Intermental - "My Dream" (dope track)
 

www.soundclick.com/intermental

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209553
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209515

Therse the links I fed on, top track WWW.SOUNDCLICK.COM/INTERMENTAL

MY DREAM HOLLA AT DUDE

Listenin While Typing.............Good Beat- I think i tried that beat Nice Flow good lyrics nice deep track you should put ya lyrics up cause i cant hear all ya said lol...overall real nice track

I actually didn't like the beat...but I like how you upped ur rhyme scheme early on in ur flow...nice internals there...flow was decent to good

ur delivery for this type of song was good...ur style isn't overly amped...but it isn't as ladi back as say, Biggie...u got ya own thing

overall, not bad dawg


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yer nice track. i wasn't feelin the beat 2much either, although you hit alot harder lyrically in this track, then a lot of your other tracks, which is gud. had a better flow aswell. 8/10

thanks yall personally I loved this beat but I apreciate the feed

yo wassup mayn

yeh i was feeling this song lyrically.....as Q said your style's not too laid back but not too like abrasive if you know what i mean

good drop mayn

~peace~

Yeah Im feelin that thanks......

nice nice... nice :shoot: :shoot:

^^^Thanks for goin in depth...but at least you listend to it

the beat you used was kinda wierd but its not bad. your hook is pretty good actually. flow is not bad the first verse it was wierd and sketchy but it pciekd up in the 2nd through out. emotion aint to bad could use a bit of work but your commin along nice man. maybe turn your vocals down a bit though. but overall nice lil track. 1

thanks upppin..........

^^^^^^^^^^^Good Shit man................................

Thanks.............

uppppin..................

beat is boring
not feeln the voice at all
flow and everything is very sloppy
delivery and everything needs a lot of work
not a fun track to listen to
lyrics not too good, but its hard to listen when its not fun to listen too
naw mean
3/10

beats ok...
right off the bat i can tell your delivery/emotion needs some work
some parts of the song jus sound like your reading your lyrics off
it hurts your flow a lot

im thinking that if you up your emotion, your flows gon increase a hell of a lot with it...so work on that first.
lyrics wise its str8, i was actually feeling the hook quite a bit...
overall a decent track, just work on that emotion man...

hit me back wit some feed
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2460436

IIte dawg will hit back with feed 2morrow, yo thanks and Ill be workin on the emotion alot