I'd Like To Collab With Yall Soon. Good Shit Here.

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this was a nice piece.....unf had a good use of multi's in his verse, some lines were stretched though and this seemed to effect the flow, but it was a good opening verse anyway.......drama queen came real nice with the hook........mad knight....you've elevated a lot....your verse was real good....nice flow and nice vocab...keep it up...one of the best pieces of writing i've seen from you......sincere finished the collab nicely....nice structure....all in all....a very good piece.....8.5/10

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Wow. Just wow...this was a great way to put SS on the map, every one came strong, great use of multies, wordplay and vocab...good stuff

Thanx dawg....wow puttin SS on the Map fo sho

lmao u could be down if ya wanted dawg!!!!!!

but its up 2 everyone else to lol

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hot-drop ya,
UNF im feeling ya verse, some parts was raw it flow nice good drop
drama queen ya hook could of been better...
mad knight ya verse flowed decent
sin'cere i thought u had the 2ed best verse cool drop u keep it regular style didnt try to much with vocab didnt try to much just did enough to get the point across cool drop all around hot drop fellas...

7.5/10

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-UNF-: staying very consistent with the multis, some places a tad stretched maybe but overall quite solid. Your imagery was the best aspect in my opinion, telling it in a vivid way. Vocabulary was on point as well

The hook was magnificent of course :thumbup:

Mad Knight: I like how you built your verse up slowly towards the actual murder, good short storyline I suppose. The vocab was suited for the topic, your flow was cool. Imagery was combined with raw emotion, solid work!

Damn...that hook...pure dopeness...hehe

Sin'Cere: nice closing verse, good balance between complex and basic in the vocabulary and wordings. The flow was good and I feel the emotion was strongest in here even though the imagery was there as well. Good job!


What I particulary like about this collab is that all three of you speak on different aspects of murder and view it in various ways. It keeps the reader's interest and the hook sums the overall idea up in fact.

Real nice guys!

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damn all i gotta say is diz is Str8 Fire from eva person on tha roster damn!! i like it alot keep droppin dez type of pieces fa sho
vocab from evabody was above average, structure was on par, meta's were hittin, not ne forced multi'z r nethang of dat nature 10/10 str8 superb

RTF: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206267

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unf-Had a pretty solid drop yet your structure was off, i feel that i couldnt quite grasp a flow on ur verse you had intact multis and ur vocab was ok...can still up on that...u used great imagery....and made your point 7.5/10

hook by dramaqueen-Good hook, had nice multis in it and helped all the verses stay in tact this hook was 8/10

madknight-Your verse was something else, ur structure created a very nice flow...ur multis were ok and ur vocab was onpoint.U stressed great emotion..and good imagery 9/10 for ur verse keep doin ya thing

sin'cere-I felt your verse was the most gangster, lol u had lots of gun talk didnt have much multis and ur vocab was weak...up on those for the future....u still had great imagery and stressed your opinion well..7/10.....keep it up and keep writing

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aight thnx for the feed and yea i didnt really try in this verse i was in a hurry but it came a lil' good but thnx.....for the feed......

thanx dawg for the feed

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