yo yo yoimbatman vs Big_O
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 12 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-01-05 at 04:46 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Big_O has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-28-05 04:50 PM.

yo yo yoimbatman has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-30-05 11:57 AM.

You call your self batman
Then wheres Robin?
He's got his pants down and your the one bobbin*

Youz a sick muther fucker
Talkin like a trucker
Facing me man ... your a sucker

You know what your in for?
time for me to close the door
I got one thing to say your moms a whore!

(Last parts just some immature joke)

Bobbin*- Like Bobbin for apples

Wrote it in like 3 minutes

Dude you gonna drop?......................................or what

Bitch who do you think you are?
Do you really think you can hang wit Big Jay R?
Cuz i spit poison Ill send you back where you came from.
No nigga will step to me I make the toughest gangsta run.
Thats right pussy You pressed that button.
Now we battlin and im showin that you aint got Nuttin.
So Fuck you pussy and have a good one.
Dont take shit to seriously this is about havin fun.

I never said i was a rapper. My name is a joke My real "rap name" is Jay R. I just wanted to try this out. It was fun. Maybe if i get some good comments ill stick with it.

Bitch who do you think you are?
Do you really think you can hang wit Big Jay R?
Cuz i spit poison Ill send you back where you came from.
No nigga will step to me I make the toughest gangsta run.
Mutha fucka you cant even rhyme on beat.
You cant win when we meet.
Thats right fagit You pressed that button.
Now we battlin and im showin that you aint got Nuttin.
So Fuck you pussy and have a good one.
Dont take shit to seriously this is about havin fun.

I added something else I wrote it on spot i clicked the button on accident and didnt realize it. I was righting it as i was going. Are we allowed to edit? it never said that in the rules.

No man you cant edit ........You may get DQed for that im not gonna report you but somebody might....You aint that bad either man but theres to much self glory

This was feedback posted for yo yo yoimbatman
 

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Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

you won cause of your last line, but overal bth a you need to elevate alot.'


Last line took it due to its content. "all about hving fun" couldnt agree more

Voted For: Big_O

lmao..herbs these days...wut has this site come to?

werd^^^ yall need to elevate on the real and so called jay r why arent you that good if using this name???

This was feedback posted for Big_O
 

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thats the first rap ive ever written. I didnt sit down and right it either. I wrote it as i was typing. so it took me like 3 minutes.

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Just so we know im going by my first verse not the second.

Voted For: Big_O

yo yo yoimbatman-
You kept asking questions blah blah yea yea....Very very basicNot many punches just statements not much wordplay, you need alot more of flow.. I don't see any that even make sense.... overall it was kinda poor...........

Big_O-
Mmmm...The way you wrote it was like for audio...I dunno if you write it or not i dunno. The flow was alright...Now the wordplay with the flow of the sentence, didn't really make sense or didn't care too much for it. Overall you did ok against him.. nothin i would dig...

telling me that it was poor isnt helping me develop Its just knocking me down. Did you not read where i said it was my first time. Give me examples.

Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

yo im givin this one to yo yo yoimbatman cuz he was more creative and had som iight wordplay and vocab...keep it up both of you and big_o you really need to elevate...hit me bak

Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

elevation is in order right here for real. both of you had a poor and simple rhyme schemes.and your flows were both off key, especially Big who, to be frank, had a horrendous structure and flow.the punches were virtually non-existant and i dont think i saw more than one attempt at wordplay.
big o tried to use a personal but that was a poor attempt to say the least, but hey it was the only personal in the battle.

ima vote for yoyoyoimbatman just for the simple fact that he had a better structure and flow.

i cant comment on the punches cos they were equally lame.wordplay/metas/similies was non existant and i cant say anything about those aspects either

but based on the only two aspects that were apparent in this battle, ie structure and flow im gonna have to vote for batman

v/yo yo yoimbatman

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Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

Big_O - WHACK, it flowed ok, but the punches were horible.

Best Line - NONE

Worst Line - ALL of Your Verse.

yo yo yoimbatman - Better then Big O, your had "ok" punches, and a iight flow.

Best Line - Cuz i spit poison Ill send you back where you came from.
No nigga will step to me I make the toughest gangsta run.

Worst Line - Bitch who do you think you are?
Do you really think you can hang wit Big Jay R?

OVERALL - This was a bad battle. Yo yo yo wins because he atleast tried punches.

Vote - Yo yo yo

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uppin fo my niggaz battle..........shya...hit me bak

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read my rhyme yo yo yoimbatman isnt my rap name. I registered this acount in school with like 50 kids behind me messing around i made it. My rap names "j r" My initials and im a junior so yea.

bicth there was 10 kids and a german teacher behind you!!!who tha fuck you tryna play?!!!...lol...j/k bout callin you a bitch...uppin fo this last vote fo my nigga yo yo yoimbatman

uppin 1 more votte come on guys!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

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Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

you got this one....but you did self-glorify too mch...
also big o bit part of his drop.
I dont have to explain because there is no need to.......