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Black Arts vs Mr. Multie
Battle Rules:
6 - 10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting good luck Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 10-15-05 at 10:45 AM Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in. |
Black Arts has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-05 09:47 AM.
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this is my check i guess.............its bout time somebody accept'd.........i haven't text in a long time lets see if i still got a lil something lmao.......
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How the hell this kid gonna challenge me nigga's a dumb fuck,
Got it more twist then if the mic lead was round his throat6 like nunchucks i'll disable this kid lyrically, the faggot shit is meaningless, Jacko could have his hand down your pants, and STILL not be "feelin it" I'll cut this niggas rhymes outta existance without a doubt Lyrically I'll break the spine of his rhyme book quicker than Bill bust in Monica mouth |
This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1
I'd tell'em to think outside the box.................................. ....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2 You can be lost and caught in the rain............................. ................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill-3 The only way you'll catch wins from me............................ ....................................is if you smelled me from downhill-4 It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type................... ...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit-5 And come up with an lame excuse like............................. ......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick"-6 This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7 Gave'em a shot for the win.............................................. ................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8 Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9 Black we may have color in common.................................. .......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10 ehh...........something quick y just becuz lmao g/l homie |
explanation:
Jacko had a tune "can you feel it" drop time was real tight for real |
Mr. Multie has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-05 10:13 AM.
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This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1
I'd tell'em to think outside the box.................................. ....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2 You can be lost and caught in the rain............................. ................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill-3 The only way you'll catch wins from me............................ ....................................is if you smelled me from downhill-4 It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type................... ...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit-5 And come up with an lame excuse like............................. ......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick"-6 This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7 Gave'em a shot for the win.............................................. ................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8 Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9 Black we may have color in common.................................. .......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10 ehh...........something quick y just becuz lmao g/l homie |
Voted For: Mr. Multie
This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1 I'd tell'em to think outside the box.................................. ....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2 This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7 Gave'em a shot for the win.............................................. ................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8 Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9 Black we may have color in common.................................. .......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10 VS badly worded bars...and a few played concept. you came weak her black. multie your opener was dope but your structures fucked, fix the ......................................... and -1 shit...you have loadsa potential stay up both. be sure to rtf. no hate. |
s'all good anyway but my computer fucked up and i had like 5 mins to post my verse
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yeah, i knew id seen better from you before..
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its all good thanx fo the feed.........oh and the reason i put the *........................* its because its a continue of 1 bar if i left it right there with out the *....................* my structure would really be fuck cuz the syllable count is off so it won't line up ya kno yea im sure you would've done betta maybe we'll battle again in the future Black
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yeh definitely fam.you actually a cool dude for real....
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Voted For: Mr. Multie
This was one-sided... I'm not into the outside of the box line, cuz I heard it used so many times and I have used that idiom in the past as well... but other than that, this was a clean sweep... Mr Multi had better punches, his set-up was wayyy better and the closer was pretty straight... so this ain't no contest, Mr. Multi won..... 1 |
This was feedback posted for Mr. Multie
Black Arts
How the hell this kid gonna challenge me nigga's a dumb fuck, Got it more twist then if the mic lead was round his throat6 like nunchucks decent at best. i'll disable this kid lyrically, the faggot shit is meaningless, Jacko could have his hand down your pants, and STILL not be "feelin it" eh I'll cut this niggas rhymes outta existance without a doubt Lyrically I'll break the spine of his rhyme book quicker than Bill bust in Monica mouth no, simile was weak Verse was semi decent.. coulda been better wording, next time try to think up harder pucnhes also :thumbsup: Mr. Multie This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1 I'd tell'em to think outside the box.................................. ....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2 this would be better if it wasn't played You can be lost and caught in the rain............................. ................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill-3 The only way you'll catch wins from me............................ ....................................is if you smelled me from downhill-4 eh.. It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type................... ...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit-5 And come up with an lame excuse like............................. ......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick"-6 lol.. funny This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7 Gave'em a shot for the win.............................................. ................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8 lol Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9 Black we may have color in common.................................. .......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10 played Pretty good verse. Some lines were played, some lines were good. I didnt like that downhill line tho... But you took this battle with better punches and more wit. V/ Multie, good battle peeps. Return The Favor- http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=211798 |
for all these view there sure is a lil bit of post and votes..........
