Given Light vs Mentalz
C.S. vs LL
Battle Rules: 6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting you 2 need to agree on a topic good luck to both of you Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 10-08-05 at 05:53 PM Must drop verse in 7200 minutes after check in. Expired battle close - win |
Given Light has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-06-05 07:19 AM.
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Mentalz has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-06-05 12:45 PM.
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Mic Night
The rhyme never came swiftly to me Just another 8mile night in this damn city I always dropped to the hardest degree Flowed like HIV in Africans blood, see This was me, my job, if you ever heard me plea So I could pay my rent, never let these tears bleed The club is bouncing, kids getting knocked out 2nd round, only 1 bout, what is this shit about Teens faking their age to get in and get wrecked Cause the owner doesn’t get affected, nah he collects Mistakes he don’t correct, I mean what do you expect Not once, never has this guy connected, and gained respect He’s an official hustler, and I wanted to call him down That was my crown, I wanted to be known all around It was time to engage, within these people, caged Beat starts, Dj knew how to do, he was well aged The count in, and he began to spit, how much he made And how I can barely get by, working on minimum wage He stutters and stops, looks in my eyes and sees my rage On no matter how hard he spit, I’d still be on the next page Times up, he choked this was the shit, I made him a bitch Flipped switch, it me and me on this track, from rags to rich My time to shine, pulling out magic, Mage was new nick And I began to tear, and to rip, so intense, he bit his lip Fully equipped, and I exposed this bitch, for all that he did And now I sit here, speaking in the damn past tense See, I destroyed his spirit, and his will to go on, hence He came and shattered my dreams and not to leave in suspense But would’ve came in me, was left at the scene of this He was a true G and he shot me down, and I died in these streets And if you knew me, that was my job, if you ever heard me plea… So I could live another day, and never let these tears bleed….. |
'Mic Night'
.. Corrosion noted, for my spit 'chypher' to be exploded .. Untold the bloated erroded mental verbage to be unloaded So I sit backstage, with sweaty forehead on the torn hedge Cos' my capacity is havin' me on the forefront of my store's edge - .. An hour later, what to me seemed like a sour now'n'later .. I didn't want to step onstage, I feared the crowd's behavior However favored, this cat on the Mic stand stands alone .. I have an army at my back with a fabled label to atone - .. Incountered many, dropped a few and lost my bouts .. But I never lost that yurning for that crowds unrivled shouts Untitled louts, I've been the underdog for quiet some time, But the night is mine, Ima turn this Mic around an' just Unwind! "Yo, Yo... Untamed shame encountered, but I unwound the thunders power/ Under showered, till the rain engulfed the fame & countered louder/ I never faultered, I spit my mind with liquid sulfur till it was powder/ Then I lit my coward-ice spirit on fire with unholy salvaged talents/ - Malice, I almost lost the freestyle thier/ However clever & rare, the unsung metaphysical split the air ../" .. He spit's. I sit & try to maintain the same leveled stare .. However unfair the tourny was I tend to revel in that glare I love the feeling, that reeling twist in my stomach cen-tor The very splinter left unhealed speals my utmost common mentor - .. Votes are cast, sorry fellas I only quote the first and his was last .. But fathom that, my verse was phantom slapped and carried back .. Hey, like I said you win & loose some crowds to outasight 'writes' .. But it's just that passion in my heart that adhear's me here to Mic Night. I've been gone all week, this was prolly' not the best I coulda done, ah well. Good luck GL!!! |
This was feedback posted for Given Light
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This was feedback posted for Mentalz
you won lol
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well i do but gl not bad at al ive never readur ur drops props
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This was feedback posted for Given Light
polls and ishizzle................................
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upib this.........................................
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Voted For: Given Light
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I underestimated my opponent, greatly, but I may have a chance, there are differnet weight factors when voting. |
I totally agree and I applaud Given Light on his piece. My only fear is that we'll get slept on. :|
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This was feedback posted for Given Light
both were real close but given light had a better verse....
nicevocab on mentalz.. |
I don't know if that was a vote or not haha. Word @ getting slept on, that always sucks.
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Voted For: Mentalz
Given Light I liked your piece a lot, but I thought you were to basic, your rhyme scheme was not that great to me man, I usually see you drop hotter then that, you used to do crazy shit. Your stucture was alright, emotion was pretty good yea. imagery was like real basic to get more complex and write sayin how hard you'll kill a faker/hater trying to fuck wit ya, you know. anyway good job man. Mentalz I'm very fond of your style, I like it a lot man. You have came along way wit writin skills, I'd like to see you start doin audios sometime. Your flow is pretty good man, the vocab twists shit well and gives it that barrier wit the skills. the emotion and imagery are almost on lock on this. overall really killed this and I just really like yours cuz it sounded more of a audio to me. can y'all rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206341 thanks y'all upps wit the battle 1. |
This was feedback posted for Mentalz
Nice Job Fams,
Way To Lay It Down For C.S. |
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Stop sleepin' on this CREW battle. This shit needs to get done with. Drop a vote and anything you have in your sig WILL get replied to with sincere feed.
Peace. |
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