Mimesis vs Deranged
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 12 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 500

Check in by: 09-04-05 at 08:10 PM

Must drop verse in 720 minutes after check in.

DQ'ed for swaying:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207738

Loss/Win removed as per:
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...116&postcount=1

Deranged has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-05 06:15 PM.

http://community.rapverse.com/showp...6&postcount=150



thinking you dope?.. well u must be sinkin in coke...u the fakest,don't lie
cuz wat 'vet'..would say he got owned n merked..and take it with pride^^
all ur wins are scams cuz u got AIm locked in the can..a cheating sage
spit three times as much as 9th...cuz u know u can't EVEN beat em str8
no one's shakin in they boots cuz there's no suspence..I ended this
Rv's infected with whackness..but u show why..hence the 'memisis'*
ur done,took all u could muster..& u a dumb mother fucker..don't start
cuz even with those qoutes in your signature..bitch you still ain't smart
kick u inside n lash cuz your user titles trash...you in front of the line to rot
and yea...you ARE cool....
but that's only cuz ya rhymes ain't hot**

*Memisis-disease that shows symptons of another disease
**check his avatar to get this bar....

ite...I posted my verse fam.....I'm assume i have ur word that u won't no-show.

Uhh.. yeah.. like I would no show..

I'll post something up later tonight.

Mimesis has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-05 06:52 PM.

You seriously think you can beat me, motherfucker?

Get the fuck out of here with your bullshit.. I've seen your battles.. this "pause/paws, waste/waist" shit.. IS PLAYED THE FUCK OUT.

Using that one word wordplay shit is wack when you can't even word it right.

Just, check it out -

I see your in that wack crew.. all up in your sig, yo, now what's to hide
You're just the first I've seen to rep the result of this with fucking pride
You're gonna die son.. I would beat you down, and just peck your bones
But I just say we slap box.. well nah,
..I don't want to wreck your home
Check your dome, yo.. You ain't on anybody's level.. it's all about the pain
Your whole fucking crew are the only people who are farther out of Range
I'ma pound your face.. done with that shit, i dont care what you say son
Cause anymore name dropping with you.. I'd be on the list for gay clubs
Say what? Yeah, nobody's picking you to win.. but now.. just watch this
When I was talking about feeling D.. I was just talking about your mom's tits
All you do is talk shit.. but you're fucking wack, now you're going to hell, why?
Cause I'm bringing the axe to this battle.. but it's not so I can smell nice

Fuck you.

Lmao @ thinking nameplays on me are fresh.

Whatever, kid.

^^Wtf?....this ain't part the verse...so....wtf?...

LoL...anyways.....let's get some votes.

doesn't matter if nameplay has been used against you already..

wat's more important is if specific nameplay i did.... has been used already

Uhh.. pretty much all nameplay have been used against me.

That whole "disease" shit with me is played out.

Yeah, I just felt like owning you before I even started.

Upping this.

Start voting you lazy bastards.

Word.

uppin this muther fucker..........................

Upping this again.

Start voting and shit.

Word.

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Voted For: Deranged

im gonna have to give this to you becuase you kinda owned him with a few lines

M: your shit was not as good as it could have been you had no real good punches or any good similies or metaphores so you didnt really hit that hard, also you personals where kinda weak, i think you are relying on your D/r and your opener to win this? well i think that if you would have took more time on your lines then you would have had a better chance

D: aight you had beter punches and alot better personals although that avatar punch didnt work becuase he might have changed his avavtar? also your perosnals where alil better but i didnt see any real good metaphores or similies or anything like that but some of your lines where alot better than his wich gave you the win

vote=Deranged

RTF the favor please
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207228

Lmao.

Considering you don't like me.. that doesn't really surprise me.

Because, being that you are a bitch.. coming in and voting against somebody like that can only be expected from you.

Only in Front Lines..

c'mon yo....let's not complain about votes...voting is scarce enough as it is.....

uppin.

This was feedback posted for Deranged
 

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This was feedback posted for Deranged
 

uppin 4 yall niggas.................good verse fam

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checkin how long this kid been here, cuz that was wack...
mim..
You're gonna die son.. I would beat you down, and just peck your bones
But I just say we slap box.. well nah,
..I don't want to wreck your home
^^^one qoutable? u slackin dawg

uppin this shit for some votes...not some annoying checkin polls shit.

