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Drama Queen vs Immense
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20-30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting TOPIC: The Black Box ((be creative)) :thumbup: werd Crew Battle: The Establishment vs. Livin' Legends G'Luck to both. :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 400 Check in by: 09-13-05 at 04:10 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. Closed - expired battle win |
Immense has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-12-05 02:02 PM.
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Drama Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-12-05 03:53 PM.
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The Black Box Awake yet unable to open my hollow, heavy eyes Blinded by a sunrise in this midst of cloudy skies Carefully touch around the grimy, unstable ground I seek yet nothing is found but a mere alien sound I seem to detect from inside this cold, moist cave Unaware whether to behave as a master or a slave Though I believe we've got to obey our Earth's laws Because we're only humans, with our foolish flaws Rolling, rumbling thunder in depth of the mountain Suddenly spitting crimson clusters: fiery fountain Arise from my position, in back of mind a mission To try and define the birth of a bass as a musician Parting with my current abode for a perfidious road Mountain proceeds to explode, a dim dark showed High threes casting shadows on own mortal being Rapidly move along that you would think I’m fleeing All scenarios start racing deep in this mind of mine Suddenly shivers down my spine as I view a shrine A gloomy room filled with scent of flowers in bloom Yet the walls are painted pitch-black: sign of doom I go further and there…! On the table lays a present But something tells me it might not be as pleasant I study the little package: it says ”the secret of life” May this be dagger of a knife or an end to all strife? Should I take this unique chance with both hands? And reveal God’s plans and maybe even demands My mind is torn apart though I obey the gift’s locks Who knows what shocks come with the black box? I was tempted to open as if it was fruit so forbidden Though I know it was right to keep mystery hidden |
Couples grasping for each other...so desperate to clutch... Last minute phone calls to loved ones..."kids we love you so much"... Tearful last good byes...a stone throw away from deaths bed... Fataly gasping a last breath...suddenly the phone becomes dead... Humanitys soulful trickster...as their right to life is forbidden... The flight recorders black box is were all the answers are hidden... Feelings of self-worth blackened out...past mistakes all forgiven... Frantic leaps for survival...safety demonstrations overridden... Hugs and kisses...turbulance hits as the emotions unravel... Air meals flying around like the flight was space travel... Suitcases sprung open...peoples possesions slung to the floor... Images like those of a war as the blood increasingly pours... Captain speaks over the microphone...pleeing for calmness... But passengers screams prove the situation is far from harmless... The air-craft starts to plumit...like gravity overpowers above it... Not even 395 frantic passengers prays can overcome it... Suddenly the lights go out...pitch black at 10,000 meters above ground... Screams stop...all noise blackened out...not even the tiniest of sounds... Souls lost...speech meaningless...all these mindz confound... The mysterys of the black box still is...and always will be unfound... |
This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
Polls and all that ish. Dope drop Drama Baby......
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
Checking this out like whoa..........................
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
pollz............................................. ....
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This was feedback posted for Immense
Nice both of you, good luck.......................
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
checkin .
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Why are topicals so slept on.....................?
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
pollz fam..............................................
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Upppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp.
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Fuckin' vote on this people so the crew battle can be closed.
Next person to check the polls is a fuckin' faggot. |
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Upping this to the very top of the page! Vote up please
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0-0 wow..................
vote bitchettes...... |
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Upping allllllllllllllllllllllllll the way to the top!!!!
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No one voting? :(
Darn...this ain't fun lolz... Vote people! |
wow........no votes........still, werd must've gotten around about how gay this battle is, oh well....too bad.
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Upping this for the crew battle to be closed.
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Come on...
Vote on this one... It's been open for too long... |
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To get some votes! |
This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
you got this...........................................
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Thanks man for feedback I guess hehe
If only someone'd vote... |
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Uppity Up Up |
Voted For: Drama Queen
Drama Queen- your verse was good n all..thought it was nice...flow was good n all...stayed with it from beginning to the end nice flow...wordplay was good too n all...vocab was great too i thought...also you stayed on topic n all...i thought this was a nice piece overall you got this with just better wordplay...and had better flow too...and a better topic and piece... Immense- aight verse...structure was good n all easy to read n shit...wordplay good...vocab wasnt the best but good...i mean you could have done better i thought...ummm your flow was aight some times it was a little off n all i thought...overall you did well too close battle but gotta give it to drama queen... Vote For 1 My Battles in my Sig (RTF)...OR VOTE WILL BE REMOVED.. |
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Voted For: Drama Queen
Wow :shocked: This Is By Far The Hardest Decion I've had to make in a while But here It Goes DQ I Def Like Yo Piece It Was SO Interspoken and so ,..,......unspeakable anmd you came with some great vocabualry and you stayed on topic a 100% through the whole verse you had a great stroy plot which is great in topicals and You overall dropped a great verse so I had to give my vote to you in this battle It was a hard decision others might think different but this is my opinion so my v goes to DQ Immense I Like your drop it was What I call riding the edge ....its like when I know Something bout to happen and it does it was sort of too unpredictable and I was expectin that kinda plot to come from that topic just from reading it ....no joke your drop was great but it was too ordinary ....soryy I had to give my v/ to DQ my v/ DQ If in free time please RTF if possible Thanx -This Has Been courtesy Of- -Aimez Voting Outlet- |
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