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Voted For: Black Arts
Mr. Multie-You had an expected newbie verse, you had extremely annoying structure...you dont have to nessacarly number your bars man its extremely annoying...and all the dots...thats gay too.......umm for your first battle you had some decent punches and attempts at personals.....overall not that powerfull verse...5/10 Black Arts- Your verse made me sad...i thought ud elevated a bit...but still weak punches.....still your punches were far more stronger and exceptable than ur opponents...your personals were appealing and noticable...structure needs to be upped...but overall...6/10 v/Black arts.... rtf in a couple days when the battle is up...1 |
Mystic Mystic Mystic..............you vote needs to be DQ'd for the simple fact that
if he's knows nothing about me how could he do personal and if i kno nothing about him thas y i didn't use personals..........worst feed i've seen ina while cuz im far from a noob ...........................do i smell a Dick Ride........? already lol i'll make sure it get dq'd just for inadequate feedback thanx fo ya time |
Voted For: Mr. Multie
Mr. Multie This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet I'd tell'em to think outside the box.................................. ....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet Could have been worded better.. still decent, though. You can be lost and caught in the rain............................. ................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill The only way you'll catch wins from me............................ ....................................is if you smelled me from downhill Nah.. didn't connect.. It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type................... ...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit And come up with an lame excuse like............................. ......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick Could have been worded so much better.. This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease Gave'em a shot for the win.............................................. ................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze Your concepts are decent, but your wording kills 'em.. Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract Black we may have color in common.................................. .......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match Oh, my god.. this line could have been ILL. You messed it up, yo. You should have said something like; I'm dope.. you suck.. it's easy to see you'll fall and lose kid We're both black.. but your only it because of all the bruises That would have been dope. Good concept, nonetheless. Black Arts How the hell this kid gonna challenge me nigga's a dumb fuck, Got it more twist then if the mic lead was round his throat6 like nunchucks Decent wordplay.. not a good punch.. i'll disable this kid lyrically, the faggot shit is meaningless, Jacko could have his hand down your pants, and STILL not be "feelin it" Played to shit.. I'll cut this niggas rhymes outta existance without a doubt Lyrically I'll break the spine of his rhyme book quicker than Bill bust in Monica mouth Nah.. played.. Overall, Mr. Multie had some decent concepts, but worded most of them wrong.. however, Black Arts came with a bunch of played lines (Jacko and Bill Clinton?), therefore making them not good at all. So, in conclusion, Mr. Multie came with the more solid verse. With some upgrading with his wording he could be pretty good. Vote - Mr. Multie Both of you should sign up for the Punchline League.. you'll elevate pretty fast there. It's a good opportunity for you to battle without messing up your record. |
you can get it dq'd, i did the vote quick....but i dont d/r sry
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Mystic if you say so sweet heart...........meh...dont kno what came over me act'n noob like that bout a lil dr vote *sigh* oh well im still the best dancer thoh
*Pop Locks* then *Break Dances to the Robot* and what? lmao oh and Mem thanx but im not really a text head i do mostly topicals and beats so ya kno i'll keep that in mind thoh..........wouldn't hurt to try text again...........and yea that would've been a dope line lol |
Voted For: Mr. Multie
k. The periods and the numbers showing the lines are annoying, drop them. Also, you used a 'win/wind' line twice. |
Oh shit, meant to leave feedback, get that removed.
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Voted For: Mr. Multie
Punches - Mr.Multie Meta - None Personals - None Flow - Mr Multie Structure - Black Arts Best Line Outta The Whole Battle: Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9 Black we may have color in common.................................. .......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10 - Mr.Multie Other than that .. vote goes to Multie |
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