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Voted For: Deranged

Mimesis


I see your in that wack crew.. all up in your sig, yo, now what's to hide
You're just the first I've seen to rep the result of this with fucking pride
^decent opener I guess, not too hardhitting or creative though 6/10

You're gonna die son.. I would beat you down, and just peck your bones
But I just say we slap box.. well nah,
..I don't want to wreck your home
^now this was a lot better, good built-up, hardhitting punch, nice wordplay 9/10

Check your dome, yo.. You ain't on anybody's level.. it's all about the pain
Your whole fucking crew are the only people who are farther out of Range
^cool bar right here, nothing too "wow" but solid nonetheless 7/10

I'ma pound your face.. done with that shit, i dont care what you say son
Cause anymore name dropping with you.. I'd be on the list for gay clubs
^haha, the last bar made me chuckle, funny stuff 8/10

Say what? Yeah, nobody's picking you to win.. but now.. just watch this
When I was talking about feeling D.. I was just talking about your mom's tits
^again decent creativity formed into good punch, solid 7/10

All you do is talk shit.. but you're fucking wack, now you're going to hell, why?
Cause I'm bringing the axe to this battle.. but it's not so I can smell nice
^good wordplay in last line but nothing extremly hardhitting 6/10

Total: 43/60 = 72%, I feel this was a solid battle verse but some lines felt to me
like mere fillers you know. My favorite bar was the second one because you combined
raw punch with subtle wordplay you know. My least favorite bar was the last one
because you had rather basic punch and just wordplay in last line. Flow was decent,
some lines bit stretched maybe, vocabulary was little basic in places but overall
good though.



Deranged

thinking you dope?.. well u must be sinkin in coke...u the fakest,don't lie
cuz wat 'vet'..would say he got owned n merked..and take it with pride
^lmao, nice punch with a nasty personal touch to it 9/10

all ur wins are scams cuz u got AIm locked in the can..a cheating sage
spit three times as much as 9th...cuz u know u can't EVEN beat em str8
^good creativity in this line, feeling it...8/10

no one's shakin in they boots cuz there's no suspence..I ended this
Rv's infected with whackness..but u show why..hence the 'memisis'*
^like the last line, first is a bit "eh" to me though 6/10

ur done,took all u could muster..& u a dumb mother fucker..don't start
cuz even with those qoutes in your signature..bitch you still ain't smart
^haha true, again nice little personal touch to it 7/10

kick u inside n lash cuz your user titles trash...you in front of the line to rot
and yea...you ARE cool....
but that's only cuz ya rhymes ain't hot**
^I guess he took away his avy but I think I can remember it, again good personal touch
to the bar, feeling it 8/10

Total: 38/50 = 76%, what I feel better about your verse is the personal touches you
added to your punches, you brought him down for real. Wordplay was there too but I
feel your personals were the best aspect. The flow was aight, might be upped little
but vocabulary was good though.

Wow @ 1 person just not liking me, period.

Wow @ your other vote.. voting against me in 3 battles straight.

I'm getting the vibe I start using this blacklist shit.

uppin.............................................

Voted For: Mimesis

memisis- punches are solid,especially the box/house line. I felt that hit hard.
Opener is good. closure is solid.
You have alot more punches, that hit harder than deranged.

deranged. the use of that qoute didnt work to well for you, not sure..just doesnt seem to fit in.
Your opunches are weak, only good punch was the play on his name but you still didnt use it in a creative way.
opener is the qoute lines, didnt like them personally. Closure didnt hit hard at all.

Voted For: Mimesis

You're gonna die son.. I would beat you down, and just peck your bones
But I just say we slap box.. well nah,
..I don't want to wreck your home
I'ma pound your face.. done with that shit, i dont care what you say son
Cause anymore name dropping with you.. I'd be on the list for gay clubs
Say what? Yeah, nobody's picking you to win.. but now.. just watch this
When I was talking about feeling D.. I was just talking about your mom's tits
All you do is talk shit.. but you're fucking wack, now you're going to hell, why?
Cause I'm bringing the axe to this battle.. but it's not so I can smell nice

vs

no one's shakin in they boots cuz there's no suspence..I ended this
Rv's infected with whackness..but u show why..hence the 'memisis'*
kick u inside n lash cuz your user titles trash...you in front of the line to rot
and yea...you ARE cool....
but that's only cuz ya rhymes ain't hot**


im thinking mimesis didnt go as hard as he could
didnt like the way you rhymed some of ya bars, out of character, but still had those^^that i like, dugg the closer alot

d came good.....im not sure i read you b4 unless im too dumb to know ur alias (probably)
but those were the bars i liked from urs....
u had personals but they didnt connect as hard as they couldve
the 9th degree one wasnt worded good
the smart one lacked hit power, and the hensley
one wasnt really a strong punch
BUT still nicely done


this was close but in the end i gotta say
honestly mim still took it
d was probably one re worded bar from the win
dont hate me
honest opinion

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Upping this.

Keep voting and shit.. nah mean?..